What Do You Think?

[Espeon Rinage]

What do you think about this im practising for compitions


The Deamons are dwelling
The skulls are scaring
The blood is oozing
The Aliens Arize

There is only one time
Were this aint a crime
And That........
Is the war

I know the War
could be a boar
But there is nothing like this
The Dogs Are scared

The Cats could be
And what about me?
How would you feel if.......
You killed 153


I know its bad but i made it as i wnt along

[pokemon lover]

I like it! 10/10 :happy: ! I like the part "The deamons are dwelling" it gives me the hibbity bagibities:redface: . I impressed!

[Espeon Rinage]

I like it! 10/10 :happy: ! I like the part "The deamons are dwelling" it gives me the hibbity bagibities:redface: . I impressed!

Thank You! its one of my things im going for in the War, i hooe i do well.

[InvertrevnI]

4/10. I didn't like it. I also noticed it had a grammer error here and there. It simply doesn't make any sence to me either. It simply doesn't have a story or point that registers in my brain.

[Espeon Rinage]

Yea. There is this like uncommon tempo in the poem thats hard to catch, its not easy to pick up, and yes bad grammar plx excuse that.

[Seawolf]

What do you think about this im practising for compitions

The demons are dwelling
The skulls are scaring
The blood is oozing
The aliens arise

There is only one time
Were this is not a crime
And that....
Is the war

I know the War
could be a bore
But there is nothing like this
The dogs are scared

The cats could be
And what about me?
How would you feel if...
You killed 153


I know its bad but i made it as i wnt along

Corrected. I don't like the rhyming scheme used much.