Thread: [Pokemon] Arceus: A Deity in Need
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Old 11-02-2011, 08:31 PM
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Default Re: Arceus: A Deity in Need

Please double space when a nother person starts talking, EX.

"Hey!" Jim said as he bounded across the field, towards his friend.

"Huh?" said Bob as he turned around to see Jim.

It's hard to change it, I know, but it makes the story a hundred times easier to read, trust me.

Other than that, I like the rate hthat you're updating, but, another example here: "like a chirping buzz like sound" I think sounds much better as "like a chirping buzz-like sound" and I'm pretty sure it's correct too.

But keep going!

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