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Old 11-30-2009, 07:04 PM
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Default Re: Rayne, Rayne, Go Away (Ready for ReGrade)

Good job Tsuki! You managed to go through and fix up quite a bit of the mistakes which I pointed out, the biggest one that I saw fixed was the tenses. I really don't have much new advice for yo, considering more things were fixed than added so there isn't much new material to critique. So, just look over the things that I mentioned that you didn't fix and remember what I've said for next time! There were quite a few things that needed fixing in this story so just make sure you don't repeat your mistakes next time! Good job, good luck, and have fun with the Kirlia :]
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