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Old 11-22-2009, 09:27 PM
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Default Re: My fan fic idea.

Well, it's an interesting premise, but your plot seems kinda flimsy at the moment. I assume you have a good reason for Jacob's sudden shift in character, and a connection to the experiment. Also, why would his settlement be the only one? Why aren't there people who oppose him? What gives him the power to become a post-apocalyptic dictator of Sinnoh? Why haven't any of the other regions sent any help? You need to answer these questions (not necessarily here, just make sure you have answers), otherwise your plot will really be unbelievable.

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