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Alex the Charmander
01-07-2007, 07:28 PM
hello, I am going to post a comic here, but first I wanted to get some discussion in, and if a character application is needed...

form:

Name:
Age:
Personality:(4-word)
Item:
Species:(any)

pokemon:

Marty-NPC-skarmory
RaySquad leader ray-me- Rayquaza
Medrin-manetric fan- sealeo
shromer-lsukid007 - breloom
leon- deapserate milotic- ivysaur
snory-snorlax76-munchlax
avinash-avinash- larvitar
naki-latiaslover-latias
hoshika-hoshika-pikachu

Maps: none

The first issue-issue 1- Hello dumb world! (http://i90.photobucket.com/albums/k276/groudon_theultimate/newestestcomic.png)

It's not very good but it will get better soon.

Wario
01-07-2007, 07:38 PM
don't post a comic until you make the first issue, I learned the hard way. Besides, there's no set plot, so maybe it will get good, but its not right now.

Calypso
01-07-2007, 07:41 PM
Yeah, keep in mind What Gamabunta said, It's needs a better plot first. Heck, I'll join anyway XD
Name: Medrin
Age: 14
Personality:(4-word) Dimm-witted, Slow, Stong, Comeidic
Item: I dunno XD
Species:(any) Sealeo

Alex the Charmander
01-07-2007, 10:15 PM
Yeah, keep in mind What Gamabunta said, It's needs a better plot first. Heck, I'll join anyway XD
Name: Medrin
Age: 14
Personality:(4-word) Dimm-witted, Slow, Stong, Comeidic
Item: I dunno XD
Species:(any) Sealeo

added. sorry, four word rule...anyway, added

LatiasLover
01-07-2007, 10:35 PM
Well i'll join:
Name:Naki
Age:12
Personality:Naive, Positive, Cheerful, strong
Item:...i dunno....
Species:Latias (Of course)

avinash
01-07-2007, 11:14 PM
Name:Avinash
Age:10
Personality:strong, anger-managment, precise, lazy *optional*
Item: bonsly trophy
Species: larvitar or tyrannitar, your choice.

Anorexic Snorlax
01-07-2007, 11:20 PM
Name: Snory
Age:9
Personality: Dumb, sleepy, lazy and unhelpful
Item: Chesto berry
Species: Munchlax

Deapserate Milotic
01-07-2007, 11:27 PM
Name:Leon
Age:14
Personality:Relaxed . Secretive . Lazy . Genious
Item:Sleep Seed (when the opponent just won't shut up, he throws it at them so they will)
Species:(any) Ivysaur.

BTW, a four worded personailty doesn't seme very smart. It should be about a paragraph so the person submitting the entry can fully express how they want there charcter to be.

~Falcon~
01-07-2007, 11:45 PM
Name:Shroomer
Age:13
Personality: do-gooder, strong, athletic, dis-prover
Item: blast seed
Species: Breloom

by dis-prover i mean he likes to prove people wrong:neutral:

Alex the Charmander
01-08-2007, 02:11 AM
there. I added everyone...I draw the line at 20 though.

Hoshika
01-08-2007, 02:14 AM
How cliche, yet somehow original. O_o

Name: Hoshika
Age: 11
Personality: Hardy, stubborn, smart, fun-lover
Item: Special Band
Species: Pikachu

Hope your comic goes along swell. And remember, Spriters-Resource has [almost] every sprite you need!

Alex the Charmander
01-08-2007, 02:49 AM
How cliche, yet somehow original. O_o

Name: Hoshika
Age: 11
Personality: Hardy, stubborn, smart, fun-lover
Item: Special Band
Species: Pikachu

Hope your comic goes along swell. And remember, Spriters-Resource has [almost] every sprite you need!

hehe... I like the thing that happens when people use their usernames...something like this:

Hoshika-Hoshika-pikachu

Hoshika
01-08-2007, 02:52 AM
hehe... I like the thing that happens when people use their usernames...something like this:

Hoshika-Hoshika-pikachu

Well, I wouldn't want to use my real name, would I?

You really think 20 people would sign up for a comic? I think it might become crowded... o_o

Alex the Charmander
01-08-2007, 02:58 AM
Well, I wouldn't want to use my real name, would I?

You really think 20 people would sign up for a comic? I think it might become crowded... o_o
well, I'm not using anyone until issue 2 anyway.

Alex the Charmander
01-08-2007, 03:25 AM
sorry to double post but issue 1 is up!

Deapserate Milotic
01-08-2007, 10:19 PM
http://i90.photobucket.com/albums/k276/groudon_theultimate/newestestcomic.png

Wow, the quality needs work.
All the panels should be the same size in a corresponding order. And the first panel isn't seperated. The flow of the panels is key. Also Paint default colors like you used in your text box panel is way to bright for the eyes, and are ugly. Don't use the paint default colors. YOu also have not sign of any effort in this. Its just you copying sprites. That is unappealing. To make your saprites ellegant, you need to add scrtach work and editing towards you sprites. And even pokemon mysteyr dungoen sprites are better than the ones you used. The phone lacks shading or any color, its just plain black. It also unwise to add your self into a comic. Its basically very choppy, cut and paste, and random.

Needs work. Work on this.

Hoshika
01-08-2007, 10:24 PM
Maybe you could use actual Mystery Dungeon sprites...

And that's a LOT of Rayquazas. O.o