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Old 04-03-2008, 12:51 AM
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Yeah, that was one of the two typos I saw. ^^; Here:



And if I'm not mistaken, I think a comma should be before, "too". Dunno for sure, grammar is my biggest letdown in my stories. ^^;

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I believe that Phantomkat is right. I don't know about the coma before it though, I'm not very good at grammar either . good job at asking people to help you. I should start doing that on my F.F.
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Yep, asking for help is a good thing! And I finally checked over the third chapter for mistakes so here it is!




The Path of Destiny

Chapter 3-Into the Dark Forest




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“What do we do now?” Snowcrystal whispered, looking hopefully at Stormblade and Spark.

“We fight of course!” the jolteon growled, glaring from one ghost pokémon to another.

“We can’t fight them all,” argued Stormblade, “But I think I have an idea.” As he and Snowcrystal backed up toward the other rocks, the scyther whispered something to Spark. The jolteon nodded and fired off a large blast of electricity; not large enough to hit all of the ghost pokémon, but enough to create quite a lot of bright light...

“Now run!” Stormblade yelled, and nudged Snowcrystal, who was practically blinded by the bright electric blast illuminating the dark area. The growlithe stood up and ran, unwittingly in the opposite direction of where Spark had just bolted. Now, she was headed further into the maze of jagged rocks.

Snowcrystal let out a cry of terror as more strange pokémon appeared out of thin air all around her-all ghost types. Shaking with fear, she looked around for Spark, but the jolteon was nowhere to be seen. She could see clearly again, but unfortunately Spark’s attack hadn’t stopped the ghost pokémon for long.

Before she could try to fire an ember attack, a shadow punch from a ghost pokémon she couldn’t see clearly in the darkness sent her skidding across the dusty ground. Feeling her back hit one of the rocks roughly, Snowcrystal struggled to regain her footing. A moment later, she had to dash behind the rock as several various attacks hit it at once, and she could feel the rock shudder slightly from the impact.

Deciding it was far better to run rather than attempt to stay and fight, Snowcrystal took off, hoping it would be harder for the ghosts to hit her as she dodged between the rocks. However, the problem was that the ghosts were able to move through them, and Snowcrystal found herself running madly through a seemingly never-ending maze of jagged brown stone.

Glancing left and right, Snowcrystal tried to locate a way out, realizing that although her kind were naturally fast, ghost pokémon were everywhere, appearing around every corner.

A shadow ball attack out of nowhere suddenly sent her crashing to the ground. Her crystal amulet went flying from her and landed a few meters away, glowing softly. As Snowcrystal struggled to stand up, a green blur darted in front of her. Quickly realizing it was Stormblade, she managed to get to her feet, watching as the scyther pointed with his blade to the left, indicating the direction she should run.

Snowcrystal took off just as Stormblade struck a haunter with night slash. She had only gone a few yards when she suddenly turned back, remembering the crystal that had been left lying near one of the big rocks. Sending up puffs of dirt as she turned around without stopping her run, Snowcrystal ran towards the amulet and quickly picked it up in her jaws before heading in the direction that the scyther had indicated.

It wasn’t long before she had cleared the rocks, and was out in the open. Stopping to try and locate the others, she realized that the ghosts weren’t following her. Some of them glared at her eerily from the rocks, but they did not venture beyond them. Snowcrystal shuddered as she carefully slipped the amulet back over her neck. A moment later, she heard approaching pawsteps and turned to see Spark limping toward her.

“What’s the matter? Are you hurt?” Snowcrystal asked, worried. The jolteon’s front leg didn’t look too badly damaged, but he was hardly putting any weight on it, and he seemed to be having a bit of trouble walking.

“Nah, I’m fine,” Spark muttered, shrugging, as he sat beside Snowcrystal, “A bunch of those ghosts tried using these weird attacks on me, and one of them hurt my leg a bit, but it’s nothin’ serious.”

Snowcrystal was glad that Spark seemed less hostile now, but she still had no idea if Stormblade was all right. However, she didn’t have to worry long, for the scyther soon flew from the direction of the rocks and landed beside them. He cast a worried look back at the ghosts and Spark assured him that they didn’t seem to want to venture past the rocks.

Snowcrystal glanced fearfully at the ghost pokémon who stood watching them, and remembered how Stormblade had tried to fight them. “Are you all right?” she asked him, not sure whether or not he’d been injured in the battle.

“Yes,” answered Stormblade, “I’m not hurt. It seemed like those attacks were more for the purpose of scaring us away than actually injuring us.”

“I beg to differ,” Spark muttered darkly, starting to lick his injured leg.

“It could have been a lot worse,” Stormblade replied, “With their numbers, they could have killed us, but they didn’t. Though why they’re guarding those rocks I have no idea.”

Snowcrystal sighed. “Well, let’s get going. We’re going to have to make it to the forest soon…”

“Don’t worry…it’s not as far away as it looks; it just seems that way from on these plains. We should make it by tomorrow,” Stormblade told her, “But remember, the forest isn’t safe. We’ll have to be careful.”

Snowcrystal nodded and the three headed off, sleep forgotten, as one by one the ghost pokémon disappeared into thin air.

***

Blazefang now led a group of about twenty houndour, excluding himself, Boneclaw, and Wildflame. The somewhat small and inexperienced houndour now felt important and entirely in charge of the group who’d been chosen to seek out Articuno and follow Snowcrystal.

It had been fairly easy for the group to follow the growlithe’s tracks, and being fire types, the lack of water was not overly worrying. All the same, Blazefang was eager to reach the forest up ahead, where finding food and water was far more likely. Though they had traveled much through the night, the nocturnal pokémon were getting tired, and at last Blazefang decided to let them rest a bit.

“All right everyone, let’s stop for a while. Try and get some sleep,” Blazefang called to the others, “Me, Boneclaw, and Wildflame will be lookouts.”

One houndour gestured with his head toward a large group of rocks in the distance. “Why don’t we rest over there?” he asked, “Instead of just lying out here in the open?”

Blazefang rolled his eyes. “’Cause me and these two will be able to spot any danger over a long distance from here,” the leader muttered, “How could we do that if we stop by all those big rocks, huh? And don’t you think some other pokémon, some unfriendly pokémon, might be thinking the same thing? To take shelter by the rocks? And what if they found us shelterin’ there? What then, eh?”

The houndour who’d made the suggestion fell silent, turning away from his leader as he curled up on a patch of dusty ground. “Right,” growled Blazefang, “I’m the leader here an’ I give the orders, alright?”

The other houndour mumbled something inaudibly. “What was that?” inquired Blazefang, “Speak up!”

“All right!” the houndour replied reluctantly, and Blazefang smiled, nodding in reply.

“That’s right!”

***

By the time the first rays of sun began to shine on the distant horizon, the forest appeared to be much closer to the three travelers. “Well, at least we’re getting somewhere,” Snowcrystal remarked to Stormblade as she studied the group of trees ahead. The scyther nodded and the two walked on, Spark following at a short distance. However, the jolteon was limping a lot less, and Snowcrystal was relieved that the injury hadn’t been serious.

The group had no more trouble from wild pokémon, spotting only a sandslash or a cacnea here and there. These pokémon neither approached nor threatened them, and the travelers left them alone. Now that it wasn’t so dark, the going was much quicker, and Snowcrystal could almost forget the ghost’s pokémons’ attack at the rocks in her excitement to continue the journey.

It wasn’t much longer before the three travelers came upon the outer fringes of the forest. Spark even came across a small stream near the first group of trees, which allowed them to take a drink and rest briefly before carrying on.

As they began to make their way through the winding paths of the forest, with Stormblade in the lead, Snowcrystal began to notice a few things. First of all, she now realized that Spark had been right; there was no sign of any other pokémon, no natural forest noise. No scurrying rattata in the undergrowth, no chattering of sentrets in the trees, no birdsong, nothing. Second of all, the further they traveled, the darker the forest became, even though it was daytime.

They hadn’t been traveling long when Spark spotted a group of berry bushes up ahead. Though it wasn’t as good as freshly-caught prey, Snowcrystal thought the berries tasted delicious, though she figured it was probably just because she was so hungry. Strangely, Stormblade had been completely quiet since entering the forest except for the occasion brief warning about some low-hanging branch or tree root she and Spark were likely to step on or run into. Even now, he stood a little ways away from the others, not moving or glancing in their direction. He had not eaten anything, despite the vast amount of berries that grew plentiful in the area. This struck Snowcrystal as extremely odd, considering he couldn’t have found much to eat in the wasteland, but she didn’t question him.

After Snowcrystal and Spark had eaten their fill, the group carried on, though after a while of wandering through semi-darkness, Spark suddenly hissed at Stormblade, “You have no idea where we’re going! Why don’t you just fly over the trees and find us a way out?”

Stormblade seemed a bit surprised, as if he was wondering why he hadn’t thought of that. “Oh…right…good idea…” he muttered before taking off.

“Why didn’t he try that before if he was so lost?” Snowcrystal asked, giving Spark a puzzled look.

Spark shrugged. “I guess he’s just paranoid about all the traps we saw earlier. I don’t see what the big deal is. After all, he can FLY! And see well in the dark.”

“Do you think he knows something about this place that we don’t?” Snowcrystal mused, pawing at her crystal amulet.

“If he did, he would have told us, that much I know,” Spark replied. The two sat in silence for a while until Stormblade returned.

“This way…” he mumbled quietly, and the others followed. Stormblade led them through more winding paths, deeper and deeper into the ever-darkening forest, increasing his pace until Spark and Snowcrystal had to sprint to keep up with him.

“Hey Stormblade, wait up will ya?” called Spark from behind, and as if in answer Stormblade stopped dead. At first Snowcrystal thought that it was Spark’s shout that had made him stop, and then she heard a faint sound that gradually increased until she could make out the pounding of hoof beats. Snowcrystal was about to ask Stormblade what he thought it was, when dozens of dark shapes suddenly bolted past beyond the trees to the left side of them.

Stormblade ducked down, and Snowcrystal did likewise, peering at the pokémon as they thundered by. They were large pokémon with long, slender legs, and strange antlers on their heads. Snowcrystal suddenly recognized what they were even through the gloom-stantler. Stantler herds would often pass through her territory, and though they were good prey, she had never hunted one. It took an entire pack of growlithe to bring one down, and only the most experienced of hunters even tried. Now, Snowcrystal was only concerned with watching them, and as the last of the stantler vanished, Spark whispered in a confused voice, “That’s odd…me and Stormblade didn’t see any other pokémon when we passed through here the first time.”

“Well it’s a big forest,” Snowcrystal replied, standing up straight again, “And from what you’ve told me, pokémon probably just want to stay away from that human place.”

“Ah well,” sighed Spark, “It doesn’t matter, besides, they’re only stantler, I mean-” He immediately quieted as one of the deer-like pokémon emerged from a nearby bush, seeming to be completely unaware of them. Snowcrystal took a step toward it and its head swerved towards her. The look in the stantler’s eyes seemed to freeze her to the spot, but she found herself staring not at the pokémon’s head, but its antlers, which had seemed to glow faintly.

Snowcrystal stiffened as the forest grew darker and the trees closed in all around her. All at once the place had become darker, and all the trees seemed to tower over her even more. Then the thundering rumble of hoof beats came again. Shaking her head to clear her vision, Snowcrystal shouted, “They’re headed this way!”

The stantler who stood in front of Snowcrystal suddenly charged past the group, leaping over a few bushes and vanishing into the darkness. Then from the bushes ahead, the rest of the herd came charging towards them.

Spark glanced at the stantler briefly before running to the side and heading for the nearest cover. Snowcrystal realized that the herd wasn’t going to move out of their way; in fact, it looked as if the stantler wanted to trample them flat. Snowcrystal started to sprint toward the shelter of some nearby bushes as Stormblade spread his wings and flew out of the stantlers’ path. Snowcrystal was starting to think that perhaps the scyther had been right to be worried.

Just as she was out of the herd’s way, a group of stantler suddenly swerved towards her, lowering their horns as their hooves pounded closer and closer. Snowcrystal suddenly found herself tangled in a bush’s thorny branches. There was no time to run. She closed her eyes.

And nothing happened.

The growlithe slowly opened her eyes, seeing stantler running past her on either side, their horns still lowered. However, those in the center were running right through her. Confused, she glanced around, seeing Spark crouching down near some bushes, his eyes shut tight. Snowcrystal managed to untangle herself from the bush, and slowly padded over and nudged him. “Spark!”

The jolteon’s eyes were still closed. “What’s going on? I can still hear them!” Snowcrystal nudged him again, and Spark backed away in shock as he glanced around.

“What the…they’re running straight through the trees!” the jolteon whispered, glancing around in confusion.

“Wait a minute…” Snowcrystal mused, “I remember something Icefang, that’s our growlithe clan’s leader, said about stantler. Even just one of them can sometimes create illusions of an entire herd, or at least that’s what he said… I wouldn’t have believed it until now.”

“But why would a stantler do that to us?” Spark asked, still seeming a bit shocked as he watched the very real-looking stantler herd running straight through trees and rocks.

“We’re predators…” Snowcrystal replied, “I guess it felt threatened, though there’s no way I could have attacked that stantler. I can barely use fire attacks as it is. Or any other attacks for that matter,” she added with a hint of embarrassment.

After a few moments, the last of the stantler illusion faded, and Snowcrystal could see things clearly again, and the forest looked normal. The illusion, or whatever it was, seemed to be wearing off. Spark and Snowcrystal walked over toward Stormblade, who emerged from behind a couple of trees. “Stormblade,” Snowcrystal began, “It was an illusion, there really weren’t that many-”

“I know, I saw them. But wait, listen!” Stormblade whispered, peering into the bushes. Snowcrystal was about to reply when she heard a faint cry sounding from somewhere nearby. Stormblade headed toward the noise, with Spark and Snowcrystal following closely behind. The three of them emerged into a small clearing. Snowcrystal could scent another fire type, as well as the fainter scent of something strange, something that wasn’t pokémon. As she gazed further into the gloom, she realized that lying in the center of the clearing, was a small, caged vulpix.

To be continued...



I finally posted the third chapter! I looked over this and found a few more mistakes, but if you see any typos tell me where they are so I can go back and fix them^^
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Awesome Fan-fic!, Like The 1st Chapter, Make The Story Have More Depth(u Know Wha I Mean^_^"!)
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I found another typo, I think, but it has nothing to do with spelling. Read the sentance below:

“All right everyone, let’s stop for a while. Try and get some sleep,” Blazefang called to the others, “Me, Boneclaw, and Wildflame will be lookouts.”


When Blazefang said "Me, Boneclaw, and Wildflame will be lookouts," it should be: "Boneclaw, Wildflame, and I will be lookouts. It's small, but I noticed it. other than that, the story is perfect. I liked what you did with the Stantler.

P.S. Stantler really do do that.
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I don't have time at the moment to go over your story for ideas on making it better right now, but I just wanted to say I really like what you have written so far .
I also really like your drawings, most of all the uncolored newest one! I only wish I could draw as well, even at my age
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I second that your drawings are very good.
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Thanks everyone! =D

Oh and what Blazefang said was intentional (he has bad grammar xD). And I'm glad you like the stantler thing! I've always thought that was interesting...

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No it's ok. You were trying to help and I appreciate that, it's kinda hard to tell but he's supposed to talk like that. xD But thanks for the help!
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Another great chapter here! Your story gets better and better!
Also, it's a good thing you have 21 finished chapters. That way your readers don't have to wait for weeks to read a new chapter.
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Also, it's a good thing you have 21 finished chapters. That way your readers don't have to wait for weeks to read a new chapter.
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The Path of Destiny

Chapter 4-Blazefang’s Discovery



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The trapped vulpix hadn’t noticed Snowcrystal and the others yet, and was sitting in the middle of the small cage, facing away from them. Snowcrystal could tell it was crying. Approaching the small pokémon, the growlithe tried to sound as friendly as possible. “Don’t cry,” she whispered, “We’re going to try and get you out of there.”

To her surprise, the vulpix whipped around, her eyes glaring. “Do you think I’m crying because I’m stuck in a cage?” she snapped, “No! I’m crying ‘cause the humans took my fire stone! Do you have any idea how long I’ve been waiting to evolve? I finally found a fire stone, right in the middle of this forest! I finally got my chance and they took it away!”

Snowcrystal stared back in confusion, and Spark cried out, “What do you mean you just found a fire stone and they took it? If you’d touched it you would have evolved!”

“I didn’t get the chance to touch it!” the vulpix spat, “I found it lying by those rocks over there, and as I was running toward it this human suddenly appeared and picked it up! I bit his hand to try and make him put it down but another human came and put me in this cage!” She paced angrily around her cage, then lay down again, growling, “I hate humans…”

“Not all humans are bad,” Stormblade told the strange vulpix, “Though if these ones put you in a cage, then-”

“I didn’t ask your opinion, scyther!” the vulpix shouted, baring her teeth.

“Look, do you want our help or not?” Stormblade replied, tipping the cage slightly with the dull end of his scythe. The vulpix leaped forward and sank her teeth into Stormblade’s arm, above the blade. Stormblade shook her off, and let the cage fall back in place. “Do you want me to find out how to open it or do you want me to try and cut through it with you in it?” he growled impatiently, “Stay still!”

“I don’t think she wants our help,” Spark muttered, watching the vulpix, who was now growling at the scyther, “Maybe we should just leave her alone.”

“We can’t just leave her here!” Stormblade argued.

“Stormblade’s right,” Snowcrystal agreed, “We’ll help her whether she wants it or not. Now, let’s see about this cage…”

“I can get out of here any time I like!” the young vulpix snarled, “If you want to help me, go get my fire stone back!”

“Why should we?” Spark questioned, walking toward the cage until he was face to face with the vulpix, his fur stiffening into sharp spines, “You should be grateful we’re offering to help you get out of that cage! We’re not going to follow those humans to try and find a fire stone for you.”

“Then leave me alone!” the vulpix retorted.

“If we leave you here, those humans could come back, or you’d just be stuck in here until you died of hunger,” Spark muttered flatly, “There’s no way you can get out of there by yourself. See that latch on the cage door?” Spark pointed with his paw, “You couldn’t open that with your teeth, and you can’t even reach it from the inside. One of us can break it for you, though.”

The little vulpix fell silent, and Spark moved the latch on the cage’s door as much as he could, then allowed Stormblade to cut through it. The door swung open and the young vulpix rushed out in a blur of orangish-red fur. She rushed by the others without stopping, and Snowcrystal called after her, “Hey, where are you going?”

The vulpix turned around and cried, “I’m going to follow the humans’ tracks and get my fire stone back!”

“You’re going to that town?” Stormblade replied, shocked, “You can’t go there! I’ve seen what it’s like-”

“Just try and stop me!” the vulpix spat back, “I’m not afraid! Unlike you!” As she turned to continue on her way, Stormblade flew in front of her, blocking her path with his scythes.

“I’m trying to give you a warning,” he said coldly, “Don’t go near the town. It’s a bad place for pokémon.” The vulpix casually pushed the blades aside and walked straight by him. Stormblade turned around and saw the vulpix heading straight through some bushes. Snowcrystal noticed as well.

“Wait!” the growlithe cried, running to the other side of the bushes. The vulpix emerged from the leaves to find herself face to face with Snowcrystal. “We can’t let you go out there all alone-it’s dangerous!”

“I can go where I want to,” the vulpix said simply, “And if I have to go to the human’s town to get my fire stone back, I will!”

Snowcrystal sighed, seeing there was no convincing her. “Well, at least let us help you. What’s your name?”

“Rosie,” the vulpix muttered, not turning to look at her.

“Well Rosie,” Snowcrystal began, “Maybe we can help you look for this fire stone, as long as you make sure to stay away from the town afterward. Stormblade says it’s-”

“What? We can’t go to the town just to look for a fire stone!” Stormblade cried, as he and Spark caught up with the other two.

“See my point?” Snowcrystal whispered, and then said louder, “Listen, if we all go to the town and just look around for the fire stone quickly, will you promise to leave the town afterward, and to just forget about the stone if we don’t manage to find it? I can’t promise you anything…” She gazed calmly back at the vulpix, who looked back at her as if she was considering it.

“Fine…” she mumbled irritably, turning her head away.

“Look,” Snowcrystal stated, glancing at Spark and Stormblade, “If we’re careful of traps, it can’t hurt to look around, and if we don’t find it, you’ll be sure to stay away from the human place for good, right?” She glanced at Rosie, who merely nodded reluctantly.

“We’d just better find it…” the vulpix muttered.

“Well, let’s go,” Snowcrystal announced, “We won’t stay there long,” she assured the others. “After all,” she added jokingly, “I do have Articuno to find…”

“What?” exclaimed Rosie, but Snowcrystal ignored her and turned to Stormblade, who flew off to find the exact direction of the town.

***

Blazefang and his group were on the move. The houndour pack had rested during some of the night and most of the morning, and were now nearing the jumble of jagged brown boulders that Snowcrystal had rested at the previous evening. Now that it was light, Blazefang was less wary of the area, and decided that the rocks may have provided some shelter for desert plants. The thought of finding prey appealed to the group, and Blazefang led the twenty-two other houndour to the large rocks.

Wildflame, the female houndour who’d been a lookout the night before, didn’t like the place. There was something odd about it, and she could feel it. Blazefang and the rest were busy searching the place for prey, but Wildflame stayed put at the edge of the rocky area. The way the rocks cast strange, eerie shadows across the ground, even during the day, made her somehow nervous.

Boneclaw was frustrated. “There’s nothing here!” he growled to Blazefang, scraping dirt from the ground, “Just a buncha stupid rocks and dust!” He started coughing as some of the dust he’d scooped up with his paw filled the air around him. Blazefang was loosing patience.

“If there’s prey anywhere, it’s here,” he growled dangerously, “We haven’t searched the whole place yet, so keep looking!”

“What if we run into something dangerous, like you said?” Boneclaw questioned uncertainly, and as if in answer to the fire dog’s statement, a houndour screamed.

Blazefang leaped toward the sound, Boneclaw stumbling behind him as he tried to keep up. The two of them arrived in a small area surrounded by more of the tall rocks. A houndour was lying at the base of one of the boulders. He grinned sheepishly at Blazefang. “Heheh…I fell…”

“Oh for the love of mew…” Blazefang growled angrily, “Quit acting like an idiot and keep looking for signs of prey!”

“Blazefang!” a houndour cried, and the pack’s leader whipped around. “Uh…Blazefang…” the houndour repeated, “We found something strange…we think you should come and look!”

Blazefang sighed and followed him, Boneclaw in his wake. “This better be good…” he mumbled. The houndour led his leader to a clear area of ground surrounded by thin pointed rocks which all seemed to curve inward slightly at the tops, and seemed to be in a strangely shaped circle around the small patch of earth. Two houndour looked up from where they were crouching beside some odd-shaped markings in the dust. Blazefang peered at them curiously, before brushing them away easily with his paw. “What was all this about? Some stupid marks in the dirt? I can’t believe you actually…hey, wait a minute…”

Blazefang stepped closer to the patch of ground where his claws had scored through the markings. Barely visible beneath one of the claw marks, was the glint of something smooth and shiny…

***

Snowcrystal and Rosie headed after Spark and Stormblade as they trekked through the forest in the direction of the human’s town. Snowcrystal could hear Stormblade’s angry muttering from up ahead.

“I don’t see why the little brat has to evolve…” the scyther was saying, “I never evolved, and I’m never going to! I don’t get what the big deal about evolution is…And now we have to go through all this for a stupid fire stone…What’s so great about it anyway? Can’t she just be satisfied with what she is?”

Spark was getting very tired of Stormblade’s rants. “Hey! I’m evolved! So maybe you don’t want to. Well, others might. Ever thought of that? Has it ever occurred to you that it might be important for some pokémon? Or are you just still paranoid about the humans? I thought you believed that trainers were there to help pokémon!”

“Not these humans!” Stormblade retorted, “Humans who put poison outside their buildings aren’t there to help, they’re…”

Snowcrystal rolled her eyes, wishing the two would stop arguing. Rosie had turned suddenly cheerful as they neared the town, prancing about happily next to Snowcrystal as the growlithe followed the jolteon and scyther. “I can’t wait to be a ninetales!” she cried cheerfully to Snowcrystal, “I’ll have white fur like you, only mine will be more creamy-colored, like a meowth’s fur. So, uh…when are we gonna get to the town and get my fire stone back?”

“Hopefully soon,” Snowcrystal sighed, glancing at Spark and Stormblade up ahead. Spark had turned his fur spiny again, as he seemed to do when he was angry. “Look you two, stop arguing!” she called over to them, “We’ll be fine if we’re careful. And this won’t take long…we’re just going to see if the fire stone’s there.”

“You’ve never been to a city or town, have you?” Stormblade called back, “We can’t look through an entire town for something that small!”

“We’re just going to try…” Snowcrystal replied impatiently, “Just really quickly. It’s not far, is it?”

“Shouldn’t be…” Stormblade replied unhappily.

“Oh look, what do you know…There it is!” Spark called from further up ahead, where he was peering through some bushes. He added in a sarcastic tone, “Ooh…looks soo scary!”

Rosie darted up beside Spark and confirmed his statement. “He’s right! I see the buildings! Let’s go!” Stormblade and Snowcrystal made their way through the bushes to see a large group of buildings up ahead. Snowcrystal stared wide-eyed, having never seen anything remotely like them before.

“What are they?” the white growlithe asked.

“Those big things are called buildings,” Spark explained simply, “Humans live in them, work in them, or battle pokémon in them. Those rectangle things are called doors. They move, and let you enter a building. Okay, let’s go.”

Snowcrystal looked puzzled, and quite confused about what Spark had said. She looked around at the buildings, not seeing any humans around. Rosie started to run toward the town, but once again, Stormblade tried to stop her. “Wait!” he warned her, “You need to at least look out for danger before you go running in there!”

Spark walked right up to him, stopping when he was a foot from Stormblade and the vulpix. “Stormblade,” he stated flatly, “Three words…Par-a-noid!” He then turned and darted toward the nearest buildings.

“That’s one word!” Stormblade yelled, heading after him.

Snowcrystal quickly caught up with Rosie. “Well, we better go look for that fire stone, and look out for humans,” she whispered, as she and the vulpix followed the other two.

***

Blazefang’s claws scraped the dust around the shiny object, revealing it to be a flat, almost oval-shaped stone. It was clear, and a dark purple in color, with slightly darker flecks all across it. Blazefang thought it must be a gem or a crystal of some sort, and set about trying to free it from the earth.

It was harder than he expected. The ground was hard and packed tightly around the object, and his claws made little progress as he sought to free the stone by digging. Blazefang then tried to grip with his claws around the edge of the small rock, finally managing to prize it loose. Looking down at the dusty object on the ground, Blazefang rolled it over with his paw. “Well, what do you think it was here for?” he asked.

“I dunno…looks like just an old rock,” Boneclaw replied, “But it’s a kinda pretty one!”

Blazefang peered closely at the stone, noticing a few small imperfections in its shiny surface. Most of them were just minor nicks and scratches, but one was a narrow hole near the top of the stone. However, he still thought it looked pretty nice. “Heh, maybe I’ll keep it. I could make a sort of medallion out of it or somethin’.”

Boneclaw was about to reply when a harsh cry rang out through the rocky area, and several ghostly forms suddenly materialized around the group, all looking very angry. Blazefang held back a cry of surprise and gritted his teeth. He’d been ambushed…but already, he was thinking up a plan. “Everyone! Over here!” he yelled, and several panicked houndour arrived at Blazefang’s side, gazing terrified at the ghost pokémon. Blazefang glanced around, noticing that some were missing. Quickly realizing that the ghosts were all over the place, Blazefang figured the other houndour had probably fled the rocky area, since there had been no sight or sound of an attack from the ghost pokémon yet.

Blazefang was quick to give orders. He kicked the purple stone toward one of his fellow houndour. “Boneclaw, hold this, everyone, get in a circle and face the pokémon!” Boneclaw picked up the rock in his mouth, while the other houndour did as Blazefang said.

The ghost pokémon seemed to be glaring at Boneclaw in particular, and the houndour in questioned flattened his ears against his skull, growling. Many of the enemy ghosts were soon charging up some attacks, and at that moment, Blazefang cried, “Flamethrower, now!”

All at once the houndour fired blasts of red-hot flame at the ghost pokémon, while Blazefang signaled a retreat. The houndour backed off, taking turns at launching their attacks at the oncoming horde of ghost pokémon, striking quite a few while at the same time making it very difficult for the ghosts to attack them back.

Blazefang was glad of his pack’s numbers. He had them firing their attacks in turn; one small group using their attacks after another had just fired theirs, creating an almost constant stream of flame that caused great panic and chaos among the ghost pokémon. Blazefang chuckled to himself as a shadow ball plowed into the ground to the side of him. These pokémon weren’t great fighters; they seemed to want to rely more on scaring them off, but that advantage was long lost.

It wasn’t long before Blazefang and the houndour had cleared the rocks, meeting up with Wildflame and the few houndour who’d fled. They then took to a run, soon leaving behind the angry ghosts who’d briefly attempted to follow them across the plains. Blazefang snickered to himself as he glanced back at the pokémon, who obviously weren’t suited to the intense heat and the bright daylight. One by one the ghosts vanished, looking defeated and at a loss for what to do. Feeling pleased with himself, Blazefang called to the others in the group, “You see? If we had stopped there during the night, we might not have been so lucky. But then again, those ghosts only seemed to be good at trying to scare us off. Haha! Well, that’s a lousy defense that ain’t gonna work against us!” Still chuckling to himself about how well he’d handled the situation, Blazefang led his group toward the forest, not bothering to check on those who’d received minor injuries during the retreat from the rocks.

To be continued...



Fourth chapter! (Sorry it's a bit shorter than the last one.) Once again if you see any typos please tell me where they are so I can fix them! (Some of the characters are meant to speak with kinda bad grammar, but if something seems like it's a mistake or really doesn't make sense, or Stormblade has bad grammar (which would be a mistake xD) then tell me so I can fix it!)
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Good length, good descriptions, good characters..... a good story so far. Keep it up! ^^
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