Alex the Charmander
06-10-2007, 04:58 AM
Just as a preview, I'm going to post a preview of a wolf's rain fanfiction I'm writing. I just want to make sure it's ok. If you see, please post. I don't mind harsh critisizm.
-Prologue
Shinya wandered through the silent blast of snow and wind, not stopping, not slowing. It was as if the wolf wandered through air, as if the wind’s relentless blast was nothing but a gently caressing breeze. A trail of red followed the animal. The color tainted the soft black fur of the wolf, from a torn ear and a bloody scratch. Shinya spoke not, but moved her mouth to a silent word as a tear scattered the snow beneath her face. Why Muzai? Why did you betray me?! A vision of the angel white wolf-dog seemed to appear in front of her. You sneak, you liar, you coward! I shouldn’t have trusted your word. I hate you, you half-breed! You…you can’t trust dogs… Shinya collapsed on the snowy ground. The image of Muzai disappeared. In her mind she thought, deep in her mind, Hatred, anger, sorrow, why now? Why on the one day there was peace? But that inner regret was blocked by her deep and raging hatred of Muzai, the White Wolf.
She lay, unable to move and unable to think happily. Not only had she been wounded in her body, but her heart was emotionally wounded as well. Her blood stained the milky white of the snow. Shinya’s eye closed and she lay her head on the red snow, black and red on white.
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So that's only the prologue. not that long, but I'm going to be posting 3 or 4 chapters at a time.
-Prologue
Shinya wandered through the silent blast of snow and wind, not stopping, not slowing. It was as if the wolf wandered through air, as if the wind’s relentless blast was nothing but a gently caressing breeze. A trail of red followed the animal. The color tainted the soft black fur of the wolf, from a torn ear and a bloody scratch. Shinya spoke not, but moved her mouth to a silent word as a tear scattered the snow beneath her face. Why Muzai? Why did you betray me?! A vision of the angel white wolf-dog seemed to appear in front of her. You sneak, you liar, you coward! I shouldn’t have trusted your word. I hate you, you half-breed! You…you can’t trust dogs… Shinya collapsed on the snowy ground. The image of Muzai disappeared. In her mind she thought, deep in her mind, Hatred, anger, sorrow, why now? Why on the one day there was peace? But that inner regret was blocked by her deep and raging hatred of Muzai, the White Wolf.
She lay, unable to move and unable to think happily. Not only had she been wounded in her body, but her heart was emotionally wounded as well. Her blood stained the milky white of the snow. Shinya’s eye closed and she lay her head on the red snow, black and red on white.
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So that's only the prologue. not that long, but I'm going to be posting 3 or 4 chapters at a time.