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Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 05:36 PM
The Brotherhood of the Traveling Cookie
Created by: Lucario 92
Hello everyone. This will be my first comic series ever! Please leave comments etc. This comic is about a pikachu that gets his cookie stolen and his adventures trying to get it back. I will have guest stars. If you want to be a guest star, you must now wait until Season 2 comes out. I have the entire first season booked. Thank you for reading this, now enjoy the comics!

Now then, for the comics:

Season 1
Chapter 1 - The Beginning of a New Adventure (http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e359/trentman92/BotTCCh1-2.png)
Chapter 2 - The Invincible Az (http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e359/trentman92/BotTCCh2.png)
Chapter 3 - Pikachu, the True Friend (http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e359/trentman92/BotTCCh3.png)
Chapter 4 - Reunited (http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e359/trentman92/BotTCCh4.png)

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 05:36 PM
-Update-
I have updated the first chapter. I fixed it :biggrin:
I have finished chapter 2
Finished chapter 3
Chapter 4 finished

Guest Stars
Season 1
Chapter 1 - None
Chapter 2 - Azumao (Az)
Chapter 3 - EeveeBrothers
Chapter 4 - None
Chapter 5 - Chrono Pika
Chapter 6 - Chanseypanty
Chapter 7 - Manectric Fan (Trez)
Chapter 8 - Togeking (Brendoom)
Chapter 9 - Leaf Green (Wy)
Chapter 10 - Rizaado

Azumao
12-21-2006, 05:40 PM
There is one thing I dont like: it is hard to tell who speaking and when. I ended up reading the dialogue in the wrong order, and had to keep rereading each part until it made sense. Other than that, nice and random, just how I like it. :D

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 05:41 PM
There is one thing I dont like: it is hard to tell who speaking and when. I ended up reading the dialogue in the wrong order, and had to keep rereading each part until it made sense. Other than that, nice and random, just how I like it. :D
Lol yeah.. I like random comics too. But ill work on that and if i update that chapter ill be sure to tell everyone.

Shadow Eevee
12-21-2006, 06:41 PM
There is one thing I dont like: it is hard to tell who speaking and when. I ended up reading the dialogue in the wrong order, and had to keep rereading each part until it made sense. Other than that, nice and random, just how I like it. :D
I agree with Azumao on those problems, but is it going vertically or horizantly?

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 06:43 PM
Do you mean the scenes? If so then they go from left to right, as if you were reading in a book..

Shadow Eevee
12-21-2006, 06:53 PM
Then why'd he say"You can't call someone retard in this! It's a kid's show!" In panel 2?

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 06:56 PM
I thought you meant like if youre suppose to go from the first scene to the one below it or to the side. Im sorry. But im working on it right now.. Im trying to fix it.

Azumao
12-21-2006, 07:10 PM
I didn't have trouble finding which panel to go to next...you read it like a book, left to right. Then, you go to the first panel on the next row. Left to right. First on next row. Left to right. Yup.

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 07:11 PM
I didn't have trouble finding which panel to go to next...you read it like a book, left to right. Then, you go to the first panel on the next row. Left to right. First on next row. Left to right. Yup.
lol ok. But seriously i think that im gonna have this topic deleted or something. Im apparantly not doing good so i need to work on it a little more.

Azumao
12-21-2006, 07:29 PM
Ah, whatever you want to do. So you don't want me to make your banner? :ermm:

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 07:33 PM
Ah, whatever you want to do. So you don't want me to make your banner? :ermm:
Well, i guess ill stay with this. So go ahead. I want all the main characters on there. The characters are Pikachu, Squirtle, and Larvitar. But i want the larvitar to hold a cookie like in the comic.. Thanks.

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 07:58 PM
Updated the first chapter now. I have fixed the way you read it.

Shadow Eevee
12-21-2006, 08:02 PM
Updated the first chapter now. I have fixed the way you read it.
Thanks about that. So far, it seems intresting.

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 08:03 PM
Thanks about that. So far, it seems intresting.
Lol thank you. I think that this will be a good starter series for me. Remember the guest stars.. Well, ill post a new chapter up tomorow. Im still thinking about the plot for the next one.

chanseypanty
12-21-2006, 08:12 PM
Lol thank you. I think that this will be a good starter series for me. Remember the guest stars.. Well, ill post a new chapter up tomorow. Im still thinking about the plot for the next one.
I can't read what Pikachu was saying, because the word is all yellow.

SpazzedOutRayquaza
12-21-2006, 08:13 PM
This could spring for a good comic!
My only problem reading it was that I had to strain my eyes to see the last pokemon speaking in the bottom panels, as the color is the exact same color of the scene, making it hard to read.
But like I said, nice job!

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 08:16 PM
This could spring for a good comic!
My only problem reading it was that I had to strain my eyes to see the last pokemon speaking in the bottom panels, as the color is the exact same color of the scene, making it hard to read.
But like I said, nice job!
Ok then.. Since i have 2 people complaining about it ill change it again! Im not mad just so you know. I dont want it to come across that way.
EDIT: OK. It has been edited again. This is the last time i will edit it.

Azumao
12-21-2006, 08:47 PM
Ok then.. Since i have 2 people complaining about it ill change it again! Im not mad just so you know. I dont want it to come across that way.
EDIT: OK. It has been edited again. This is the last time i will edit it.

Heehee...I have one problem with it. Just make the backround of the text box colored, that way you don't have to wory about the text colors becoming hard to read. You don't have to make it white, of course. Just a suggestion. ;D

*You're avatar is done, by the way. I'll PM it to you as soon as Imageshack stops being stupid. >.>*

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 08:50 PM
Heehee...I have one problem with it. Just make the backround of the text box colored, that way you don't have to wory about the text colors becoming hard to read. You don't have to make it white, of course. Just a suggestion. ;D

*You're avatar is done, by the way. I'll PM it to you as soon as Imageshack stops being stupid. >.>*
OK thank you. This will be the last time a fix this stupid chapter. If you see anything wrong after this then you are just out of luck.

Azumao
12-21-2006, 08:51 PM
OK thank you. This will be the last time a fix this stupid chapter. If you see anything wrong after this then you are just out of luck.

Lol. It's better to change it now than to get five chapters in and notice that one of the text colors blends in. :P

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 08:52 PM
Lol. It's better to change it now than to get five chapters in and notice that one of the text colors blends in. :P
That is true. But once i finish editing that chapter, i will start on chapter 2.

Shadow Eevee
12-21-2006, 08:52 PM
Lol thank you. I think that this will be a good starter series for me. Remember the guest stars.. Well, ill post a new chapter up tomorow. Im still thinking about the plot for the next one.
Your Welcome. I can't wait till tommorow!!!!

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 08:55 PM
How about the fight begins?
Anyway...
Form:
Name:Eeveebros.
Pokemon/Human that you want to be: (send sprite if it isnt a pkmn)Eevee
Why:My username is eeveebrothers.
Eevee, there are two things wrong with that form. 1. you were suppose to PM me that form. 2. where it says why, it means why you want to be in the comic.
But i already have a plot for chapter 2.

Azumao
12-21-2006, 09:00 PM
Eevee, there are two things wrong with that form. 1. you were suppose to PM me that form. 2. where it says why, it means why you want to be in the comic.
But i already have a plot for chapter 2.

:O I posted it too! *deletes post and shoots self for copying eeveebrothers* Sorry for spam, lol. By the way, the new Chap. One looks lots better. :D

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 09:03 PM
:O I posted it too! *deletes post and shoots self for copying eeveebrothers* Sorry for spam, lol. By the way, the new Chap. One looks lots better. :D
Yeah. Ive decided not to make the background of the writing dif. colored in the first chapter. Ill edit it later. Ive already started to make the 2nd chapter.

Shadow Eevee
12-21-2006, 09:13 PM
Oops.:oops: Could I still be accepted if I fix those mistakes?

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 09:15 PM
Oops.:oops: Could I still be accepted if I fix those mistakes?
Yes. Just PM it to me. There can only be 1 guest per Chapter so ill probably get you in the 3rd chapter. But i gotta go.. I have to do chores real quick then ill finish up chapter 2.

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 10:03 PM
Chapter 2 is completed. I love this chapter! Well, i think ill do chapter 3 tomorow.. I need to get ready for a party. See ya later! Please leave comments.

theEND
12-21-2006, 10:09 PM
Lol, the second one was funny. xD These are great, Vash. Keep up the good work. :D

Ninja TK
12-21-2006, 10:11 PM
Lol, the second one was funny. xD These are great, Vash. Keep up the good work. :D
Lol yeah thanks. I love the second one.. It was so freakin funny!

Azumao
12-21-2006, 10:34 PM
:crackup: Ha! I'm famous! *poses for cameras*

Az, the Almighty Magikarp! Lol, I love my part. Ahh, the life of a guest star. *kicks up feet and sighs*

Rohypnol
12-21-2006, 10:45 PM
Good Comic. Keep it up!!!!!!!!

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 04:46 PM
:crackup: Ha! I'm famous! *poses for cameras*

Az, the Almighty Magikarp! Lol, I love my part. Ahh, the life of a guest star. *kicks up feet and sighs*

Lol. Yeah i thought you would get a kick out of that. Well, im about to start the 3rd comic. It will be up shortly. Thanks for all the comments!

Tombi
12-22-2006, 05:17 PM
Lol thank you. I think that this will be a good starter series for me. Remember the guest stars.. Well, ill post a new chapter up tomorow. Im still thinking about the plot for the next one.
You should carry on with it, it owns, I like the Pichu "I like cheese!" Three words I have said together a lot in my random lifetime...

Calypso
12-22-2006, 05:19 PM
You should carry on with it, it owns, I like the Pichu "I like cheese!" Three words I have said together a lot in my random lifetime...

Yes we all know, we all know tombi, i'm sure everyone on this forum has said those three words at least once in their lifetime. Anyways, cool comic, i like the random cookieness:happy:

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 05:24 PM
You should carry on with it, it owns, I like the Pichu "I like cheese!" Three words I have said together a lot in my random lifetime...

Yes we all know, we all know tombi, i'm sure everyone on this forum has said those three words at least once in their lifetime. Anyways, cool comic, i like the random cookieness:happy:

Yeah.. I say those words a lot! XD But yeah.. Im loving this comic. I especially like the next one. Its not finished yet, but it will be soon!

Calypso
12-22-2006, 05:29 PM
Cool, i can't wait, lol, i hope it is as random as the second one:tongue:

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 05:33 PM
Cool, i can't wait, lol, i hope it is as random as the second one:tongue:
Lol arent they all?

chanseypanty
12-22-2006, 05:55 PM
Lol arent they all?
Okay, thanx.

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 06:04 PM
OMG.. Im so mad.. I just finished the 3rd chapter and it exited me out and didnt save it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 06:47 PM
Ok, Chapter 3 is now up. Enjoy :P

chanseypanty
12-22-2006, 07:08 PM
Ok, Chapter 3 is now up. Enjoy :P
The last part was funny.

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 07:13 PM
Yeah, like i said earlier, it was deleted so i had to redo it. It wasnt as good as before.. But yeah, Pikachu is a true friend XD

Shadow Eevee
12-22-2006, 07:21 PM
Yay! I was a guest star. But I didn't understand my role, or that chapter. Also, you repeated the first two panels.

Calypso
12-22-2006, 07:24 PM
LMAO, that was hillarious, w00t cotton candy w00t

I wanna guest star lol

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 07:29 PM
Yay! I was a guest star. But I didn't understand my role, or that chapter. Also, you repeated the first two panels.
I didnt repeat the first two panels. But you will understand your role soon enough.. Mwhahahaha... Ok, enough of the evil laugh..

Calypso
12-22-2006, 07:31 PM
Can i guest star in the next one if i pm you my details

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 07:36 PM
Can i guest star in the next one if i pm you my details
Well, maybe not the next one. By the looks of it, i might be able to get you in on either the 5th or 6th chapter.. Sorry, i have alot of people wanting to be a guest star..

Calypso
12-22-2006, 07:40 PM
It's ok:tongue: , i don't mind being in late:tongue:

Leaf Green
12-22-2006, 11:22 PM
Lol, this is a funny comic. I want to have a guest star :D

Azumao
12-22-2006, 11:34 PM
Ahh! Competition! *shoots lucario*

XDD It was hilarious! "I'm just eatin' meh cheese" XD

Your sense of humor is arsum. :D Completely random...is Squirtle evolving? Or...is he going to PokeHeaven? I need to know! :P

Ninja TK
12-22-2006, 11:38 PM
Ahh! Competition! *shoots lucario*

XDD It was hilarious! "I'm just eatin' meh cheese" XD

Your sense of humor is arsum. :D Completely random...is Squirtle evolving? Or...is he going to PokeHeaven? I need to know! :P
XD Yeah.. I had to add that.. THe next one is hilarious at the beginning but i havent finished it yet..

Ninja TK
12-23-2006, 12:34 AM
Chapter 4 is now finished! Eat your hearts out :P

Azumao
12-23-2006, 12:44 AM
From Magikarp to Caterpie...wtf? Lol. That was awesome! You left me hangin' though... :(

Ninja TK
12-23-2006, 12:46 AM
From Magikarp to Caterpie...wtf? Lol. That was awesome! You left me hangin' though... :(
Lol yeah.. But I love the first line that pikachu has right after Larvitar says "This cookie is the answer to our prayers.." XD I loved that part!

Azumao
12-23-2006, 12:47 AM
So...I'm assuming Pikachu is a guy?

Ninja TK
12-23-2006, 12:50 AM
So...I'm assuming Pikachu is a guy?
LMAO! Yes! XD hes definately not a girl!

Shadow X
12-23-2006, 04:02 AM
hey man nice comics i really like them they are funny ahhah GO AZ aahahah Magikarp ahah

Ninja TK
12-23-2006, 04:10 AM
hey man nice comics i really like them they are funny ahhah GO AZ aahahah Magikarp ahah
You mean *coughcaterpiecough*

Calypso
12-23-2006, 03:17 PM
Lol, that was hillarious, i can't wait till i guest star:tongue:

avinash
12-23-2006, 10:16 PM
can i guest star:

Name: XD001
Pokemon/Human that you want to be: http://i14.tinypic.com/2wgg2t5.png
Why: i realised that it would be cool if larvitar uses XD001 to rule the world. but fails...

chanseypanty
12-23-2006, 11:39 PM
When is chapter 5 coming up?

Ninja TK
12-24-2006, 03:10 AM
When is chapter 5 coming up?
Sadly, I have no idea. But it will be soon. Im making some changes in the plot as we speak. But im not working on the actual Comic yet. I have to do Christmassy stuff...

avinash
12-24-2006, 01:54 PM
hi. i posted a guest star with shadow lugia in it earlier. i have just realized that its eye looks sorta weird so i changed it. just incase you dont know, heres the sprite: http://i10.tinypic.com/2ibgrgw.png

Ninja TK
12-24-2006, 02:30 PM
hi. i posted a guest star with shadow lugia in it earlier. i have just realized that its eye looks sorta weird so i changed it. just incase you dont know, heres the sprite: http://i10.tinypic.com/2ibgrgw.png
Im sorry, I cant accept you. First of all, in the first post it says to PM me your application. Secondly, I think im going to close guest star requests for awhile, I just have too many. I already have the entire first season filled. I will probably be able to get you as a guest in season 2..

Umbreon Shadow
12-24-2006, 02:32 PM
Nice job, they're pretty funny! Thumbs up.

Ninja TK
12-24-2006, 02:33 PM
Nice job, they're pretty funny! Thumbs up.
Thanks, what was your favorite chapter? Mine was the 4th..

avinash
12-24-2006, 02:36 PM
it's ok. im fine with guest staring in 2nd season. my favourite is the 4th chapter.

Ninja TK
12-24-2006, 02:39 PM
it's ok. im fine with guest staring in 2nd season. my favourite is the 4th chapter.
Yeah sorry about that. Lol I bet alot of people liked the 4th chapter alot..

Togeking
12-24-2006, 03:29 PM
My favorite was Chapter 4. Funneh to the limit!

Leaf Green
12-24-2006, 08:48 PM
Number four is funny XD

Azumao
12-25-2006, 11:24 AM
Are you going to post the next issue? :/

Shadow Eevee
12-25-2006, 07:37 PM
Are you going to post the next issue? :/Due to Christmas I don't think so. But it's Lucario9 2's choice.

Ninja TK
12-26-2006, 07:49 PM
Due to Christmas I don't think so. But it's Lucario9 2's choice.
Well, I will get it up soon.. But im still messing with my christmas presents so it might be up tomorow.

Kiko
12-27-2006, 12:11 AM
Are you going to post the next issue? :/

Hey, Azu! I finally joined the forum. Lol.

@Lucario: Nice comic, really random. xD I love 'em. The evil Magikarp of Doom! Eep!