Re: Hidden Truths
Story: 0_0 This has to be a first for me... Boy winds up in a temple after suffering from amnesia, and fights a heck of a lot times.
Details: A on this. You described things rather well, it could have been better, but that doesn't matter atm.
Grammar/Spelling: Ehm... There were some mistakes, most of them of the type
"Blablabla." he said
which should of course be
"Blablabla," he said.
IIRC, you switched the first-person view in to third-person in the first post, plus some weird sentences... Nothing serious though...
Reality: Meh... Who cares?
Length: 110K for a Bagon, a Horsea and a Cubone; more than enough I guess.
Battle: Battle(s) ok, well described. Nothing much to say here either.
Outcome: Well, got to handed to you... I seriously want to read the sequal of this one..
Bagon, Horsea and Cubone Captured.
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Near a tree by a river, there's a hole in the ground.
Where an old man of Aran goes around and around
Last edited by DaRkUmBrEoN; 06-25-2006 at 09:54 AM.
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