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caligal0224
06-19-2004, 10:23 PM
“Hey, are you ready to leave yet?” I spoke into the phone piece, while fixing my shoelaces.

A soft, drifting voice spoke back, “Ummm, yeah. I guess you can pick me up now…would that be alright?”

“Sure, see ya in five.” I replied, and hung up the phone. The person on the other side of the line was my best friend, Jillian; we had been friends since the day I fell off the swings in first grade. I’ll never forget how she was so kind to me, she even offered me her candy bar from her lunch.

“Mom, I’m going over to Jillian’s house…we’re going to the Safari Zone. I’ll be home for dinner.” I shouted down stairs from my room.

“Alright, just make sure you bring your jacket, it looks like there may be some slight showers this afternoon.” My mother shouted back from some part of the house, most likely the kitchen; she was always making new treats for her rare and exotic Pokemon.

I grabbed my jacket from my doorknob and selected two Pokeballs from my dresser. Then I dashed down the stairs and headed for the front door.

“C-ya mom!” I shouted, while turning the silver doorknob, but I never waited for a reply, I quickly darted outside, slammed the door, and started down the lonely dirt lane.

The sky was filled with thick melancholy clouds that hung low in the sky. They were a light gray though, so I didn’t expect rain anytime soon. The dirt below my feet was soft and my sneakers left imprints in the clay-like substance; the moist air is what never seemed to let the dirt completely dry. The atmosphere was humid and sticky; this was the thing I had hated most about summer in my hometown, the thick air that one could never quite elude. Whether it was sunny or cloudy the air was always thick.

I did, however, like the smell of the tall grass blowing along lane. The thick air allowed the scent of the sweet grass to hang in ones nose; I breathed deeply. The grass swayed in wave like motions that reminded me of the ocean. Beyond the lane I was currently walking, and spotted amongst the tall sea of grass, were large houses made for large families. Each house was on acres of land, which was usually used for Pokemon breeding farms. This habitat was the perfect place to raise any farm type Pokemon, like Miltank and Mareep; as a matter of fact, it was the perfect place for many Pokemon to be raised.

I lived in the country, and I had all my life. When I was smaller I admired Pokemon but never thought I’d become a trainer, I was more interested in breeding Pokemon. I wasn’t interested in training until I was about fourteen, so I had a late start. When I turned fourteen though, I did decide to get a Pokemon from the Professor of my hometown and take a few months traveling to nearby cities. I chose a wimpy Charmander, who I had named Flame, as my first Pokemon who was now a lively Charmeleon and soon ready to evolve into a mighty Charizard. I returned to the security of my parents, however, due to homesickness, and I was now fifteen and still hanging around at home. Through my short journey I had managed to capture and buy a few of my favorite Pokemon, and now I was trying to strengthen my team by battling and collecting stronger Pokemon, ones that weren’t necessarily my favorite.

Jillian only lived a few minutes away, so my mom never worried about me, besides, she knew Jillian’s parents very well. Jillian’s mother spent most of her time slaving away in front of her computer; she was a computer programmer and was always trying to think of new and innovative programs for her clients. Jillian’s father was much more laid back; he worked at the Safari Zone. Once a week during the summer he would open the gates for us after hours, and Jillian and I would wander around in the high lawn. We made it a game to only bring in one Pokemon to the zone; we would sit in the tall grass and wait for a Pokemon to approach and battle, hoping to capture it. We had only captured one Pokemon in our years of this game, and we had done it together last summer. We caught a Wobbuffet, which I agreed to let her raise. This summer I was going for much bigger Pokemon, and I wanted to catch them on my own, for myself. Today, our first day of summer vacation, I was planning on catching a Rhyhorn, and I didn’t want any of Jillian’s help. I also had a little trick up my sleeve, and was hoping Jillian wouldn’t find out.

When I had arrived at Jillian’s home, she was waiting at the edge of her lane, like normal. She had fair skin and glowing green eyes that matched the swaying summer grass. Her unusually dark brown hair hung just below her shoulders and always blew in her face; she had bangs too, which she had been trying to grow out; they now bounced along her thin cheeks.

“Got your Pokemon?” I asked her.

“Sure do…and I’m ready to catch some Pokemon too!” She grinned. Her eye’s lit up as she waited for my approval.

“Let’s go then!!!” I shouted.

We walked along the country lane and chatted about our sophomore school year that had just ended. We giggled at the stories and memories we brought back to life. We both loved the fact that the school year was officially over, and agreed that it had been the hardest year yet.

As we continued down the lane to the Safari Zone, the wind continued to gently blow, tossing our hair in each and every direction. We joked as it tickled our faces. The sky was still a light gray, but it seemed that the clouds had raised themselves from the ground, and the chances of rain seemed less and less; I was still glad my mother had suggested a jacket though, the air had a slight chill to it as it pressed against us.

Before long, we arrived at the Safari Zone. We walked up to the big double doors as the remaining visitors walked out. I held the door open for my friend and admired the small building we were about to enter. It was painted a jungle green and sunset orange, an odd combination, but I hadn’t seen it since last summer and I was glad to return. I walked in the doors and found Jillian’s father behind the large front desk. Even though Jillian’s father was laid back, I always remember him having a clean desk; all his papers were neatly organized. Even the pictures on the walls were always perfectly straight and evenly aligned. Most of those pictures were of people who had won prizes for their catches and I hoped to get my picture on the wall someday.

“Hi daddy, we’re ready to test our skills…” Jillian smiled at her father who was relaxing behind the desk.

“Oh, hey there…I’ll get you guys a few Safari Balls and you can be on your way.” He smiled back and went towards a large cabinet in the back of the room.

“Are you happy that school’s out, Kaelin?” He asked me, while scrounging through the cabinet.

“I sure am, and this summer I plan to capture a Rhyhorn, here, in the zone.” I replied.

He turned around with three small yellow and black balls in each hand; then he pushed the cabinet closed with his shoulder.

“Well, good luck, I’ve got some tough Rhyhorn out there this year.” He chuckled and handed each of us three balls. “Remember, you guys need to be back here before it gets too dark, we may have some heavy rains this evening.” He brushed his dark brown hair back with a swift sweep of his hand; his matching eyes looked sternly at us, warning us to obey his instructions. I realized how much Jillian looked like her father the older she got.

Jillian and I replied in unison that we’d be back before long, and then skipped out the back doors.

“So, what are YOU going to catch?” I challenged Jillian.

“Well, I’M going to catch a Heracross, or maybe a Girafarig…” She smiled back, seeming to accept my challenge.

“I’m going to go over here,” I said, while pointing towards a dryer portion of the land. “Are you going to follow?” I questioned, hoping she’d stay back so I could be alone.

“No way, I’m going to stay right here.” She said, positioning herself deep within the tall shady grass.

caligal0224
06-19-2004, 10:25 PM
I had nothing else to say, so I left, and made my way towards the area known to have Rhyhorn roaming about. Where I was going to hide, I wasn’t sure, the dryer the land got the less places there were to hide. The land got drier and drier the further I walked, soon the soft lawn turned to reddish clay-type dirt. I finally found the desired area and managed to find a small patch of tall grass to sink into.

I waited and waited; nothing was happening, no sounds or signs of anything, at all. The tall grass tickled my ears and irritated me; I pushed it back and peaked about. The land was rocky and red in color, and there were many jagged cliffs and dirt mounds all around. The clouds were no longer high in the sky; they were much darker now and looked heavy. They pressed against distant mountains and seemed to almost dip into the valley I was currently in.

Being so far from the small, warm, comforting building where Jillian’s father had been made me nervous. I was not only in unfamiliar grounds, but I was alone as well. I now found myself wishing I hadn’t been so eager to leave Jillian behind. I tried to brush the idea out of my mind. Then I heard footsteps somewhere close by.

‘Alright!!!’ I thought, ‘Here’s my chance!!!’ I quickly sprang out of the grass to see a long legged Dodrio standing before me. It curved its three long necks and cocked all three heads with curiosity, observing me, then screeched loudly and rushed off into the distant grass. It seemed to giggle as it ran, teasing and taunting me until I could no longer see it.

“NO!!!” I shouted, while kicking red dirt and pebbles into the air. I didn’t really want a Dodrio anyway though, so I headed back to the tall grass that had concealed me and waited once more. Before long I heard more footsteps, the footsteps seemed slow and steady, when I thought they were close enough, I pounced out of the brush.

“I got ya this time!!!” I shouted.

“Yeah, you sure did.” Jillian said, giggling.

“Ummm, I thought…I thought you were a Rhyhorn…” I said, looking towards the ground. I could feel my cheeks turn a hot red with anger and embarrassment.

“Looks like you need help after all…I’ll help you, if you help me.” She smiled, begging me with her intelligent green eyes. It was amazing what those green eyes could do to a person; she could talk almost anybody into doing anything with those tempting green jewels for eyes. I really didn’t want her help, especially because I didn’t want to reveal my sly trick on capturing this Rhyhorn, but I didn’t want to hurt her feelings either. This Rhyhorn had meant a lot to me, so I decided to give in to her pitiful begging.

“Fine…you can help…” I mumbled, and then walked with her back to the tall grass that had once again concealed me.

“Shhhh, we have to be quiet…when you think there’s one coming, let me know and we can jump out together and surprise it.” I whispered. Jillian nodded with approval.

We waited together quietly; it seemed like hours, before we heard footsteps. Together we counted silently ‘one, two, three’ and jumped out of the grass. Finally, this time it was a Rhyhorn, and we had taken it by surprise.

“Go Charmeleon!!!” I shouted, tossing my Pokeball to the ground. My muscular Charmeleon eagerly pounced out of his Pokeball and shook with pleasure. He looked at me with an evil burning in eyes, snarled at his opponent, then roared a mighty roar; this roar was his famous roar that warned he was ready for battle. The Rhyhorn dug its feet into the ground, as if telling the Charmeleon to bring it on.

“WHAT?!?! You brought a Charmeleon to fight a Rhyhorn?!?! Rhyhorn is strong against fire type Pokemon and Charmeleon is weak against rock type Pokemon!” She yelled with shock at me.

I shouted back, “Uhhh, well, he’s the strongest Pokemon I’ve got right now. He needs the experience anyway, and he’s going to evolve soon. Can’t you see, he’s ready for anything?!?!”

“Well, good thing I came prepared! Go Hitmonchan!!!” She too threw her Pokeball to the ground. A large Hitmonchan bounced out of the Pokeball and showed the Rhyhorn a few of his fantastic muscle poses. The Rhyhorn only dug its feet further into the ground, stabilizing itself and readying for battle.

The Rhyhorn was, however, surprised by the double threat, which allowed us to have the first moves.

“Okay Flame, we’ve got to work together or we can’t get this done…use your Rage Attack, now!” I ordered the Charmeleon.

“We’re going to help. Hit-Chan, you have to work with the Charmeleon to get the best results. Okay, use your Comet Punch, quick!” She also ordered her Pokemon into battle.

My Charmeleon ran towards the Rhyhorn with its mighty claws and big attitude, attempting to slash at the Rhyhorn. The Rhyhorn managed to dodged the Charmeleon but was taken by surprise with the Hitmonchan’s powerful and speedy punch. Stunned by the potent blow, he ignored the Charmeleon and went for his weakness, the Hitmonchan, with his Stomp Attack. The bulky Rhyhorn was too slow for the lightning fast Hitmonchan, and before he was able to throw down his mighty foot, the Hitmonchan let loose another Comet Punch, and rapidly after, a Mega Punch. The Ryhorn was stunned once again by the Hitmonchan’s experience.

Charmeleon began to use fire attacks on the Rhyhorn, but nothing resulted from the Charmeleon’s fire strength. The brutal Rhyhorn seemed resistant towards the burning flames.

“Use your Rage Attack again, Flame. Then try your Slash Attack…it’s no use using your fire moves here.” I continued to order my Charmeleon around.

caligal0224
06-19-2004, 10:25 PM
Having been concentrating on the Hitmonchan’s next move, the Rhyhorn wasn’t expecting my Charmeleon’s next attack. The Charmeleon managed to rapidly scratch at the Ryhorn, whose skin was as that of a mountainside.

Enraged and insulted, the Rhyhorn switched his attention to my Pokemon and hooked the Charmeleon on his horn; he then threw him to the ground accompanied with a powerful stomp that shook the land. Afterwards, he lifted his horn towards the Hitmonchan, as if daring it to continue.

“Hitmonchan, don’t be intimidated, give it a good punch any time you can, that’s all I can say. You’ve had enough training to know what to do, now use your knowledge!!!” Jillian encouraged her Hitmonchan. The Hitmonchan followed her orders and began to skip around, letting loose a punch every chance he could.

After seeing what effect her encouragement had on her Pokemon I tried to encourage my Charmeleon, “Come on, Flame. Please…get up…we’ve got to catch this Rhyhorn, I know he’s a winner, just like you, we have to add him to our team!”

The battered Charmeleon stumbled to his feet and looked back at the large Rhyhorn who had now completely forgotten about him. Without warning, rain began to pour down and the distant booming of thunder rumbled in agreement with the stomping of the offended Rhyhorn.

“Please, don’t give up yet, give it another Rage or Slash Attack…anything, just do anything!” I shouted to the trembling Pokemon, who questioningly followed my every command.

The Charmeleon roared once again and threw out one last burst of energy with a Rage, Slash and Fire Spin, all in one! I was amazed at the Charmeleon’s will to please me. Although the attack was short, it was extremely powerful and the Rhyhorn was thrown back with astonishment and pain. The Charmeleon had used up all its fight in that last attack and now fell to muddy ground with exhaustion. Rain trickled down the Charmeleon’s nose and slowly down his back and tail. His fiery tail began to flicker out, and the Charmeleon’s breaths grew rapid and shallow.

“It’s no use, Kaelin. Call in Flame, hurry, you’re only going to make things worse for your Charmeleon…can’t you see, he has nothing else left, I thought you knew better than to put your first Pokemon’s life in danger!! Besides, with this rain there’s no way your Pokemon will have a chance!” Jillian yelled angrily at me, so I unwillingly withdrew my Charmeleon.

“Fine, I have no choice but to unleash my plan…” I smiled and called out my Ponyta.

“Oh, yeah, some plan…you cheater. Besides, Ponyta is a fire Pokemon too! I also thought we promised to only bring one Pokemon into the zone, it’s been that way since we made up this game.” Jillian frowned, but kept her glowing green eyes steady on her hard working Pokemon.

“This is no game, Jillian…you don’t know how long I’ve wanted this!!!” I quickly ordered my Ponyta to use her Take Down Attack; the rain continued to fall and steam surrounded my beloved fire horse.

The Ponyta used her speed and intelligence to attack the clumsy and weakening Rhyhorn. She struck it hard with her entire body but was hit with recoil; she stumbled back with tenderness and shock. Never had she fought a Pokemon as big as the Rhyhorn she faced now, the only thing that would help her was her speed that I had originally raised her for.

Strangely, the Rhyhorn’s attention was still fully focused on the Hitmonchan, even after it was hit hard with the Ponyta’s impressive charge. The Hitmonchan had slowly been weakened and was now reaching the point of fainting, even though it had the advantage over his opponent. This Rhyhorn was weak too, but wasn’t about to give up its freedom; he managed to stay strong against the Hitmonchan.

The slowing Hitmonchan now tottered about his opponent, trying to avoid the Rhyhorn’s sharp horn. It was impossible though, and with one last hit from the Rhyhorn, the courageous Hitmonchan surrendered and fell to the muddy soil with a loud splash.

“I was afraid it would amount to this…” Jillian frowned again and withdrew her Pokemon, but surprisingly she pulled out another Pokeball and called out her Poliwhirl.

“Hey, I’m a cheater…well, what about you!?!?” I angrily threw the words at Jillian, who only grinned with evil and ordered her Poliwhirl to use his Double Slap. The Poliwhirl was fully pumped and ready for a feisty battle, he began to continuously wham the Rhyhorn upside the head.

The Rhyhorn had seemed once again to be weakened by the uninterrupted blows to the head and driving of the rain, but so had my Ponyta; she was struggling to stay at a stable condition and I was worried that she would soon be out of the competition.

Remembering the effect of encouragement, I encouraged my Ponyta, “Hang in there, give it a good Stomp or Take Down, again!!!”

The rain was at it’s hardest and it was almost impossible to keep my eyes open now; the booming of the thunder had gotten closer and the sky would now light-up with a blue hue shortly before the rumbling of thunder was heard. The storm was right upon us. I knew that if we didn’t hurry harm might come to all of us.

“We’ve got to hurry up and get out of here, Kaelin…NOW!!!” Jillian informed me, still focused on her Poliwhirl hard at battle, which was only more pumped than ever due to the hammering of the rain.

caligal0224
06-19-2004, 10:26 PM
“But…but…we’re almost there, I can practically taste it, please, just a little longer!!!” I could taste no victory though, I could really only taste the blood from the nonstop nervous chewing on the side of my cheek, I began to worry that we were far from the end of the battle. I pleaded with Jillian, who was about to withdraw her Poliwhirl from battle, to stay and fight. She slowly put the ball back into her pocket and looked at me, smiling. I couldn’t tell if it was a smile of sympathy or a smile of weariness, or what, but she was willing to continue, so I wasn’t about to say anything..

I looked away from her and back at the battle. My Ponyta was still staggering about, it was cruel to keep her in battle, I know, but I wasn’t about to give up, not after we had gotten this far.

“Alright, keep it up Ponyta, give it all you got!” I encouraged once more. The daring Ponyta pounded against the Rhyhorn in a fiery fit of rage that sent it bounding backwards. The Ponyta used all the strength and speed she had left to clobber the Rhyhorn one last time while it was still on the ground. She missed though, and stumbled over her own feet, face first into the muddy earth. I moaned and told the Ponyta to get back up and try it again.

Meanwhile, the Poliwhirl hadn’t even broken a sweat. The creature thrived in the rain and was still hacking away at the Rhyhorn.

Jillian proudly instructed her Poliwhirl, “Great job! Keep up the good work Poli, and give that nasty Rhyhorn another Hydro Pump!” The Poliwhirl obeyed and managed to knock the Rhyhorn, once again, off its feet. Jillian seemed to glow as she studied her Poliwhirl hard at work.

“Hey, I think the Rhyhorn is weak enough to capture!” Jillian breathlessly shouted against the howling wind and furious thundering sky. The Rhyhorn was letting down its guard; it had lately been too weak to block most of the Poliwhirl’s forceful slaps and the Ponyta’s solid stomps.

I threw one of the three Safari Balls at the weakened Rhyhorn; it engulfed the mighty creature as a streak of lightning hit the ground not far away from the scene.

“We’ve got to go, now, I’m not waiting any longer!!!” Jillian cried, panic was in her scream and she quickly withdrew her serene Poliwhirl. I pleadingly looked at her again, her green eyes were now red, either from the stinging of the rain, or because she had just begun to cry from fright. Her expression was that of worry and fear, as she looked at my pale Ponyta and the glowing ball and then back at me; she whimpered like a helpless puppy.

I yelled with frustration and madness, “Grrrr…fine, just go…I’ll catch-up sooner or later…” I angrily studied the glowing ball and shrugged Jillian to go on without me. I didn’t think she was really going to leave, but she did. When I glanced her way, she was gone.

Just as I thought I had caught the Pokemon, the ball sprung open.

“Curse this…” I cried, and threw another ball.

My Ponyta lay in a muddy puddle, near me, hardly able to hold up her head; she was weary and soaked, but still watched with anticipation at the wiggling ball, and intermittently tried gather her footing but found it impossible to do so. With one last try she splashed back down into the puddle; her fiery mane and tail flickering like the tail of my powerless Charmeleon had in the end.

“Return, Ponyta…you’ve done what you could, now it’s up to me and these darn Safari Balls…” I comforted the Ponyta and called her back to her Pokeball.

The Rhyhorn’s ball continued to squirm in the mud. Once again, it popped open, revealing the tired creature. I waited a few seconds, only long enough to see the fear of the struggling Rhyhorn; I threw my last ball at the Rhyhorn and pleaded with it to remain closed.

The lightning flashed a few feet away, I must admit, I was frightened out of my mind, but I wasn’t one to give up…so I waited for the ball to stop glowing, rain drops pouring down my face, thunder booming in my ears that matched the nervous beat of my heart, my drenched hair piercing into my eyes, and still pleading with this colorful glowing ball to remain closed…

Satou
06-22-2004, 05:01 PM
Story/Reality :: 8/10
I liked the story. Your battle was sided in Rhyhorn's favor and it was realistic the whole way. I only wondered why the rain only hurt Ponya but not Rhyhorn but I guess it's the flames.

Grammer/Spelling :: 8/10
Not enough to bother me ^_^ Yaaaay!

Battle :: 8/10
Yaaay! A nice, beautifully written battle of a healthy length in a good pace! I could actually picture the battle in my head, which excited me xD

Length :: 8/10
Yay! Purdy length! ^_^

Detail :: 8/10
It was there which was good ^_^

Outcome :: 40/50 = 80/100 = 80% = RHYHORN CAPTURED

Tips: YAAAAAY! ^_^ I am very happy! Yay yay yaaay! Please write more in the future!! :happy: