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Default My Guardian Angel (PG-13) [Chapter 14 is up!]



^ Made by my good friend, Natalia ^

Okay, this is my second attempt at a chaptered, fan fiction story here on Pe2K. After going through the idea in my mind and chapter through chapter, I have the whole story laid out and ready to be typed. Many thanks go to my good friend Natalie for kicking my butt into gear after months of not doing anything with the idea. I am determined, hell-bent, on making this my first finished, chaptered story ever.

Also, this story was partly inspired by Darth Murkrow’s Chronicles of the Shards A very good, well-written fan fic that deals with the Legendary Pokémon. Sadly, Darth has gone inactive, but it's still a really good read!

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- PokeCommunity
- Bulbagarden Forums

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Notes:

PG-13: This story is rated PG-13 for violence, death, and some language here and there (nothing vulgar, though). There’s nothing in here extremely graphic, but there will be descriptive scenes.

Legendaries: This fan fic revolves heavily around the Legendary Pokémon, and not just a few, but about a good 70% of them are involve in one way or another. If this isn’t your cup of tea, or you’re hoping for the Legendaries to take a back seat in the plot, I suggest you don’t read.

Updates: I write slowly, very slowly, and then there are times where I don’t have time to write. If I don’t update in a while, it merely means I don’t have the time to write, not that I forgot or abandoned this story. Starting November though, I expect to be writing a lot more, so stay tuned for that!

Comments: Comments are greatly appreciated. I’m having fun writing this, but it’s more fun to write it and know that other people are enjoying the ride as well. Even if you only read a snippet of a chapter or just browsed through a few lines, please comment; it’ll make my day. ^-^

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Character Profiles: Be warned; they contain spoilers!

Spoiler:
Legendary Pokémon

Arceus (Gender: Male) He is the Father of the Legends and the rest of the life on Earth. Arceus has great faith in the Council of Legends, so there are times where he will attend and immerse himself into other matters. This leads to him being unaware of situations and problems that arise in his absence. His heart is kind to all and, most of the time, masks the fact that he wields great power. This, for example, leads Mew to believe his father is soft and unable to make important decisions. Arceus is the only one who deals out Judgments to souls; he is unaware of Mew and Celebi’s business in Purgatory.

Mew (Gender: Male) Mew is one of the oldest children of Arceus and an active member of the Council of Legends. In the blink of an eye, he can hide his cynical personality under the façade of righteousness and understanding that he uses to manipulate the current situation to his favor. Whenever things are going his way, his mood shifts into cruel playfulness. It has been revealed that he wants to eliminate sinned and unworthy souls in Purgatory in order to convince Arceus that he can lead Earth into more prosperous times. Mew is so dedicated to his duties as a Legend that he will go to great and dangerous measures to accomplish his goal.

Celebi (Gender: Female) Celebi is also one of Arceus’ oldest and most trusted of children, and she is Mew’s loyal partner. Although her steel resolve is unwavering, her temper is short; those who lit her anger face an onslaught of her power. The only one who keeps her in check is Mew, whom she will forever see as her big brother. Though she has discovered there are things in Mew’s grand plan she does not fully agree with, her admiration and loyalty to him dispels the uncertainties.

Jirachi (Gender: Female) Jirachi, in comparison to most of her Legendary ilk, is young and a bit naďve when it comes to judging those around her. She tries her best to make the rest of the Council of Legends hear her out, and even when they don’t, she’ll go to great lengths to try and fulfill her duty as a Legend.; this causes her to overlook the consequences. Jirachi is the one who tries to stop Mew and Celebi from destroying souls in Purgatory, but she had no choice but to escape when her brother and sister almost killed her in their quest to see their plan through.

Deoxys (Gender: Male) An alien who had crash landed on Earth after being forced to escape his exploding, meteor home, he was trapped by Mew in a cave while the Council of Legends decided whether to let him stay on Earth or force him back into space. After fleeing his prison and colliding with the territorial Rayquaza, Arceus took him to Birth Island, where he will live unless ordered otherwise by the Council. After finding out that Jirachi had vouched for his stay on Earth, Deoxys promises to himself that he will one day repay the debt.

Other Beings

Death (Species: Dusknoir ; Gender: Male) Death is, besides the Dusclops guards he has under his command, the sole ruler of Purgatory, and on top of wielding the normal Dusknoir abilities, he also has the power to transport the souls of the dying to the realm of the waiting and build illusionary villages for them to settle in as they wait for Judgment. Death has some contempt to the Council of Legends for he believes they are just upholding their guardian duties to the living realm of Earth and forget Purgatory and its inhabitants. The only one who has gained his trust is Jirachi when she came into Purgatory for his help. Currently, he is waiting for the right soul to come along and help him with his Purgatory duties

Mark Antony Colfax (Species: Human Soul ; Gender: Male ; Age: Eternally 25 ; Died on October 29th, 1725) Mark Antony was a prominent, young Sergeant of a Johtonian regiment during the Region War. After a disappointing battle, Mark Antony led a handful of soldiers towards where he believed a Kantonian regiment rested. However, things did not go as planned, and he ordered his men to retreat while he was warped near New Bark Town by a Pokémon that was supposed to be under his control. When he got his bearings, he found an injured Jirachi and trekked through a bombarded New Bark Town to get her to the Pokémon Center. He was forced to leave her to her devices when the Center was found destroyed, but shortly after doing so, Mark Antony was captured by the very Kantonians he first sought and executed.

Now, after Death faced off against Mew and Celebi in Heaven in verbal combat, Mark Antony is the Dusknoir’s assistant. His job is to take over the bodies of Pokémon and protect humans that are in danger of dying before their time, no matter who they are.

Mark Antony is always confident about himself and is insanely loyal to his region of Johto. Most of the time, he comes off as cold, especially towards those who don’t know him, and his trust is hard to gain. His attitude towards those he doesn’t know is indifferent. Even after his death, he greets a Kantonian with a scowl and a glare.

Mark Antony, like every other soul, is invisible to humans and sensed by living Pokémon on Earth. He can also levitate, and sometimes fly, as well as pass through solid objects. With the power of his scythe, he is able to take away a Pokémon’s soul and inhabit its body for weeks at a time. As a Pokémon, he can use Pokémon attacks and perform physical feats he otherwise wouldn’t be able to.


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Fun Facts and Trivia:
  • Mark Antony is able to play the piccolo and the snare drum quite well. This is because he was a drummer boy and a piccolo player as a kid for one of the Johtonian regiments. He got out when he was old enough to join the military as a soldier at the age of fifteen.

  • The first Book, or the first twelve chapters, were originally not included in My Guardian Angel. The events in Book One were going to be mentioned in passing in Book Two. However, after picking up the plot draft months after, it was decided that these events needed their own chapters.

  • Originally, My Guardian Angel was going to be a URPG capture story for a Lucario. It was going to start at the beginning of Book Two and only last for about three chapters.

  • Mark Antony was inspired by Marcus Antonius from the play Julius Caesar, most notably because of his speech at Caesar’s funeral.

  • Mark Antony was a trainer in modern day Orre in the first plot draft. He stole Pokémon and was much more cold-hearted and harsh. His death was during a battle against the famous Red, who confronted him to put a stop to his crimes, and his memories were taken by Mew before he became Death’s assistant. See Special Chapter 01 for a more in depth story on this.

  • Celebi was originally male and just as malicious as Mew.

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Dates/Accomplishments:

September 24, 2009: Finished outlining the story, chapter by chapter.

September 27, 2009: Actually started writing the darn thing! Yay!

October 5, 2009: Finished Chapter 1. Chapter needs to be proofread.

October 8, 2009: Posted My Guardian Angel along with the first chapter.

October 17, 2009: Finished Chapter 2, though it needs proofreading. I'm glad how it turned out, and it seems I have started to stray from my chapter-by-chapter outline already. xD

October 18, 2009: Chapter 2 is now posted. :D

November 1, 2009: Uploaded some Halloween fanart. Yes, I know I'm late. xD

November 17, 2009: A whole month later, I finished Chapter 3. I swear, writing the second third of this was like pulling teeth: slow, sort of painful, but necessary at the end. But hey, this chapter is very important, so I had to take special care in writing this one. Will start proofreading tomorrow if I can.

November 22, 2009: Chapter Three is finally posted. I'm glad how it turned out, and this marks the climatic start of the plot. ^^

December 11, 2009: Put up Character Profiles.

December 22, 2009 Exactly one month later, Chapter 4 is posted.

January 17, 2010: First chapter of the new year, Chapter 5, is posted. Also, a Soundtrack has now been started.

February 20, 2010: Chapter Six is finally posted. THIS is where the real story begins!

February 25, 2010: Added Mark Antony's character profile.

March 18, 2010: Chapter Seven is posted after finally putting Soul Silver down and proofreading it.

April 10, 2010: Hehe, did some crack fan art with Mark Antony. xDD

May 4, 2010: Special Chapter 01 is posted after over a month with no update. It's my longest chapter yet.

May 5, 2010: ˇFeliz Cinco de Mayo! <]:D Put up a Fun Facts/Trivia section.

May 15, 2010: Today, My Guardian Angel reached 100 pages. I'm honestly at a loss for words. It seemed like only yesterday I started writing this.

May 19, 2010: Posted Chapter Eight. Yes, we're back to our regularly-scheduled chapters. It was a fast update, too. 8)

June 23, 2010: Posted Chapter Nine. Late in proofreading due to working on fan fiction poster! I just need the shading and some effects! :D

July 24, 2010: The cover art is finally done!

August 14, 2010: Chapter Ten has been posted!

September 11, 2010: Chapter Eleven is up! This ends the "First Mission" arc.

December 12, 2010: Chapter Twelve is finally up! Book One is complete!

February 3, 2011: Chapter Thirteen, the first chapter of Book Two, has finally been posted!

April 16, 2011: Chapter Fourteen is finally posted.


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Fan Art:

- Fanfiction Title/Banner: By Natalia

- Halloween Outing by me :3 SPOILER!

- Mark Antony will invade Cassius' Vital Regions O_o

- My Guardian Angel - COVER

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Soundtrack:

(Character: ???) Bring Me To Life by Evanescence

(Special Chapter 01) Winter by Yasuhiro Takato Lyrics

(Chapter 5) Negai, Yami no Naka De from Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha

(Chapter 6) Foretaste from Pandora Hearts

(Chapter 7) Distortion World from Pokémon Platinum

(Chapter 8) Mt. Moon from Pokemon Red/Blue/Yellow

(Chapter 9) Lavender Town from Pokemon Red/Blue/Yellow


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Chapter Index:

Special Chapters



Chapter 01: The Scourge of Orre (Part 2) (Part 3) (Part 4)




Book One: Threads



Chapter 1: To Know Your Place (Part 2)

Chapter 2: Proposition and Consequence (Part 2)

Chapter 3: Where their Loyalties Lie (Part 2) (Part 3)

Chapter 4: The Dividing War

Chapter 5: Supernova (Part 2)

Chapter 6: Foretaste (Part 2) (Part 3)

Chapter 7: Judgment Day and Beyond (Part 2) (Part 3)

Chapter 8: And I Could See (Part 2)

Chapter 9: Our Desperate Hour (Part 2) (Part 3)

Chapter 10: On the Chase (Part 2)

Chapter 11: Finality and Immortality (Part 2)

Chapter 12: One Last Plot (Part 2)




Book Two: Intertwining



Chapter 13: The Girl with the Invisible Soul (Part 2)

Chapter 14: Good Intentions (Part 2)



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My Guardian Angel


Book One: Threads


Chapter 1

To Know Your Place


Against the black backdrop of the sky, shards of fine, crystalline ice flew from the passing comet and showered the night. The Hoenn air thrummed and vibrated as the colossal boulder of heated stone fell from space and into a deserted field off the coast of Gulf Kaiorga. The garnet trail of fire that had streaked across the sky and made the luminescent stars hazy flickered and eventually went out as the comet sizzled and cooled off in the ten-foot crater of charred earth and grass it had created.

Curious Taillow flew from the canopies of the trees that dotted the vast meadow to inspect this oddity. Were Pokémon fighting, and this giant stone was the result of one of their attacks? Or were humans invading their home from above? They crowded around the massive rock, flat, yellow beaks to one side as they cocked their heads in interest. Their ruby chests and necks seemed to glisten with the strange, ethereal glow the copper comet emitted. Navy feathers began to puff out; forked tails twitched anxiously. This rock was strange, foreign… alien. The dozens of birds looked at each other with wide, jet-black eyes. Was investigating this weird object such a good idea?

CRACK!

The foot-tall Pokémon jumped into the air with ear-shattering shrieks. Even their high-pitched wails of fright, however, weren’t shrill or loud enough to drown out the series of cracks that splintered the air. Now high in the air, they checked the comet with panicky glances. On the boulder, they saw spider-web cracks that widened and grew until, eventually, slabs of rock began to split and fall to the ground. The air around the comet morphed from uncomfortably warm into the blistering heat that had consumed it when it was in flight. More animalistic screeches were let out as most of the Tiny Swallow Pokémon high-tailed it back to their safe nests. Those who lingered behind finally took flight when a teal-colored tentacle wiggled free from the meteor’s core.

Soon, a ruby one joined in on the dance for freedom. Next, a green hand popped out. Together, the tentacles and the hand grasped either side of the comet, desperate to destroy the prison that still trapped the body they were attached to. Pulling as one, they caused the rock to grunt until, with a Herculean effort, the comet was split into two. Steam immediately rose when the core of the meteor, brimming with heat, was exposed to the Pokémon World’s cool air and breeze. The fog was blown away, though, when the creature inside rose into the air and greeted this new planet with pinprick pupils. His blue-green, oval head swiveled this way and that. The two trapezoid-shaped ears he bore were perked and alert. When it was clear that there was nothing around (other than the quivering foliage of trees), the alien landed outside the crater with thin and spindly legs. Deoxys, as he had always dubbed himself, looked down and quizzically felt the carpet of greenery. How strange, was his thought. Deoxys looked back at what had been his home for the past three years. The meteor looked just like how his asteroid home had after that nearby star collapsed: broken and empty. However, he was alive; he had survived, and maybe this strange, new rock could replace his home, even if its ground was soft and its stars weren’t so bright and close.

The space dweller turned away from the cold pieces of stone at the bottom of the crater, the amethyst sphere in his chest reflecting the dying embers of his home, and began to rise into the air. With one last look at the field he had disturbed, Deoxys began to fly north, not knowing where he was going but positive that he could find somewhere to rest and recharge.

For a long while, all he passed were forests teeming with Pokémon and more vacant fields. Once or twice, he stopped to inspect the creatures until they were scared enough to run back to their homes. They fascinated him, made him want to explore more. He had always been the only living thing in his small asteroid. Interacting with others, even if it was merely a “greet and run,” made him feel a bit less lonely.

It wasn’t until he stumbled upon a village that his interest was truly piqued. Dozens of quaint wooden houses were spread along the area, most of them sporting fences that surrounded them and their acres of land. The dirt-paved roads were empty at this time of night, the windows of the houses dark. When he flitted around, he saw more of those Pokémon creatures huddled in the small, rectangular barns behind some of the houses. Although he saw some feathery creatures of orange asleep in wired coops outside the barns and chocolate-colored puffballs that sported two dozing heads near the rooftops, what really made him stop and stare were the pink creatures huddled in the middle of the fenced field. Plump and round, they were sleeping peacefully and unaware of the chilly gust that swept their home. Occasionally, the wind would make their long tails move, causing the bells at the ends to tremble a short tune before they went quiet again. Stray leaves would also pass and snag themselves on the two, small horns that protruded from each head; their four udders would wobble with each snore. Despite all of that, they slept on with no idea that a curious alien was creeping towards them.

Deoxys descended into the swaying, canary-yellow crops on the other side of the Miltank herd, hesitant about coming any closer. Unlike the other Pokémon he had encountered, these were asleep, and he could observe them for a while if he was careful. He didn’t want to scare the bovine off by just popping in.

Twin tentacles began to move the stalks of grain aside…

“I wouldn’t do that if I were you,” echoed a voice.

Small pupils darted to the right and left until the foreign being figured out the words had come from behind him. Deoxys whirled around, tentacles and hand poised at his sides. Eyes narrowed as he saw the newcomer lazily float in the air. Yes, he was curious about what this foot-tall creature was, but anybody who managed to sneak up behind him was dangerous, as dangerous as those collapsing stars. The more he watched the bipedal, salmon-pink Pokémon hover in front of his face, the less curious and more alert he became. The crop stalks hardly moved when the creature’s long tail brushed against them, and those celestial blue eyes would never leave him, even when the stranger’s small and pointed ears twitched to some faraway sound. Not even he, Deoxys, could be so silent and stealthy.

Finally, after an eternity of black and blue eyes locked together, the furry creature spoke. “Now that I have gotten your attention, let me introduce myself; I am Mew, one of the great Arceus’ oldest children.”

Mew swept one of his short arms in a bow before straightening up again. Deoxys cocked his head, managing to understand the deity’s words but still confused as to why he was here. Mew floated in closer, his cerulean gaze no longer so humble. The wind that had blessed the farm seemed to still until all Deoxys could feel was the psychic’s presence; even the Miltank’s chiming bells could no longer be heard.

“Since your landing on our planet, you have been watched by unseen eyes,” the New Species Pokémon breathed, then grinned when he saw Deoxys’ eyes widen in shock. Mew backed up but still kept his satisfied smirk; his tail curled around him, as though it was a snake slithering around its master. “We don’t know how things work where you come from, but we have an order here, one that you now must follow if you plan to stay.”

Deoxys, though able to understand Mew’s speech after analyzing the language the Pokémon he met in the forest spoke, could not speak Pokémon tongue. Instead, he slipped out of his defensive position and inclined his head, showing he understood. Where else was he supposed to go if he was run out of this planet? He was not sure his body could endure another long trip through space. Luck had been on his side; no meteor showers or passing asteroids had hit him. What if his luck had been spent?

The pink pixie widely smiled a smile of superiority. “The Council of Legends will be glad to hear you’ve agreed to listen.”

Then, Mew flew up, high above the now swaying crops. Deoxys followed the Psychic-type’s movements with his eyes until Mew motioned with a flick of his tail for him to do the same. Cautiously, the alien floated up and joined the god at his side. Once again, Deoxys got the feeling of every living thing freezing to make Mew’s powerful presence known.

“Do you see the mountain range in the horizon?” Mew asked, almost ethereally with the absense of a breeze.

The ruby and aquamarine creature craned his head to see the ridges of brown, but a steady glow of lights on the other side of the mountains caught his eye. They bathed part of the night sky a milky-white, seemingly unwavering. Deoxys started in mid-air. Was that a star? By the blinding light that surrounded it, it looked liked it was about to collapse.

Deoxys began to back up, only to be stopped by a force he couldn’t see. Limbs paralyzed and the orb in his chest dimming, Mew faced him and disapprovingly shook his head. His eyes, brimming with the psychic energy he wielded so easily, never left his face as he circled the trapped creature.

“No, no, none of that,” he scolded in a condescending manner, unaware of Deoxys’ worries. Gazing back at the mountainous range before them, he continued to tell his captive, “There are a multitude of caves that you can hide in while the Council of Legends decides where to place you. You’ll be safe from humans, and there are no Pokémon in the mountains who will be able to bypass the shields I will place.”

A series of unintelligible squeaks and screeches broke the quiet: Deoxys was trying to verbally communicate his protests since his body could not. Doduo began to stir from where they roosted. Miltank softly mooed, questioning why their sleep was being disturbed. Now sporting a deeply-etched frown, Mew snapped his fingers; Deoxys’s mouth was shut with an audible snap. In a deep crevice of his mind, Mew could imagine Arceus reprimanding him for being so harsh to this queer being. However, he didn’t care at the moment. The fact that a less powerful creature was disobeying his orders made him grind his teeth in anger.

With his tail now whipping around his frame like a hissing Arbok, Mew narrowed his eyes and took hold of one of Deoxys' frozen tentacles.

“I guess you will have to be taken there,” he sighed, as though forced to talk to a disobedient child. Mew shut his eyes in concentration, and right after he felt his power bubbling and coursing through both of them, their images flickered and disappeared with a twinkle of light.

Deoxys sensed that he was tumbling and turning. Head spinning, he felt himself being compressed from many different directions, making him struggle for each breath. With his vision dark and his body still immobile, he could do nothing but stumble and fall into a heap when his frozen feet touched ground. Being roughly pulled up, Deoxys suddenly regained his mobility and vision. Immediately, without even taking a glance at the cave they had materialized in, the asteroid dweller flew away from Mew. His whole body still quivered from the deity’s psychic energy, a chilling reminder of how powerful Mew was, despite his childish appearance. The way Deoxys backed up to the rocky wall of the cave actually made his kidnapper chuckle.

This is where you stay, for now,” the furry psychic said nonchalantly, indicating the damp walls, the stalactite-infested ceiling, and the stalagmite-covered floor. Deoxys looked around but was unable to see more than the dripping points of the structures through the blanket of darkness. He had lived on an asteroid, where stars and moons always bathed his home in a veil of light; why was this creature putting him in such a polar-opposite place? As anxious as he was, though, Deoxys was no fool, so he chose to stay quiet, merely breathing in the stale, unmoving air that suffocated him.

“I’ll come back to announce what our verdict is.” Mew, invisible in the blackness, faced the direction the cave entrance was located at. Deoxys stared blankly at where he assumed his kidnapper was, then jumped back when a trail of glowing violet appeared a couple of feet away. The tendril of power avoided the rocky outcroppings with ease until it rounded a bend and disappeared a second later. A glimmer of light that stopped to steadily let out a sheen of fuchsia told Deoxys that the barrier Mew had mentioned was in place.

“Stay here,” were the final words he heard before, just like that, he was left in his grim prison.

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Even when Mew Teleported into Arceus’ Chamber, the biggest and most elaborate room in the Hall of Origin, and let out a disgruntled sigh, not a sound could be heard. The Species Pokémon gazed at the moon-white walls and the granite pillars that stretched thirty-feet high to connect with the sloped dome that was the ceiling. Already he felt the dampness and decay of the cave fade away to become a distant memory in his mind. With the light that shone from the curved windows of the ceiling warming his fur, the ancestor of all Pokémon floated beyond the six pillars in front of him (the ones that formed a circle in the middle of the room) and into the center of the chamber, where the golden outline of a star invaded a part of the smooth, limestone floor.

Immediately, he heard the clicking of talons and the flap of wings from up above. Ho-Oh and Lugia, perched on two of the six pillars that did not connect with the ceiling, let their conversation die to gaze at him, silver and rainbow-colored feathers glimmering as they craned their heads. Celebi jumped down from on top of a pillar and became a blur of emerald as she descended towards the floor in a lazy spiral. The small hedgehog that was Shaymin wrinkled her nose when the pixie of time fluttered too close for comfort and scurried towards Cresselia, who was floating beside her grim counterpart, Darkrai. Jirachi shook her head with a small smile and went over to comfort Manaphy, who had been frightened by Celebi’s dizzying antics.

Of course, no matter how many Legendaries there were in the room, the pixie of ancestry could never ignore the great god in the center. With his flowing silver fur putting the polished walls to shame, their ten-foot-tall father was automatically the center of attention.

Then again, Mew thought, his spinning, golden wheel that encircles his waist and the four jades on each point always seem to magnify his majestic features.

“Arceus,” Mew addressed the Alpha Pokémon when he halted in mid-air. He gave a bow and held it, allowing him a view of the god’s pointed, topaz hooves. “I talked to the alien, as you requested.”

Every member of the Council of Legends drew in closer, their breaths hushed.

Was this strange creature a danger to Johto if he was allowed to stay? Lugia and Ho-Oh thought as one.

Was this alien powerful enough to possibly become a Legend? Celebi thought with a deep scowl on her face. The prospect of ruling alongside one who wasn’t even a Pokémon was a sour one.

Could this foreigner possibly take advantage of the weaker creatures in this world? Cresselia wanted to know.

“Please, do not jump to conclusions,” their quadruped leader calmly told them. As their father, he could feel their agitated thoughts, their worries, and immediate mistrust as though they were his own. His children relaxed though still shared meaningful glances. When it was clear their minds were relatively silent, Arceus returned to Mew. “What have you observed?”

The Kanto pixie straightened and said with a hint of boredom, “This alien is like a human child: curious and lost. He doesn’t seem too intelligent or resourceful.” Mew inclined his head to the side, a frown now stretched taut over his face; he was clearly frustrated that he didn’t have Deoxys completely figured out. “Power wise, it’s hard to tell. Even when my Psychic immobilized him, I could not delve into his mind to see how powerful this creature is. If I was able to, I might have also been able to decipher his strange language. I did manage to catch the name “Deoxys” very briefly through telepathy, however.” With a final sigh, Mew was done.

Not a minute had stretched of silence before Lugia spread his three-tipped wings and descended carefully to the ground. His long tail swished back and forth in his anxiousness, the two navy-colored spikes at the end threatening to send Shaymin and Jirachi flying. “We cannot allow this creature, this “Deoxys,” to stay,” he gruffly voiced. His coal-black eyes glittered with determination, and the two rows of blue spikes along his back were raised. Craning his long and elegant neck, he saw Ho-Oh, still on the pillar, nodding in agreement. “To underestimate his power is foolish. Who’s to say he’s not masking his abilities? Johto can lie in ruins if we’re too proud and dismiss the possibility.”

Cresselia came forward, the violet, celestial rings attached to her sloped back and arms shining while the twin crescents on either side of her head glowed like stars against the sky. Raising her yellow beak towards the Johto trio masters, she nodded to them before saying, “Lugia and Ho-Oh make a convincing argument. By disregarding this otherworldly being solely on Mew’s account, Pokémon and humans alike will be endangered. If we force Deoxys to return to space, we can avoid any possible catastrophes.”

Arceus acknowledged her words with a bow of his own head, then saw that the shadows next to him shivered and moved. He gracefully moved to let Darkrai have the floor. The Pitch-Black Pokémon let his forest-green orbs sweep over the Council of Legends, as though they all opposed his unspoken thoughts, then focused on Cresselia. The ruby spikes around his neck bristled ever so slightly; the billowing white shadows on his head lengthened. “Should we run out Deoxys, without evidence that he’s the monster you’re speculating, simply because he could endanger the humans?” Darkrai sent a sharp glare towards Lugia and Ho-Oh, the tattered edges of his body wildly flapping with unseen wind. “Wasn’t it humans who destroyed the Tin Tower? Isn’t it humans who pollute the lakes that Suicune purifies?”

Ho-Oh flapped her garnet wings so hard that the emerald tips threatened to fall. Like a flaming phoenix, the Rainbow Pokémon landed on the chamber’s floor. With golden tail feathers fanned out behind her, Ho-Oh regarded the nightmare creator with a steely, amber gaze. “Do not drag your past into Council affairs, Darkrai! You know perfectly well you were banished from Alamos Town due to your own nightmare-spreading frenzy.”

Fisting his hands, the Sinnoh Legendary growled, “You seem to forget that at the time there had been a hallucination-inducing sickness spreading. My nightmares were simply amplified, although it seems that humans and you neglect to take their epidemic into account.”

Shaymin hopped closer to the center but was unable to ask her brethren to cease their feuding. As powerful as she was, to be looked down upon by the others, especially those already with heated tempers, made her lime-green fur and the lilac flower nestled among it shake. The Gratitude Pokémon turned her white snout towards Arceus, but the god merely stood back and watched his children settle it out. Manaphy beside her also stayed back and settled for twirling her antennae with her flippers and watching the ends glow. The blood-red gem on her cerulean abdomen flickered, meaning she was unsure about what to do about the quarrels as well.
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“Shouldn’t we consider the fact that Deoxys could be capable of intelligent conversation? That we may be able to understand him?”

Jirachi floated to the scene, much to Shaymin’s relief. Long, butterscotch-yellow tassels fluttered behind her small gray body as she rose into the air and faced her quarreling brothers. “Is it really fair to choose Deoxys’s faith for him if he is able to communicate?” The wish granter turned when someone slightly scoffed, making the two teal wish tags on her star-shaped head flutter.

Celebi, who had been silent behind Mew until now, came forward. The cerulean-tipped antennae in her swept, green hair bobbed with her scornful chuckles. Delicate filmy wings fluttered as the time traveler joined the Council. “Jirachi, tell me if I have missed your point completely,” hints of sarcasm were evident in her tone and in her china-blue eyes, “but exactly what would the Pokémon world gain if we let this creature stay? Even the weakest Pokémon have something to contribute. This Deoxys hasn’t shown a speck of usefulness, yet you are offering to let him choose his position in the matter?”

The Hoenn Legendary frowned for only a second before composing herself. “What I’m merely saying, Celebi, is that we should not judge Deoxys’s mental capacity without a second thought to the matter. Yes, he may not seem resourceful, powerful, or useful now, but by observing him longer, we may come to a sensible and thought-out conclusion-”

“Is that what you really want, Jirachi?” barked Ho-Oh, the golden feather crest on her head bouncing with each harsh word. “Do you really want to let Deoxys stay long enough for him to be able to show what’s he capable of? At what cost would that be? Destroyed towns? Interference with weather patterns? Possible time rips? All for the sake of deciding whether he can stay or not?” Lugia brushed his wing against his counterpart’s to sooth her sizzling temper.

“No, it is not,” the Wish Pokémon responded curtly. Jirachi tiredly rubbed the top point of her head, the only point that did not harbor a wish tag, and looked over at Arceus. She respected his decision in keeping out of Council matters (other than giving the final verdict in decisions), but she wished that he would assert his authority over his children more often. Maybe that way, Council meetings would not turn into battles of self-interest and prejudice.

“We cannot endanger the Pokémon and human populace merely to welcome in a curious alien,” the Time Travel Pokémon drawled. “It is, after all, our duty to protect this world.”

Shaymin growled beneath her breath as Jirachi, taken aback at her sister’s cynicism, formed an uncharacteristic scowl and began to say, “We are not welcoming anybody, yet we are not supposed to rightly refuse someone a chance to establish themselves on Earth.”

“Our duties don’t always allow us to be fair with everybody,” Mew replied loudly so that his voice echoed against the pristine walls of the chamber for everybody to hear. Calm and cool, he hovered beside Celebi and continued, only the slightly narrowing of his eyes betraying his kind façade, “We must put Earth and its inhabitants first and foremost in all of our decisions, not outsiders. You cannot allow kindn…”

The Kanto Legendary trailed off. His whip-like tail stiffened when a horrendous chill ran down his spine. Small ears flew back at the same time Mew let an undignified snarl rise from his throat. Dismissing Jirachi with a mental flap of his hand, he faced Arceus, bowed, and said with a hint of a growl, “My barrier has been shattered. Deoxys has escaped.”

Arceus nodded once, his jade eyes troubled.

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Panic made Deoxys’ heart flutter in his chest. Though knowing he shouldn’t, the alien looked back.

Amethyst glittered all over the cave mouth he had just left, remnants of the barrier that had kept him prisoner. Rocks had turned to pebbles and pebbles to dust before he had managed to exert all his power and escape. Was he tired? Deoxys wasn’t sure. Adrenaline coursed through his veins and kept him flying farther away from the ocher mountain range. Yes, he was out, but did that mean he was in the clear? He bet his tentacles that he wasn’t.

Water had stretched below him, calm and undisturbed, but now, a mass of land took its place, along with a flare of bright, and familiar, light. Deoxys halted and let out some frightened calls that pierced the air. He had been so hell-bent on escaping the cave before Mew could notice, so afraid he would be taken again, that he hadn’t noticed he had been flying right into the heated star that was ready to implode. Frozen with fear and indecision, he looked back at the mountain range then towards the halo of light that seemed to touch the dark sky. The double-edged sword loomed in his mind’s eye, spinning and spinning close. Would getting incinerated be better than whatever Mew had in store for him?

Deoxys chanced a look below him, automatically squinting to see through the blinding glare. Were those creatures moving down there? Moving in the core of a boiling star? Despite every nerve of his body telling him to fly the opposite way, Deoxys inched closer; he faintly noticed that he didn’t feel the heat of the celestial light. Yes, there were creatures moving around the rectangular, silver protrusions of the star! The space dweller felt his mind flip in shock. How was it possible?

Suddenly, Deoxys was propelled backwards by an invisible gust. Flipping before stopping when the shock of the hit dwindled, he steadied himself and wildly looked around for his attacker. He caught sight of a green serpent, its blood-red fangs bared and the yellow rings adorning its spiked body glowing with rage, before another Air Slash nicked him in the abdomen and sent him spinning downward. Rayquaza, ruler of Hoenn’s skies, clenched his three-clawed hands and followed his target. His spade tail swished as he stopped himself in mid-descend; an aurora had appeared in the night sky.

As the otherworldly lights of purple and pink danced alongside the stars, Deoxys began to change, the sphere in his chest going out. His tentacles and hands thickened into slabs as thick as his body but as flexible as his first limbs. Spindly legs bulged as his chest and head hardened and grew until the alien was encased in a suit of red and green armor. The violet orb flared to life and was ready to serve its Master’s Defense Forme.

Rayquaza snorted in indignation, the emerald plates on his body spinning while the twin, flat-ended spikes on his head twitched. “You dare trespass in my domain, no doubt to attack the fair city of LaRousse, and then mock me by putting on disguises?” he roared, fire-yellow eyes on the verge of smoldering. All twenty-three-feet of him bristled as he reared and let loose a torrent of sapphire energy.

Deoxys shielded his body with his broad arms. Specks of burning blue and white showered his head. While he closed his eyes and felt the specks burning his face, his arms unpleasantly tingled. Ignoring the smell of charred skin, Deoxys endured the last of the Dragon Pulse before beginning to flee towards the city. The Sky High Pokémon snarled at the sight and flicked his tail. A gust picked up around him, its chilly breeze doing nothing to cool his out-of-control temper, and with another slap of his tail, it was sent cantering towards the scared foreigner.

Deoxys felt himself be picked up by the Twister, then tossed around as the currents grew faster and stronger, eventually merging into walls of spiraling white that never let him go. The captive, curled into a protective ball, saw from the center of the twenty-foot-high funnel a blur of green coming his way; those electric eyes, already envisioning him at the bottom of the ocean, left him with no doubt.

He was going to have to fight for his freedom.

Tendrils of fuchsia wove through the threads of night a second time. Deoxys’ bulky arms thinned into two tentacles while his head lengthened back into an aerodynamic spike. Chest and legs were now thinner and raven-black. His jewel began to glow and power his Speed Forme.

Tentacles whipped about his head, too fast to be effected by the violent gusts that swirled all around him. Then his body began to spin in unison and against the Twister’s current. The wind fluctuated and began to unweave itself from the tight cone it had shaped. Wobbling as though on a shaking spindle, the Twister collapsed and thinned out until only wisps of air caressed Deoxys’ face. Seeing the trespasser close his eyes for a second of bliss made the dragon’s blood boil. With a malicious grin, he slithered towards the morphing creature and clamped down his midnight-black jaws…

On nothing.

The serpent started, and calculating eyes searched the sky for the red menace. Before Rayquaza could draw a breath, tentacles were wrapped and tightened around his windpipe. Deoxys straddled himself on the beast’s neck and refused to let go. The deity roared in anger and haphazardly flew around to try and buck the alien. With the wind beating his face, Deoxys flipped forward, his grip on the Legendary still strong. Infuriated eyes narrowed into slits when Rayquaza found Deoxys now sitting on his snout.

“You cowardly little-!”

Then all the hot-blooded Flying-type could see was stars, his head ringing from the Zen Headbutt that had cut off his rant. Deoxys reared back in pain, cringing and mentally cursing himself for not realizing that a recoil was obvious when he was so close to Rayquaza. Magenta sparks still dancing around his head, the Psychic-type flew high into the air and looked down, then quickly regretted it.

The speedy alien looked away, but it did not clear the horrible image that had assaulted his eyes. With fangs alight with the aurora above, he saw them for all their ganet glory. Their points, sharpened into non-existent ends, had been dripping with saliva as thick as the fury in his horrible, golden eyes.

BAM!

With the Scary Face still etched into his mind, Deoxys felt himself falling. As gravity took him to the unforgivable ocean below, pain wove its way through his chest. The sticky, neon-green liquid that was his blood sluggishly dripped down from the slash on his neck and down towards the cracked gem in his chest. Deoxys raised a tentacle to the orb, feeling its energy dim, spreading weakness and exhaustion throughout his body. Not daring to touch the throbbing wound that wound around his throat, he struggled to stop his descent, forcing his eyes to stay open and scout for his enraged foe.

There he was, circling above him like a vulture at high noon. Fangs were split into a satisfied smirk as Rayquaza watched the outsider steady himself. That expression screamed that he wouldn’t be let go, not until ten thousand leagues separated Deoxys from the sky. Green and garnet tentacles twitched with mixed emotions. On top of fearing for his life, he was outraged that everybody on this planet wanted to control him, subdue him. Was he being here such an enormous inconvenience? Or were they all simply trying to eliminate any outside competition they saw in order to keep whatever hierarchy of power they had in this planet intact?

It didn’t matter. He had traveled for light years, through forming galaxies and asteroid belts, in order to find a place he could call home.

This place was it, and he wasn’t going to be forced back into space, to be cold and alone, by this beast!

Extremespeed propelled him towards the snake that dared run him from his home. The wind that had whistled with his fall went silent until he no longer felt a breeze. His beating heart, Rayquaza’s breathing, all had disappeared in the vacuum his attack created. Even the tremendous thump! that reverberated when the Dragon-type was sent flying had been totally muffled. When Deoxys did stop, the black that surrounded him returned to be the night sky. The gentle lap of waves returned, followed by his enemy’s now labored breathing. So riled up he was that it took him a moment to realize that shimmering, broken dragon scales were raining down.

By that time, the silhouette of Arceus caught his eye. Hidden behind a haggard and fuming Rayquaza, he came towards Deoxys with the calm aura that made the asteroid dweller lower his writhing appendages. As effortlessly as though he had wings instead of hooves, the Alpha Pokémon hovered between the two beings.

“That outsider should be punished!” spat the sky ruler. Although hunched up to stop the aching on his bruised side, he still bared his fangs and narrowed his eyes with every word. “How dare he come upon LaRousse with his evil intentions. If not for me-!”

“You,” his creator cut in, authority ringing in that single word, “should have been with the rest of the Council, as I had asked. Ruler of the heavens you may be, your duties as a Legendary are just as important. Besides, Groudon and Kyogre can guard Hoenn for the time you are gone.”

Arceus flew towards Deoxys, glancing from the rivulets of green blood that ran down the side of his neck to the lithe body that had managed to stand against Rayquaza’s own.

“If you choose to stay here, you must obey the laws of our world. Though it’s still not certain whether you will be allowed to make your home on Earth, I will lead you to a place where you may rest and live away from the rest of the Pokémon. Foreigner you may be, you do not deserve this hostility.”

“Home on Earth… rest of the Pokémon…”

Deoxys stared then nodded numbly. The aurora above LaRousse faded away when he morphed back to his Normal Forme. Maybe, just maybe, these “Pokémon” creatures weren’t all so bad, if he managed to stay away from those that were.

“What about you, Arceus?” Rayquaza asked at length. “Haven’t you abandoned your duties if you are here?”

“Do not worry. I assigned Mew and Celebi temporary charge. As my oldest and wisest children, they will make sure the meeting will continue as smoothly as it should.”

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A/N: For those of you wondering, no, Deoxys will not be a main character. This is actually his only appearance in the whole story. Reason for bringing him in? His situation allowed a perfect chance to introduce and build on the more important Legendaries of the story. With that aside, comments and criticism are greatly appreciated! ^-^

Next chapter? The Council meeting goes on, but Mew and Celebi decide to touch upon a different, more controversial topic that may very well endanger the human race.
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I am Mew, one of the great Arceus’s oldest children.”
That extra 's' doesn't need to be there. :P

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Mew asked, almost ethereally with the absent of a breeze.
Should that be 'absence'?

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he scolded in a condescending manner, unaware of Deoxys’s worries.
No extra 's' there either. ;P

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A serious of unintelligible squeaks and screeches broke the quiet:
Should be 'series'. xD

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Deoxys was trying to verbally communicate his protests since his body could not.
There's a double space between 'to' and 'verbally', although you can't see it unless you quote it.

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With his tail now whipping around his frame like a hissing Arbok, Mew narrowed his eyes and took hold of one of Deoxys’s frozen tentacles.
Again with the 's'.

Second post!

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“Shouldn’t we consider the fact that Deoxys could be capable of intelligent conversation?
And here too. xD

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Panic made Deoxys’s heart flutter in his chest.
And again.

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A gust picked up around him, it’s chilly breeze doing nothing to cool his out-of-control temper,
Should be 'its'.

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Wobbling as though on a shaking spindle, the Twister collapsed and thinned out until only wisps of air caressed Deoxys’s face.
Another 's' to dispose of. x3

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With fangs alight with the aurora above, he saw them for all their ivory glory.
Aren't Rayquaza's teeth red?

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Fangs were spilt into a satisfied smirk as Rayquaza watched the outsider steady himself.
Should be 'split'.

Done! I must say, I'm very impressed--not that I expected any less from you. xD I love the story and idea, and how Deoxys has only just come into the world, seeking belonging and not wishing to be injured as he has been. I think the conflict between the Legendaries was really good, and some thinking he should have a fair trial as opposed to those who wished for him to be banished without question was an effective idea, and gives distinguishing characters and viewpoints.

Remember that we don't put an extra 's' on the end of words that already have 's's if they are possessive, as it's not necessary. Also, I saw one bit with "it's" when it was supposed to be "its", and I just want to ensure you know that when possessive, "its" doesn't have an apostrophe. Only when it's abbreviated for "it is" does it need an apostrophe. :P

I also love your description! It's very deep and yet you don't dwell on things too much, like descriptions of Pokemon species (which, on second thought, you may want to elaborate on), which, in many cases, is good. ^^ I love your use of vocabulary, and a few words in there I hadn't come across before. xD Not that I have a wide vocabulary myself, but still. ^^ I love how you write as well, and it's really good that you've planned it all out. Unlike myself, you seem to have everything in order and you appear to know exactly where you'd headed.
Also, you saying that the story's main character isn't Deoxys almost surprised me, and I'm interested to know who will--if there's one main one. Either way though, I'm sure you'll get lots of fans!

I'm looking forward to see what else you have in store, and I'm curious to see where this will lead. You could add so many things to this, and it'll be exciting to see what you do include! :D I'll be sure to keep reading. ^^

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Ahh! Your chapters are so long compared to mine ;-;. The sad thing is I would actually like to get my book published some day. That's a goal I hopefully (hope) to accomplish. Great writing :D
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That extra 's' doesn't need to be there. :P



Should that be 'absence'?



No extra 's' there either. ;P



Should be 'series'. xD



There's a double space between 'to' and 'verbally', although you can't see it unless you quote it.



Again with the 's'.

Second post!



And here too. xD



And again.



Should be 'its'.



Another 's' to dispose of. x3



Aren't Rayquaza's teeth red?



Should be 'split'.

Done! I must say, I'm very impressed--not that I expected any less from you. xD I love the story and idea, and how Deoxys has only just come into the world, seeking belonging and not wishing to be injured as he has been. I think the conflict between the Legendaries was really good, and some thinking he should have a fair trial as opposed to those who wished for him to be banished without question was an effective idea, and gives distinguishing characters and viewpoints.

Remember that we don't put an extra 's' on the end of words that already have 's's if they are possessive, as it's not necessary. Also, I saw one bit with "it's" when it was supposed to be "its", and I just want to ensure you know that when possessive, "its" doesn't have an apostrophe. Only when it's abbreviated for "it is" does it need an apostrophe. :P

I also love your description! It's very deep and yet you don't dwell on things too much, like descriptions of Pokemon species (which, on second thought, you may want to elaborate on), which, in many cases, is good. ^^ I love your use of vocabulary, and a few words in there I hadn't come across before. xD Not that I have a wide vocabulary myself, but still. ^^ I love how you write as well, and it's really good that you've planned it all out. Unlike myself, you seem to have everything in order and you appear to know exactly where you'd headed.
Also, you saying that the story's main character isn't Deoxys almost surprised me, and I'm interested to know who will--if there's one main one. Either way though, I'm sure you'll get lots of fans!

I'm looking forward to see what else you have in store, and I'm curious to see where this will lead. You could add so many things to this, and it'll be exciting to see what you do include! :D I'll be sure to keep reading. ^^

~Xanthe.
Fixed mistakes. Thanks a lot for pointing them out! ^^ However, I'm not sure whether to change the apostrophe 's in Deoxys yet. I used to only put the apostrophe in names like his, but I saw that with human names, you put the extra "s" along with the apostrophe. :/ I'm going to have look that up when I get back from school.

Hehe, I love description! Sometimes I'm worried that I put too much (I'm aware that I nee to elaborate on Pokemon description a bit, but at the same time, I don't want to like stop the story and describe the Pokemon then hit the play button again). And yeah, I have each chapter planned out (although it may happen where I have to split or merge them).

Stay tune! Next chapter, you'll see who's one of the main characters. The second main character won't pop out into Chapter 4. ^-^


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xD I was actually surprised that the chapter was as long as it was. I guess the key to have a good, lengthy chapter is to elaborate. And thank you! :D

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Fixed mistakes. Thanks a lot for pointing them out! ^^ However, I'm not sure whether to change the apostrophe 's in Deoxys yet. I used to only put the apostrophe in names like his, but I saw that with human names, you put the extra "s" along with the apostrophe. :/ I'm going to have look that up when I get back from school.

Hehe, I love description! Sometimes I'm worried that I put too much (I'm aware that I nee to elaborate on Pokemon description a bit, but at the same time, I don't want to like stop the story and describe the Pokemon then hit the play button again). And yeah, I have each chapter planned out (although it may happen where I have to split or merge them).

Stay tune! Next chapter, you'll see who's one of the main characters. The second main character won't pop out into Chapter 4. ^-^
And I won't mention the mistakes in that post. xD No worries! Well, I was always taught to pretend that the extra 's' was there, and that you didn't need it...but we have our own ways. ^^

xD Me too! And yeah, I know what you mean. I always describe them a lot (but I can't help it!) but I know I'm trailing away from the story. That's why I reckon we should try to describe them as the character analyses them and/or as they do things. Like Mew's tail brushing against things. ^^

I will stay tuned! Oh, okay. ^^ I'll be watching...and waiting... xD

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Hmm, the Council of Legends . . . Why does that sound familiar? o_0?

Great story so far! Like they've said, you've done wonderful descriptions and have a mastery over vocabulary. The style and flow were beautiful. Well done!
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Great story so far! Like they've said, you've done wonderful descriptions and have a mastery over vocabulary. The style and flow were beautiful. Well done!
*shrugs* I tend to hear stuff then forget, so maybe I heard it somewhere or in some fan fiction I read. But thanks! Whenever I proofread, I pay the most attention to the flow because I tend to repeat words or end a sentence weirdly or something. xP I hope you stay tuned!

Oh, and Xanthe, while I was at school, I was googled apostrophe grammar rules. Two articles told me that apostrophe 's was correct, one told me that it's different styles and both are correct, and another one told me to that I don't need to add the extra 's. Well, for now, I'll keep using apostrophe 's. ^^;

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Oh, and Xanthe, while I was at school, I was googled apostrophe grammar rules. Two articles told me that apostrophe 's was correct, one told me that it's different styles and both are correct, and another one told me to that I don't need to add the extra 's. Well, for now, I'll keep using apostrophe 's. ^^;

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Well, we had a grammar lesson today and the teacher specifically specified (xD) that you shouldn't put another 's' because there's already one and the other one's not needed... Well, I'm just sayin' that that's how all my teachers have taught me, but if you wanna stick to the other way then it's fine. xD I'm not gonna pester you about it any more. :3

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You know, after all, I'll just change the word to just a comma. Your teacher seems a lot more trustworthy than internet articles (and I also asked Bryce and he agreed with your teacher). *goes to fix that.*

And so this post isn't spam or something, here's somethng I'll use as the fan fic banner for now.



This is a small part of the kick-ass movie poster my friend made of this fan fic for my birthday. It's took big to scan the entire thing, unfortunately, but it's on my wall and inspires me. ^-^

(I'll add the other parts as I introduce the main characters of the story later on.)

- Kat
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You know, after all, I'll just change the word to just a comma. Your teacher seems a lot more trustworthy than internet articles (and I also asked Bryce and he agreed with your teacher). *goes to fix that.*

And so this post isn't spam or something, here's somethng I'll use as the fan fic banner for now.



This is a small part of the kick-ass movie poster my friend made of this fan fic for my birthday. It's took big to scan the entire thing, unfortunately, but it's on my wall and inspires me. ^-^

(I'll add the other parts as I introduce the main characters of the story later on.)

- Kat
Oh, hehe, good. >:D And yeah, I thought that too. And if they're people who don't know as much about grammar as English teachers, then of course my teacher's going to be more reliable. xD And yeah. GO BRYCE!

Cool. ^^ Different from most banners (on account of how they've generally got Pokemon on them xD), but I like it. ^^

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Hey PK, really interesting story so far!! I'll definitely have to keep an eye on this story!! You're description is really good, I'm really impressed. The idea and story are great too!! I felt so bad for Deoxys. He only wanted to find a new home, but some of the Legends were kinda mean to him for little reason. I can't wait to read more!! Keep up the great work PK!!
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Hey PK, really interesting story so far!! I'll definitely have to keep an eye on this story!! You're description is really good, I'm really impressed. The idea and story are great too!! I felt so bad for Deoxys. He only wanted to find a new home, but some of the Legends were kinda mean to him for little reason. I can't wait to read more!! Keep up the great work PK!!
Thank you so much for the comment. ^^ (And you can call me, Kat, by the way). Yeah, the Legends are pretty mean aren't they? Most of them are too caught up in their own issues (like Ho-Oh and Lugia just care about the safety of Johto and how Darkrai greatly dislikes humans). You'll see more of that in Chapter 2 because that's where their bias really makes things worse.

Stay tuned! I'm currently typing up Chapter 2, and other than figuring where to cut off the chapter, it's going great. :)

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Thank you so much for the comment. ^^ (And you can call me, Kat, by the way). Yeah, the Legends are pretty mean aren't they? Most of them are too caught up in their own issues (like Ho-Oh and Lugia just care about the safety of Johto and how Darkrai greatly dislikes humans). You'll see more of that in Chapter 2 because that's where their bias really makes things worse.

Stay tuned! I'm currently typing up Chapter 2, and other than figuring where to cut off the chapter, it's going great. :)

- Kat
Okies Kat ^^ Yeah, and it's the same in RL. So many people are just too caught in their own issues to see the big picture, and it can sometimes cause problems for others, whether intentional or not. I wish people could just get along more in the world.... *sigh* Well, maybe that day will come in the future.

Anyways, I'm definitely staying tuned, I can't wait to read the next chapter!!! I'm plotting my own story, so you might wanna check it out once I get it put up! ^^
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