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1. The only problem I have with the prologue is that, you really could’ve elaborated a bit more. Not saying you should get rid of the mystery by explaining what happened in detail. But you could’ve showed more action, maybe more description of the gory battle that had just taken place, etc. But then again; the shortness keeps it a quick sting to the reader’s mind. A little more gory details wouldn’t of hurt though.
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I think they would have, actually. If I added an action scene to the prologue, it would either make the scene that's currently in it seem out of place or at least draw the attention from it too much for my liking. The details of that scene are more important than you think. Aside from that, it would kill the mystery of what
exactly happened there, which is also important.
The extras are not supposed to be something you're "forced to read" at all - in fact, if an extra is actually interesting enough to stand on its own, I post it separately as a one-shot. Heard of J.K. Rowling's "Quidditch Through the Ages" and "Fantastic Beasts and Where to Find Them"? Well, think of the extras as that kind of thing. They're not something you have to read and don't contain any important information that you can't access otherwise. They're just fun things to read if you're curious about how people can teach Pokémon speech in chapter 3, or about where exactly the "never catch an unconscious Pokémon" rule comes from. Just to make that clear, there are NOT many extras in this fic. The next extra will most likely be after chapter 7, and then (unless I add in an extra that wasn't there in the revision before this one) there is just one for chapter 27. So basically, they're not exactly disturbing your reading after every other chapter. They're just a sort of "by the way, if you're curious about that..." thing - entirely optional to read, but as you said, they add some more depth if you do read them.
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And, about “story flow;” just keep in mind to not drag. Not saying it really dragged in the story, but it seems like there might be the small possibility of dragging later on.
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Oh, this story is generally fast-paced, so don't worry about that. It takes a bit long for the details of what was going on on the prologue to be revealed, but there should be plenty of stuff to keep you occupied until then.
Thanks a lot for the review. :)