geen leage prevew

[pixlepix]

ok i will make a story about someone who goes to lots of battle tornamints to get ribons so i am just giveing everyone a prevew

[Pokeboy sarab]

ok i will make a story about someone who goes to lots of battle tornamints to get ribons so i am just giveing everyone a prevew
As usual you haven't given us adequate descriptions....such as what is the main tournment about? Is the main character a girl or boy? If you answer such questions it would be much better.

[pixlepix]

ok i will make a story about someone who goes to lots of battle tornamints to get ribons so i am just giveing everyone a prevew

ok pokeboy scrab what hapend to your trip anyway she goes around to diffirnt citys and enters battle tornmints wich are like the 2 round for contests

[Pokeboy sarab]

ok pokeboy scrab what hapend to your trip anyway she goes around to diffirnt citys and enters battle tornmints wich are like the 2 round for contests
Ok thats much better. But make it around 3 or 4 lines. And yeah I am on my trip got some free time so thought I'd log on...gonna go off soon though.

[Shiny Loser]

As usual you haven't given us adequate descriptions....such as what is the main tournment about? Is the main character a girl or boy? If you answer such questions it would be much better.
Geez, haven't you figured it out that he's just pretending he's a n00b and is probably laughing at all the clueless people behind the monitors all except Shiny Loser who managed to figure him out?

[Pokeboy sarab]

Geez, haven't you figured it out that he's just pretending he's a n00b and is probably laughing at all the clueless people behind the monitors all except Shiny Loser who managed to figure him out?
Yeah I guess you're right but I don't think its fair for us to waste our valuable time trying to point out his mistakes....when he ain't doing anything to improve it,

[Neo Pikachu]

ok pokeboy scrab what hapend to your trip anyway she goes around to diffirnt citys and enters battle tornmints wich are like the 2 round for contests

Keep in mind that if it really doesn't look any better than what your last two fics looked like, its going to get a lock. We told you how to improve, you always ignore us, but a lock will be something you can't ignore.

Keep that in mind, and yes, it would help if your preview wasn't so vague...

[LordZangoose]

Yay! Let's go for clichéd characters round #2. Seriously, no one's going to help you anymore, you'll just make a bad story, argue about our help, and Neo will end up locking it. You haven't learned that people don't like your fanfics yet?

[pixlepix]

let me tell you battles are a lot easyer to desribe then walking and you are full of prejustice

[LordZangoose]

let me tell you battles are a lot easyer to desribe then walking and you are full of prejustice

Complex chains of moves involving tons of movement is easier to describe than someone's legs moving? Right... And I am full of justice before it happens? That's odd.

[pixlepix]

Complex chains of moves involving tons of movement is easier to describe than someone's legs moving? Right... And I am full of justice before it happens? That's odd.

prejustice is decideing befor you see the facts

[Neo Pikachu]

let me tell you battles are a lot easyer to desribe then walking and you are full of prejustice

Eh, to tell the truth, they shouldn't be...

Also, LZ is basing his criticism because of your past work, and how this "preview" doesn't look any better than what we saw from the last two preview threads you posted before.

Its up to you if you want to follow our advice. Choosing not to means a lock, so you'd be choosing to lock your own thread by not following what we've been trying to tell you.

[LordZangoose]

No, prejudice is having opinions about someone before you know the facts, and even then, that's only the partial definition. Honestly, learn how to spell.

[pixlepix]

Eh, to tell the truth, they shouldn't be...

Also, LZ is basing his criticism because of your past work, and how this "preview" doesn't look any better than what we saw from the last two preview threads you posted before.

Its up to you if you want to follow our advice. Choosing not to means a lock, so you'd be choosing to lock your own thread by not following what we've been trying to tell you.

ok neo plese lock this i cant think of any plot

[LordZangoose]

Then why did you post it in the first place? Just write a paragraph of a battle if they're so easy to describe, put in a quote box, and post it. Then you have a preview instead of another useless thread that should just be in the idea thread.

[pixlepix]

Then why did you post it in the first place? Just write a paragraph of a battle if they're so easy to describe, put in a quote box, and post it. Then you have a preview instead of another useless thread that should just be in the idea thread.

i dont have time neo plese lock

[LordZangoose]

Then why did you start the thread if you didn't plan on writing the fanfic anyway?

[Neo Pikachu]

Whatever the reason, let's just let it rest.

*Locked