Reserving stories isn't allowed, so I'll take over from here.
: Very nice. It has a basic plot (you run after a robber and then battle the wild Pokemon you've wanted for days), but it was done well. As a first story, I'm pretty impressed. The Pokemon were also given much personality, which added to their character.
: Little to no errors. I ran this through a spell-check, but nothing came up. You certainly know your grammar and how to write.
However, I think beginning sentences with "but" is incorrect. Very minor mistake, though.
: Wonderful. Both the plot and battles were fleshed out, making them more exciting and really giving more to this story as a whole. I really like your style of writing. Things like "burning barrier" to describe an attack by the Arcanine were just one of the little details that made this enjoyable to read.
: Seems close to 30,000 characters, which is perfect for our little mantis.
: Great, especially the description you use! I think it could have been a bit longer for a rare Pokemon like this, but what you had was good enough, in my opinion. Very nice work.
: Scyther captured!
Please tell me you will add more.