A Horsea Tale

[MystiKal]

Okay this is contiuning over from another one of my stories.

Riding on a small, orange sailboat, Tony returned his Charmeleon inside of its pokeball and began to start searching for his future Horsea. The reason he actually wanted Horsea was because they evolved into Kingdra, with the help of a King's Rock. Tony loved dragon pokemon, and Horsea would definately be a great one to have.

Ever since he left for his journey in Littleroot Town, Tony's dream was to become a dragon elite trainer. Through his glorious dreams, Professor Birch secretly caught him his Charmander, his best friend as this very moment. Surprised by this action, Tony happily took Charmander and began his journey. Since the league requirements were different, Tony went out to travel and capture his pokemon before beginning to compete in the Hoenn League. Happily, Tony caught his first pokemon...the electric pokemon known as Mareep. During that battle, Charmander even happened to evolve...which made Tony's dream nearly real.

The sunny skies were brightly shining on the long ocean. Underneath Tony were a class of Wailmer and Wailord, traveling on their migration. They were happily swimming underwater, just like feathers. A crowd of Wingull and Pelipper happily soared above the ocean, awaiting for the Goldeen to come so they could nab them. This made Tony so comfortable, seeing all of these pokemon happily live in peace and happiness...but, it wasn't time to enjoy these things right now. Tony had to fulfill his goal. That goal was to capture the elegant Horsea he dearly awaited to capture one day!

[MystiKal]

Tony, still waiting for a tug from his Super Rod, sat back and relaxed near the fishing rod. He began thinking about his future life, hoping that he would finally get the chance to become just like his idol, Lance. He even admired his clothing, wearing a red shirt with those saggy blue jeans. But, something gave Lance his ‘personally’, which was in fact a red cape that brightly matched his fire red hair color. That made Lance different from everybody else, which what Tony really liked about Lance. Then, his other idol was Claire. Tony basically liked her because she was very beautiful and she had a Kingdra, Dragonair and Gyarados, which happened to be a very powerful collection of dragon pokemon.

As the Wingull happily cheered above Tony’s sailboat, Tony noticed a movement of his orange and black Super Rod. “It’s a tug!” Tony barked. He immediately jumped up from his brown summer chair and grabbed the pole. Tony gave full force and pulled the Super Rod back, pulling out his capture. But, it wasn’t time to celebrate…Tony had not only fail to get a Horsea on his line, but the pokemon was in fact a shark!

Well, this pokemon was dark blue with black stripes coming from the back of its body. With its gaping, wide-open mouth, this pokemon most likely knew the attacks Bite and Crunch. In its mouth were a clean slate of white, sharp teeth that gave this pokemon its characteristics as a shark. Also, on the top and bottom parts of its body were a fin, so it could glide underwater faster and a lot better. With its mean, red eyes, it glared straight at Tony. Tony began to back up, but then stopped. He had to face anything that came in his path…that’s what a trainer was all about. Tony quickly took out his pokedex, which scanned this shark pokemon. Its picture was shown on the screen and the pokedex began uploading its data.

{Sharpedo, the riveting shark pokemon. Sharpedo is of the water clan, evolving from Carvanha. Sharpedo can easily glide and sail underwater by using its two fins it has on its body. Sharpedo can be very hostile and they react very quickly to any unsuspecting movement. Sharpedo should definitely be approached with caution. Though, Sharpedo may be a water pokemon, but does not learn any water techniques. Its special ability is Rough Skin, which slightly damages the opponent if they use physical attacks like Take Down or Double-Edge.}

This should be interesting,” Tony said, taking out Charmeleon’s pokeball. He knew that by battling this Sharpedo, it could have a chance of evolving into Charizard. Since Flaaffy had evolved before Charmeleon, Tony wouldn’t be fair to use Ampharos. Plus, Charmeleon had to get used to defeating water pokemon, since it was weak against it. Tony was the kind of trainer to help his pokemon defeat their weaknesses by overcoming their fears of defeat and changing them into goals of winning.

As Tony grinned at the wild Sharpedo, a wild Horsea appeared from the back of the boat, waiting to watch the battle. “I choose you, Charmeleon!” Tony said, throwing Charmeleon’s pokeball into the air. As it spun rapidly, it began shining after reflecting the bright sunlight. It then opened, releasing out Tony’s Charmeleon. Charmeleon safely landed on the boat, right in front of Tony. “Charmeleon, get that Sharpedo!” Tony commanded. Charmeleon stood on the edge of the boat’s end, watching the Sharpedo float still. Then, Charmeleon took action!

“Charmeleon, get Sharpedo’s attention! Use Ember!” Tony suddenly commanded. Charmeleon took action and immediately began shooting out a series of red, oval, fiery ember missiles. They came in contact with Sharpedo, hitting it directly. Sharpedo glared at Charmeleon and suddenly disappeared! It then reappeared and tackled Charmeleon into Tony. Tony managed to catch Charmeleon. “Charmeleon, take must be Faint Attack,” Tony began. “Use your Ember attack again.”

Charmeleon leaped back into action! With its lizard traits, Charmeleon swiftly ran and jumped onto the sledge. It suddenly shot out another series of Ember missiles, striking Sharpedo once again. Behind the boat, the wild Horsea slowly swam closer to watch the battle better. It was definitely rooting for Charmeleon! After being struck by the attack, Sharpedo realized this Charmeleon was a lot harder than it suspected. It disappeared again and suddenly reappeared in front of Charmeleon! “Charmeleon, use Slash!” Tony quickly commanded. Before Sharpedo could use its Faint Attack again, Charmeleon slashed Sharpedo three times with its sharp claws. Sharpedo took the attack, soaring towards the ocean. “End this with Ember!” Tony barked. Charmeleon suddenly shot out hot, red ovals at the wild Sharpedo, hitting it directly!

Sadly, the wild Sharpedo fled from the battle! Charmeleon happily growled. Tony could tell Charmeleon had gotten stronger…its Ember attack was more effective. The wild Horsea began cheering, suddenly taking Tony’s attention. Curious, Tony went to the right side of the boat, seeing the Horsea! “YAY! A HORSEA!” Horsea suddenly looked at Tony and cheerfully smiled. “Aww…it’s too cute,” Tony said. “Let me capture it!” Charmeleon, who was now resting near the end of the dock, looked into the sky, hoping its dream would come true soon. “Let’s go, Ampharos!” Tony said. He released his electrical light pokemon, which immediately looked into the eyes of the wild water dragon. Horsea began getting scared and began to swim away! “Ampharos, go after that Horsea!”

“Amphar Ampharos Amphar!” Ampharos yelped out. It immediately jumped into the water and swam after Horsea. “Ampharos, use Thunder!” Tony said. Ampharos began conducting electricity around its entire body. Ampharos then struck the ocean with its electrifying Thunder attack, attacking Horsea as well. “Great work, Ampharos!” Ampharos happily cheered, but somehow, Horsea managed to survive the attack! From its tube-like mouth, Horsea shout out a blue, spinning stream of water at Ampharos! The attack hit directly, sending Ampharos into the sailboat! As it hit the sailboat, it began to rock above the ocean. The orange sailboat finally became balanced, and Ampharos quickly recovered from the attack. “This Horsea really has power,” Tony began. “Ampharos, go after it! Use Thunderpunch!”

Ampharos’ right paw was soon covered with electricity. Swiftly, the electric light pokemon swam towards the wild Horsea once again! But, this time, through its tube mouth, Horsea began filtering the area with thick, black smoke. Ampharos quickly stopped, though still ready to use Thunderpunch. “Ampharos, stay alert!” Tony said, hoping that Horsea wouldn’t do another sneak attack! Ampharos waited for the smoke to clear up so it could proceed with its attack.

Finally, the black smoke cleared the area…and to Tony’s surprise, Horsea was gone! Tony began getting disappointed, since Horsea had escaped the battle! “Ampharos, it’s gone…c’mon back.” Ampharos’ built-up electricity on its right paw went back into its body. As Ampharos safely swam back to the sailboat, Horsea suddenly appeared! “THERE IT IS!” Tony yelled out. Horsea shot another Hydro Pump at Ampharos, hitting it directly on its back.

Ampharos went underwater this time, seeing a wonderful site. A class of Wailord passed it by, but a pokemon came towards it. Through communications, Ampharos went back up for air, making things worse. It was right in front of Horsea! Horsea began chuckling, shooting speedy bubbles straight in Ampharos’ face! Ampharos was being blown out from these attacks and couldn’t take it anymore! “Ampharos, get that Horsea!” Tony said. Ampharos quickly swam towards Horsea.

But, it jumped out of the water and stomped Horsea’s head, angered by this foolish pokemon’s actions. Being stomped in its head, Horsea shot out another series of bubbles towards Ampharos. “Ampharos, use Thunder! Blow those bubbles away!” Tony commanded. Ampharos’ body began sparking little electric bolts. Then, Ampharos shot out its Thunder attack! The wild Pelipper and Wingull stopped soaring around and stared at the battle. Even Charmeleon managed to get up, very interested. The catastrophic, yellow, electrical Thunder attack struck past all of the bubbles and easily struck Horsea. Struck by this attack two times, Horsea laid on its back in the ocean, defeated!

As Ampharos fell back into the air, it began swimming towards Tony, carrying Horsea. “Great work, Ampharos.” Tony said, returning it to its pokeball. Tony was very surprised when Ampharos stomped Horsea in its face. He guessed it was angered with Horsea for using such great attacks on it repeatedly. “Now, go, pokeball!” Tony barked out. He threw his pokeball, which hit Horsea afterwards. It opened, sucking Horsea into it. As it closed, it floated in the water, flashing red. Tony just hoped now that he would capture Horsea…

[Daniella Defines Divinity]

Story: Same old same old

Grammar: little mistakes, and I'm not sure if you meant to use a class instead of a school of fish since it's pokemon or whatever.

Realism: Could happen

Length: Just enough, only just though

Battle: I like the fact you tried to extend it with the first battle and since it was an ampharos vs a horsea it seems realistic enough

Outcome: Captured, only just though, try to add a little more excitement in your next story