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Old 11-18-2005, 03:04 PM
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Default Re: Never Look Back [oneshot]

Yay something original! Well done, no typos I could see. There were some points where grammatically it could have been better, but other then that, I thought it was excellent. It's the perfect prologue to an epic story if you ask me... I don't know where you would go with it, but that kind of character depth is what makes a story readable. A story is only as good as the characters in it... and this is an intrigueing glimpse at this mystery trainer... I like it.
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