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Chaos_Control
03-17-2006, 12:38 AM
This is a remake of an older Fanfic of mine, but this remake is BETTER!

Plot

The plot is that an ancient Evil Digimon, named Yugimon (no offense to Yugioh fans out there, but this Digimon only has Yugi's hair) as awoken from a deep Slumber, and is taking over the Digital world and is trying to enslave the humans, but 5 kids, (and maybe a 6th coming around Episode 25), along with the Season 4 Digidestined, will ahve to stop him. There will also be more Digivolutions, such as Spirit Armor Digivolving, which only the new Digidestined's Digimon can do, and the Digimon need to be at Ultimate Level (Hybrid Armor level is stronger than Ultimate, but not as strong as Mega), and you need one of ten (or an eleventh for Ornithmon) Ancient spirit Eggs, a D-Oracle (the new Digivice), one of these New Digimon, and a Digidestined (to fuse with the Digimon and the Egg). Yugimon MUST be stopped before the Humans are Doomed and The Digital World is ruled by him!

Meet the new Digidestined (Their Digimon's form in the real world is Rookie, but in the Digital World, It's Ultimate)

Eric, our hot-tempered brown-haired gogglehead, and his Digimon is the lizard-Like Komodomon, who is his rookie, the ninja Digimon Chackymon in the real world

Seth, this fic's equivalent to TK, but only slightly more geeky. His Digimon is the bird Digimon Ospremon, who is the also bird-liek Kestremon in the real World.

Andrew, Eric's best friend, who is energetic and kind of a spaz at times, his Digimon is the Ice-type Ape Digimon Orangumon, who is the mroe lemur-like Digimon Leemon in the Real World.

Jolene, our only girl, like Sora and Yolei, only more gothic. Her Digimon is the girly frog/alien/fairy Digimon Gerlimon, whose rookie is the Lollypop-Wielding Pixie Digimon Kandimon

Brian, who is pretty much our lone wolf, his Digimon is Pikamon (who looks freaksihly like Pikachu and Stitch combined), whsoe rookie form is Ekidomon, the punching electric bunny Digimon.

???? is the sixth Digidestined, all we know is that he is best friends with Brian and his Digimon's ultimate form is ?????mon, whsoe rokie is ?????mon. We will reveal him and his Digimon around Episode 25.


Badgermon Village Battle, Intiimon and Aldamon vs DarkMagimon

Our new heroes made it to the Digital world, thanks to thier computers. They ended up In Badgermon Village, and saw Agunimon fighting an Evil Digimon. Pikamon said "Shouldn't we help him?" and Komodomon tripepd into a hole dug by the Badgermon, and found the first Spirit Digi egg.The egg was red and had AncientGreymon's powers, and Komodomon ran up to Eric saying "LOOK WHAT I FOUND! I FOUND SOMETHING COOL!' Agunimon said "Hm.. It's a Spirit Digiegg, one of eleven known! Shout 'Spirit Armor Up!' to activate it, it will come in handy and it's quite Powerful." DarkMagimon said "Oh Great, I'm so gonna die! THEY FOUND THE SPIRIT EGG!" and Eric shouted "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!" and Komodomon fused with his human Partner, to become a dark Brown Charizard-like creature, minus the horns, wings, and claws. Then the spirit armor flew on, it included Agunimon's hair and arms, BurningGreymon's blasters, wigns, and helmet, and EmperorGreymon's Suit of Armor. It then jumped down and flames surrounded it and is roared and his "INTIIMON! THE LORD OF THE FLAME!" and it saw the Evil Digimon, te evil wizard DarkMagimon, and shotued "PYRO NUKE!" and its blasters charged up and created a huge blast of fire and hurled it at the foe. Agunimon then became BurningGreymon, but was still pummeled, so he then became Aldamon. Aldamon shouted "ATOMIC INFERNO!" and blasted a beam of flames at DarkMagimon, and Intiimon finished the Fight with a slash of his claws, and DarkMagimon's fractal code appeared around the Evil Digimon, and the egg, Komodomon, and Eric defused and Eric held up his D-Oracle, and swiped the code. Then the mayor of Badgermon village, Leomon came up to our heroes and said "Thank you for saving Badgermon Village, now Yugimon's goon will never come back here again, well.. Hopefully.", and gave Eric a blue ribbon, Our heroes the nstayed at the local inn and woke up te next morning, hoping to head to Emulator Isle.

Hopefully, Chapter 2 will be up soon!

Pika57
03-17-2006, 01:12 AM
Umm... this is just as bad as your last remake of this fan fiction.

I'd try to give you a hand... but the whole concept just doesn't seem to have any life behind it.

If anything, improve your spelling, explain something, and try to make somethnig of the beggining, not just a few random words.

Also offer some in depth explanation for events, for instance how Takuya can be in the Digital World. Don' just say how, but tell how.

If you don't know the difference between say and tell, I can't help you.

Chaos_Control
03-17-2006, 09:13 PM
Erm.....

Oh well, here's chapter 2.

After a few minutes of riding in a Submarimon, they finally make it to Emulator Isle. The first thing they see is Lobomon getting pummelled by HiAndromon, a large black android Digimon that happens to be Andromon's Mega. HiAndromon attempted to Delete Lobomon, but Lobomon became KendoGarurumon, and Seth threw a rock at HiAndromon's head, and shotued "LAY OFF HIM YOU BIG ROBOTIC FREAK!" Ospremon shouted "SETH! NO! YOU'RE MAKING HIM ANGRY!" and flew up and randomly foung AncientGarurumon's spirit Digiegg. KendoGarurumon got thrown to the ground, but he became Beowulfmon. Seth and Eric shouted "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!" Eric and Komodomon, along with AncientGreymon's Digiegg, became Intiimon again. Seth fuse with Ospremon and became a large white falcon, and gained armor and blades Like AncientGarurumon's. The new Bird digimon shouted "AMONRAMON! THE LIGHT BIRD OF PREY!" Intiimon said "Damn. We're screwed!" Gerlimon said "Ooh, who's next to become a Spirit Armor Digimon?" Orangumon shouted "Gerlimon, it's likely to be you, me or Pikamon!' Beowulfmon shot a Purifying light at HiAndromon, stunning it. Intiimon used Firaga Blast, and shot a breath of Fire at HiAndromon. Amonramon then shouted "TAKE THIS! FEATHER BLADER!" and slashed at HiAndromon with his blades/wings, and defeated HiAndromon. The spirit armor Digimon defused, leaving Eric, Seth, Ospremon, Komodomon, and the two spirit eggs. Seth took HiAndromon's fractal code. Beowwulfmon then changed back to Kouji and said "That was a good fight. I could've been defeated. Thanks" and Walked into the mist. Pikamon said "BYE!" and our heroes took off in a Submarimon, and headed to Freezeback Peak.

Chapter 3 will be greater than last time!

Chaos_Control
03-21-2006, 08:45 PM
Chapter 3

Our heroes took a while to Freezeback Peak, butthey made it. Kumamon was busy fighting Mammothmon, a large elephantine Digimon. Orangumon suddenly got conked on the head with AncientMegatheriumon's spirit digiegg. Andrew shotued "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!" Orangumon first fused with Andrew making a bovine-like form, and AncientMegatheriumon's horns, fur, and hooves flew onto the bovine-shape. The newly formed Digimon shouted "WILDEMON! THE ANTELOPE OF ICE!" and Eric and Seth fused with their Digieggs and Digimon partners to become Intiimon and Amonramon. Kumamon then became KorIkakkumon, but was pummeled into the snow. Then he became the giant popsicle wielding Penguin Digimon fusion spirit Daipenmon. Daipenmon and Wildemon fought bravely, while Intiimon and Amonramon helped out. Daipenmon became Tommy, who is four years older. He said "Thanks guys for helping me, I coul've been killed!" and the spirit Armor digimon defused and left Eric, Seth, Andrew, Orangumon, Ospremon, Komodomon, and the 3 spirit eggs they found. Andrew took Mammothmon's fractal code and Orangumon said "Thank God that's over!" Pikamon said "Who's next? Me, or Gerlimon?" Komodomon then randomly said "I'm tired!' and yawned. Our heroe's next Destination is the Windy Savannah.

Chaos_Control
03-22-2006, 11:50 PM
Sorry, but Chapter 4 will be delayed for a short time, but it WILL be up!

Pika57
03-22-2006, 11:59 PM
Okay, please stop. Your fan fiction lacks decent quality, in areas of plot, grammar, and plain creativity.

Plus you insulted pikachu.

*Last Part was a joke

boltAge
03-23-2006, 10:30 AM
1) Digimon cannot come without pictures. It's just suicide.

2) You lack a proper sense of humour. You're not making anybody laugh by having a Pikamon.

3) Your grammar is at the bottom of the well, your vocabulary is lost in Viridian Forest(Yes, it's hard to get lost in that forest, but seeing it's your vocabulary we're talking about...).

Go read some awesome fan fics before attempting to write one.

Chaos_Control
03-24-2006, 10:05 PM
Oaky, that's it, You're makingme torture you by putting on Chapter 4!

After a matter of minutes, they make it to the Windy Savannah, and Kazemon was fighting the bird like Digimon Yatagaramon. Kazemon attacked with her Hurricane Wind, but Yatagaramon sent it flying back at her. Kazemon became Zephyrmon, but her attacks were countered again, so she became JetSilphymon. Gerlimon found AncientIsismon's spirit Digiegg right behind JetSilphymon. Yatagaramon said "CRAP!" and Jolene, Eric, Seth, and Andrew shouted "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!". Andrew, Eric, and Seth became Intiimon, Wildemon, and Amonramon. Gerlimon fused with Jolene, and became a purple alien/frog/fairy Digimon, and AncientIsismon's armor, along with large pink bird wings, flew onto the newly formed Digimon. The new Digimon shouted "Tornamon! THE QUEEN OF THE WIND!" Intiimon, Amonramon, and Wildemon combined their attacks to stun Yatagaramon. JetSilphymon attacked fromthe air, while Tornamon pulled out a whip, shouted "PIXIE CYCLONE!" and a tornado was created. Yatagaramon was defeated, and The Spirit Armor Digimon defused, leaving Eric, Seth, Andrew, Jolene, their Digimon, and the spirit eggs. JetSilphymon became Zoe and said "I Have to thank you guys for helping me! And are those spirit Digieggs?" Pikamon said "Yup, and I'm jealous of them! When in the name of God wil l I get MINE!?" Zoe smiled and walked off, whiel Jolene took Yatagaramon's fractal code. Brian said "Okay, I bet I'm next to fidn one fo these Spirit Eggs!" and they headed to an old Power Plant in the middle of nowhere.

Pika57
03-24-2006, 11:15 PM
Oaky, that's it, You're makingme torture you by putting on Chapter 4!

After a matter of minutes, they make it to the Windy Savannah, and Kazemon was fighting the bird like Digimon Yatagaramon. Kazemon attacked with her Hurricane Wind, but Yatagaramon sent it flying back at her. Kazemon became Zephyrmon, but her attacks were countered again, so she became JetSilphymon. Gerlimon found AncientIsismon's spirit Digiegg right behind JetSilphymon. Yatagaramon said "CRAP!" and Jolene, Eric, Seth, and Andrew shouted "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!". Andrew, Eric, and Seth became Intiimon, Wildemon, and Amonramon. Gerlimon fused with Jolene, and became a purple alien/frog/fairy Digimon, and AncientIsismon's armor, along with large pink bird wings, flew onto the newly formed Digimon. The new Digimon shouted "Tornamon! THE QUEEN OF THE WIND!" Intiimon, Amonramon, and Wildemon combined their attacks to stun Yatagaramon. JetSilphymon attacked fromthe air, while Tornamon pulled out a whip, shouted "PIXIE CYCLONE!" and a tornado was created. Yatagaramon was defeated, and The Spirit Armor Digimon defused, leaving Eric, Seth, Andrew, Jolene, their Digimon, and the spirit eggs. JetSilphymon became Zoe and said "I Have to thank you guys for helping me! And are those spirit Digieggs?" Pikamon said "Yup, and I'm jealous of them! When in the name of God wil l I get MINE!?" Zoe smiled and walked off, whiel Jolene took Yatagaramon's fractal code. Brian said "Okay, I bet I'm next to fidn one fo these Spirit Eggs!" and they headed to an old Power Plant in the middle of nowhere.

I don't even have to read more of it than the first few lines.

Try to refresh your plot ideas, and fix your grammar.

Chaos_Control
03-31-2006, 08:29 PM
(Sorry, but Chapter 5 will not be up until next weekend!)

Chaos_Control
04-09-2006, 03:21 PM
(sorry I was late putting this up, but here's Chapter 5!)

Our heroes finally made it to the Power Plant, and Pikamon saw Beetlemon fighting MetalMamemon, who lives in this abandoned power plant. PIkamon tugged on Brian's leg and said "I know our spirit Digiegg is nearby! Let's go!" Beetlemon became MetalKabuterimon, but MetalMamemon was still winning, so the cyborg Digimon became RhinoKabuterimon, a tank-like beetle Digimon. Pikamon found the spirit egg of AncientBeetlemon, and took it to Brian. He shotued into his human partners ear, "I WAS RIGHT! LOOK WHAT I FOUND!" and Brian took the egg and shouted "SPIRIT ARMOR UP!" and fused with Pikamon, becoming a humanoid-Pikachu like shape, with a long white beard. Then All types of AncientBeetlemon's armor, from his horns to his feet. The newly formed Digimon shouted "ELECTROMON! THE GOD OF LIGHTNING!" RhinoKabuterimon saw this Digimon and said "I kinda need help here!" and the other Digidestined spirit armor Digivolved into Intiimon, Amonramon, Wildemon, and Tornamon. Electromon said "What the hell are you guys doing! I don't need any freakin' help other than RhinoKabuterimon!" MetalMamemon shot a blast of bombs at them and Electromon countered with Lightning Bolt! and stunned MetalMamemon, and RhinoKabuterimon atacked with his horn. Electromon then finished the fight with his long tail and took MetalMamemon's fractal code. The five spirit armor Digimon became the 5 new Digidetined, their Digimon, and the 5 spirit eggs they found. RhinoKabuterimon became JP and said "thanks guys! I guess you guys msut go back tothe real world before you get killed!" Pikamon said "You're Welcome!" and our heroes went back to the real world, their Digimon reverting to the rookie forms. Chackymon, Kestremon, Leemon, Kandimon, and Ekidomon.

(Chapter 6 will be up by next Weekend!)

akamaru
04-23-2006, 05:05 AM
I'M BEGGING SOMEONE LOCK THIS!!! NO CREATIVITY NO HUMOUR NO ENTERTAINMENT IN ANY FORM AND PLUS EVERY CHAPTER STARTS LIKE
*sosomon was fighting blahblahmon* How is that fanfic material?