Re: Mystery of a World Long Gone - The Unowns Return
The chapters are like the size of a my pinky. They're shorter than a review I could give. Seriously! Make them longer!
Also, you should only post one chapter per post.
And wow... what a idiot, Brendan. McDonalds for a first date? ROFL
How about describing things like normal fics do and not having a mix of script fic and regular. So describe attacks and what everything looks like!
As for the plot, I have no clue what it is because nothign is described. Describe it and I'll probably figure out what it is.