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Old 01-20-2010, 05:14 AM
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Default Re: |False Accusation™ Ready For Grading|

Originally Posted by Phantom Kat View Post
Wow, much better, especially with the small details such as Rachel's betrayal, the elevated backyards, and the description. Those little details can truly add realism to the story. Also, the battles were improved, and I was glad to see Snorunt and Snover put up more of a fight. Remember to make your battles as even as possible from now on. It truly does make the ending of your story that much better. ^^

Snorunt and Snover captured!

- Kat
Sweet! Thanks for taking the time to grade/regrade this :] - going to start working on the next part of the story now
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