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TheStoneRegisteel
02-20-2007, 04:41 PM
Cool, i'm creating the first Review topic in the history of this thread. Maybe we should sticky a Review main area, and there all the review areas could be linked, if someone's searching for a certain review area for a fic.

I would like to get my Eternity Bound reviwed please. It's a Pokemon Fan-fic about Shadow Pokemon.
Hoshika
02-20-2007, 05:02 PM
Cool, i'm creating the first Review topic in the history of this thread. Maybe we should sticky a Review main area, and there all the review areas could be linked, if someone's searching for a certain review area for a fic.

I would like to get my Eternity Bound reviwed please. It's a Pokemon Fan-fic about Shadow Pokemon.

Mmm. I read through it a little quickly, but I caught a few things you might want to fix:

1. Double space after each person/Pokémon's/whatever's phrase when they are talking.
2. That intro about the Shadow Pokémon situation thing seemed kinda terse. I wish there was more to it. =|

I'll say more stuff when there's more chapters.
TheStoneRegisteel
02-20-2007, 05:26 PM
It becomes more tense as the story progress'....
Hoshika
02-20-2007, 05:38 PM
It becomes more tense as the story progress'....

I said "terse", not "tense". Terse is when something goes along too shortly.
Kaze
02-21-2007, 10:10 AM
I skimmed it; I'll give a good, long review later. So far, it seems interesting. It's similar to mine, which also involves Shadow Pokemon (including a Shadow Zangoose that everyone loves <3). XD

Anyway, I'll either post again or edit this post with a review added.
TheStoneRegisteel
02-21-2007, 05:51 PM
I said "terse", not "tense". Terse is when something goes along too shortly.

Did you? I know what terse means, BTW.

Glad you like it, KM. I'll finish the first chapter today or tomorrow...