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Old 02-21-2007, 09:07 PM
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Attacktix Light
Chapter One: Coralia and Dogati Invaded

It was June 20th, and it was a cloudless sky. Princess Kaitlyn of Coralia is gazing at the sky from a balcony. Suddenly, she sees Molinese troops and a girl running for her life.

Jeremy: Princess Kaitlyn! We need to evacuate immediatley!
Kaitlyn: But there's a girl-
Jeremy: She's armed with a bow. She'll be fine.
Dalton: We need to get out.
Kaitlyn: I suppose...
Jeremy: Has General Peter taught you to use a weapon before he died?
Kaitlyn: Yes. He taught me lanceplay.
Dalton: We have our weapons. Let's go get you a lance right now!

Amatuer knights Dalton and Jeremy get Kaitlyn a javelin, then run out the door. The girl Kaitlyn saw asks them for help.

Kaitlyn: It's that girl!
Amber: I'm Princess Amber of Dogati.
Kaitlyn: I'm Princess Kaitlyn. We must run!
Amber: I need to defeat these people! They attacked Dogati without warning! Mother and Father are killed and...I was the only survivor.
Jeremy: They're surrounding us! On foot, we have no chance but to fight them.

Jeremy pulls his daggers out, Kaitlyn gets her javelin ready while Amber blindlessly is firing arrows, but Dalton simply walks by the Molin soldiers.

Amber: What does he think he's doing?
Dalton: I've been waiting a long time for this, Kaitlyn...
Jeremy: He's betrayed us!

A white light splits into three orange, yellow, and sky blue lights. The orange hits Kaitlyn, the yellow hits Amber, and Jeremy is hit by the sky blue light. A choker with a gem that color is put on the three of them.

Voice: Light, I call upon thee. Flaming Lance! Icicle Dagger! Lightning Arrow!
Kaitlyn: What the-

All are cast in a light of their color, and Jeremy obtains the Icicle Dagger, Kaitlyn obtains the Flaming Lance, and Amber obtains the Lightning Arrow. Their weapons are turned into these.

Kaitlyn: Uh, okay, I have no idea what happened, but I think we just got super-powerful weapons.
Jeremy: I think you're right, princess.
Kaitlyn: So, what are you waiting for? Let's try 'em out!




TO BE CONTINUED











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Old 02-22-2007, 04:13 PM
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In some ways, this FanFic is like both SpiderRiders and Fire Emblem. Just saying before this I do Chapter 2.





Attacktix Light
Chapter Two: Embedded in Light


The Molinese troops stand still, then charge. Dalton simply stays, afraid to attack.

Jeremy: Now is the time to ATTACK!

Jeremy attacks with his new Icicle Dagger, a white light is cast and explodes. It takes out a third of the enemy troops.

Molin Knight: Retreat!

The Molinese troops run, Dalton gazes at Kaitlyn, and then runs back with the enemy soldiers.

Voice: Light off.

Their weapons turn normal again, and a color of their light returns into their choker gem.

Kaitlyn: I think that we say "Light I call upon thee. Flaming Lance!"-

An orange light comes out of Kaitlyn's choker, hits her lance, and the javelin becomes the Flaming Lance.

Amber (laughing): I think you're right, Kaitlyn!

All but Kaitlyn laugh, Kaitlyn blushing.

Kaitlyn: I think I know how to get my spear back to normal. Light off!

The orange light comes out of the Flaming lance and into Kaitlyn's choker. The Flaming Lance becomes her javelin again.

Amber: So this necklace thing with the jewel turns us into superheroes, right?
Jeremy: Or something like that.

All laugh.


Meanwhile, at the Molin castle...

Ken (pounds table): AUGH! Those puny Coralians were chosen by the Godess' Light!
Joe: Your Highness, aren't we supposed to steal the Godess' Light?
Jesse: We never found a way.
Ken: The book reads: "Only the ones with the purest of hearts shall be called upon the Light."
Dalton: Maybe I should've stayed with them longer...
Joe: No. Godess' Light would've known what you were planning.
Dalton: True.
Ken: Look! Here, the book states a way...



TO BE CONTINUED






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Attacktix Light
Chapter Three: A Dark Foe


However, the Wolf with the powers of Hell shall overcome all but Godess' Light. When awakened from his chamber in Nanuak Cave, all shall die. Hope is in the hands of whoever may weild Godess' Light. Yet, it may be withered away with the Hell's Darkness power. When the Dark Emblem is placed upon its cascet, it shall arise.

Ken: Hell's Darkness is the key. Jesse, you get the Dark Emblem, whie you, Joe, attack Kaitlyn's band.
Jesse: It is an honor, Your Highness.
Joe: I shall use my sword the best I can against those fools.
Jesse: But where is this Dark Emblem?
Ken: Hm... Revese "dark" and get Krad... The city of Krad!
Jesse: Genious, Majesty!
Ken: Yes. Now run along, boys and do a good job. I underestimated them last time.
Joe: Yes, sir!

Meanwhile, back with Kaitlyn's group...

It is night and they are picking out a place to rest. The inn is three miles away, so they stop at an abandoned cottage.

Jeremy: This shall make a fine place to rest.
Kaitlyn: Mm-hm.
Amber: We need to sleep. I'm going to bed.
Kaitlyn: What's that noise?
Jeremy: I'll go and check it out.
Kaitlyn: No, I'm coming with you.
Jeremy: Oh, I suppose. Amber, are you coming, too?
Kaitlyn: She's fast asleep, Jeremy.
Jeremy: So, what are we waiting for? Let's go!

Princess Kaitlyn and Jeremy head out to see what's wrong. They see a pitch-black wolf attacking a deer.

Kaitlyn: Oh, my... A wolf. We'd better keep our eyes out for him, right, Jeremy?
Jeremy: Uh, Kaitlyn? Are you sure that's a wolf?
Kaitlyn: Coyote, maybe a dog.
Jeremy: I don't think so...

The wolf, which looks like more like a shadow in the dimness of the moonlight, turns into a shadow-man-like object.

Maruk: Who dares to defey me?
Kaitlyn: Uh... Nobody?
Maruk: You are there... I can hear you breathing. The weilders of Godess' Light. Ah, yes...
Kaitlyn: J-Jeremy, I'm scared...

The sky suddenly lights up, showing a shadow-like figure with black eyes. Joe arrives.

Joe: Jesse must've finished his job. I'd better run for my life!
Maruk: I have no busness with you. I shall kill them.
Kaitlyn: Jeremy? You ready?
Jeremy: More now than ever!
Both: Light, I call upon thee!
Kaitlyn: Flaming Lance!
Jeremy: Icicle Dagger!

Their weapons are turned into elemental weapons by their choker gem's colored light.

Maruk: My name is Maruk, and I shall kill you!
Kaitlyn: Yah!

Kaitlyn attacks Maruk, but gets a mere burn by the orange light attack.

Maruk: Is that the best you can do?
Kaitlyn: No! I was just getting started with a good warm-up!
Jeremy: ATTACK!

Jeremy and Kaitlyn attack, forming a sky blue and orange twist that hits Maruk and nearly wipes him out.

Kaitlyn (winks): I like to call that one the Freeze-Dry!
Jeremy: Good work, Princess!
Kaitlyn: Hut-cha!

Kaitlyn throws the Flaming Lance at Maruk.

Maruk: I'll be back!
Kaitlyn: All right! I beat him!
Jeremy: Just this once. We got lucky. Let's get some rest now.
Kaitlyn: Okay. It was very tiring.


TO BE CONITNUED
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Old 02-24-2007, 10:05 PM
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This chapter is slightly violent...

Attacktix Light
Chapter Four: To Tamari Feilds


The next morning...

Amber: Kaitlyn, you're up early!
Kaitlyn: As usual... I couldn't sleep after battling Maruk.
Amber: Mar-who? You must've been dreaming.
Jeremy: Princess Amber, Kaitlyn and I fought a powerful foe while you were sleeping.
Amber: I always miss out on all the action!
Kaitlyn: You don't like to be in the action.
Amber: Do to! All the boys will get attracted to me...
Jeremy: We're 10 and 11-year-olds. We can't think about dating yet!
Kaitlyn: Of course, I'm the 10-year-old...
Jeremy: Almost 11!
Kaitlyn: True.
Jeremy: And yet, you're the bravest.
Kaitlyn: True again.
Jeremy: And Amber is the least bravest.
Amber: Why is it always me?

All but Amber laugh.

Kaitlyn: I was thinking Molin would know we are here. We should head to Tamari Feilds.
Jeremy: Just what we needed...a change of subject.
Kaitlyn: They wouldn't expect us to flee there.
Amber: No, they wouldn't. You're right, Kaitlyn.

They leave the abandoned cottage and head for Tamari Feilds.

Kaitlyn: I can see them!
Amber: And I can see soldiers in back of us.

All three turn around nervously.

All: Light, I call upon thee!
Kaitlyn: Flaming Lance!
Jeremy: Icicle Dagger!
Amber: Lightning Arrow...

All are cast in their light color and their weapons turn into elemantal weapons.

Amber shoots the Lightning Arrow, which flew speedily across the land, took out six people, then came back to her. Kaitlyn threw the Flaming Lance that took out nine soldiers and came flying back to her.

Kaitlyn: Good thing Maruk isn't here.
Jeremy: I agree.

Jeremy and Amber do a fusion attack like Jeremy did with Kaitlyn the night before, and the sky blue and yellow light finished the troops off but Joe.

Kaitlyn: If we can kill Joe, nobody'll know where we're going.

Kaitlyn runs up and stabs Joe, and in an exploding orange light, he dies.

All: Light off!
Jeremy: Good job! You felled Joe!
Kaitlyn: Yes. Let's continue to the feild. We must press on.


Kaitlyn, Jeremy, and Amber walk nearer and nearer to the Tamari Feilds.

Meanwhile, at the Molin castle...

Ken (slams fist on table): Dadblastit! Those weilders of Godess' Light killed Joe! Augh!
Jesse: I know. Retards. If we could just make that wolf thing a general in place of him...
Ken: You're a genious, Jesse! We'll get him to obey us.
Jesse: With my power, it'll be easy.
Ken: I think I'll send Dalton this time... He hasn't done us any good.
Dalton (sighs): Yes, sire.

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Old 02-25-2007, 09:03 PM
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Attacktix Light
Chapter Five: A Plan


At the castle of Molin, Dalton seems depressed and King Ken and Jesse are looking at him.

Ken: Maybe we'll fire him.
Dalton (sighs): Could...
Jesse: You just want to be with Kaitlyn again, don't you?
Dalton: Maybe, maybe not.
Ken: I think we should fire him.
Dalton: No! I mean, okay.
Jesse: I don't think he wants to be fired.
Ken: Hm. Maybe you can do it, Jesse. You'll do a good job.
Dalton (sighs): Yes, he will...

Meanwhile, back at the Tamari Feilds with Kaitlyn and friends...

Kaitlyn: We're getting close to Coralia's border. We should head through Dogati and Kraven, then attack the Molin empire.
Amber: Sounds awful tough to me...
Kaitlyn: Oh, yes, it will be. But it's the best we can do. We have...Godess' Light.
Jeremy: Is that what it's called?
Kaitlyn: If I heared Maruk correctly, yes.
Jeremy: Dogati borders Coralia, south from that is Kraven, and south from that's Molin.
Kaitlyn: So we head west by south.
Amber: And make that south a long one.
Kaitlyn: Correct, Amber.
Jeremy: You were always the expert of making plans... You're our little tactican.
Kaitlyn (laughing): That's where it all pays off!
Amber: It's a great idea, Kaitlyn.
Jeremy: And you're right, we can't keep running away from Molin, so we run-
Kaitlyn: To them.
Amber: You have such great ideas.
Kaitlyn (looking up at the sky): And so does Molin.
Jeremy: True... You never know what King Ken might be planning.
Kaitlyn: Troops might even be coming right now...
Amber: We'd better start moving to my home kingdom.
Kaitlyn: We should ask Dogati's queen, Holly, for soldiers.
Jeremy: Good plan!
Kaitlyn: We lose one, we gain an army.
Jeremy: Let's go!

So, Kaitlyn and friends run west to Dogati, hoping for soldiers to leave with.

Meanwhile, at Nanuak Cave with Jesse...

Jesse: This'll be easy. Just get a wolf on our side. What do I do? Give him jerky?

Jesse laughs over his little joke. However, he has little knowledge of Maruk's power.

Maruk: I hear something...but not those humans I fought the other night.
Jesse: Oh! There he is!

Maruk, as a shodow-wolf, attacks Jesse with his sharp, black fangs. Jesse's shoulder is bleeding terribly. He slowly gets up.

Jesse: We want you to help us fight-
Maruk: I FIGHT ALONE!
Jesse: We need help fighting the weilders of Goddess' Light.
Maruk: In that case, yes, I will help you.
Jesse (snickers): I'll get a promotion to General for this...

TO BE CONTINUED
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I did Chapter 6 yesterday, but it got deleted...


Attacktix Light
Chapter Six: The Return of Maruk

It was three miles from Tamari Feilds to Chidati, Dogati's capital. Kaitlyn and friends had already covered two miles. One mile. Only one mile until they get a Dogatian army to aid them. One mile. Only one mile.

The next day...

Jeremy, Amber, and Kaitlyn are still running.

Kaitlyn: We're almost there.
Amber: I'm tired out!
Jeremy: Only a little before-

Suddenly, a young Dogatian knight comes along to the group.

Kaitlyn: A Molinese knight! Light, I-
Mark: My name's Mark. I'm the only living Doigatian soldier left. ...Amber! You're safe!
Amber: Yes, I am, Mark.
Mark: I'm here to aid you. And is that...Jeremy?!?
Jeremy: Yup, it's me.
Mark: There's a strange man in the castle.
Kaitlyn: Maruk!
Jeremy: Mark, can you help us defeat him?
Mark: Yes, I suppose I can. With this sword, I can.
Kaitlyn: Let's get goin'!

So, they run inside the castle and se Maruk in shadow-man form sitting on the throne.

Maruk: Well, well... It's you again, only with a wimp.
All but Mark: Light, I call upon thee!
Kaitlyn: Flaming Lance!
Amber: Lightning Arrow!
Jeremy: Icicle Dagger!
Maruk: Darkness, I call upon thee! Blazing Sword!
Kaitlyn: What the-


TO BE CONTINUED

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Um... I haven't read that much, but I just want to tell you to not use script format.

Example of script format:

Person A: Hi.
Person B: Your mother.

Example of normal story format:

"Hi" said person A.

"Your mother" said person B.

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Um... I haven't read that much, but I just want to tell you to not use script format.

Example of script format:

Person A: Hi.
Person B: Your mother.

Example of normal story format:

"Hi" said person A.

"Your mother" said person B.

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Aw, but that's how I like it and that's how I did it all my life! The only time I DON'T do it is in school... Or is it not allowed? And can you rate it? PLEASE? It gets better as it goes along, so read the whole thing.

ANYWAY...


This one is somewhat violent, too. And until you tell me if it's allowed or not, I'm gonna use scripted format, gun6.



Attacktix Light
Chapter Seven: A New Light Warrior


A sword at Maruk's side becomes the Blazing Sword, a sword with a white handle and fire for a blade. Kaitlyn thinks this is awfully similar to her Flaming Lance, a red-violet lance with a metal head and a string attatched to its end is made of fire.

Amber: I think it's about time you go away, Maruk!

Amber jumps back and shoots the Lightning Arrow, but misses.

Maruk: Bah! Pathetic. Now THIS will hurt!

Maruk attacks Amber with the Blazing Sword, which casts a red and black shadow. This blow slams her against a wall and knocks her out.

Kaitlyn: Amber!
Amber: Ungh... Oh, ow...
Jeremy: Why would he do this to her?
Mark: You'll pay for this! HAAAAAYAH!
Voice: Light, I call upon thee. Tornado Blade!

Mark gets cast in a grey light, gets a choker with a grey gem, and his sword becomes the Tornado Blade, a siver sword with a tornado standing as a blade.

Mark: WHAT?!?
Kaityn (smiles): Attack him, Mark!

Mark does what Kaitlyn said, and attacks Maruk. A grey light was brighter than any Kaitlyn and the group had seen before, forcing everyone in the room but the passed-out Amber cover their eyes. This light expledodes and kills Maruk.

Jeremy: Could he have-
Kaitlyn: I think he just did. Yes he killed him...

Voice: Light off.

Mark turns normal again.

Mark: That was weird, but didn't you guys do that when you got those cool weapons?
Kaitlyn: It seems we get these weapons when we need them most...
Jeremy: Maybe you're right. Maybe this adventure is all a dream.
Kaitlyn: Shoud I pinch myself?

All but Amber, who is still passed out, laugh.

Voice: Heal.

Amber wakes up.

Amber: Unh...
All but Amber: AMBER!
Amber: Hey, y'guys! Did I miss anything?

Kaitlyn pauses. Then she looks at Amber, who seems confused in the deep silence.

Kaitlyn: You-you missed a lot, Amber. You missed a lot.
Amber: Like what?
Kaitlyn: Mark; he's one of us now. He has a weapon like us.
Amber: Really?
Jeremy: Yes. The...Tornado Blade.
Amber: I want the Tornado Blade!

All but Amber laugh.

Kaitlyn: I think it's a fate thing.

All but Amber laugh again.

TO BE CONTINUED

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Attacktix Light
Chapter Eight: New Armor




Kaitlyn and friends along with their now comorade, Mark, continue on to the kingdom of Molin. However, they are ambushed by who they think is Joe...


Joe: YOU KILLED MARUK! HE WAS OUR ONLY CHANCE AGAINST THE LIKES OF YOU!

Joe pulls out his sword and attacks Kaitlyn, aiming for her chest. The blade was less than an inch away from her.

Jeremy: Princess!
Voice: Light Armor!

The world around Kaitlyn seems to have dissapeared, leaving it black. A yellowish, dustlike light is cast upon her. It hits her shoulders, leaving two pieces of blue and white armor, matching her clothes. It hits her legs, she gets two blue and white shin guards, then it touches the back of her hands, leaving two plates of armor there that match the rest. Her javelin becomes the Flaming Lance. She seems more powerful.

Amber: Whoa...

Kaitlyn attacks Joe, and in a sparklike flame, he is pushed back in a trail of dust.

Joe: Ungh...
Kaitlyn: And I was just takin' it easy on 'ya!
Mark: Why, I simply can't belive it! Is that a new power or something?
Kaitlyn: I do not know. But, like the weapons...
Jeremy: It came in our time of need.
Kaitlyn: Yes. To a worthy one in need.
Amber: Stop bragging!
Kaitlyn: I'm not, I'm just saying I'm worthy of it.

She glances back and sees Joe running up to her.

Kaitlyn: I think you'd better get your elemental weapons.

Amber nods.

All but Kaitlyn and Joe: Light, I call upon thee!
Amber: Lightning Arrow!
Jeremy: Icicle Dagger!
Mark: Tornado Blade.

Their weapons become elemental.

Kaitlyn: Joe! Back off from my friends!
Joe: What'cha gonna do? Hit me?
Kaitlyn: Yeah, with my biggest blow!

Kaitlyn attacks and kills Joe.

Mark: All right! You got 'em, Kaitlyn!

Kaitlyn winks at Mark.

Kaitlyn: I know, aren't I good?

All laugh.

Amber: Of course you are! You are so very worthy, aren't you?

All laugh again.

Kaitlyn: Yup!

Meanwhile, at the castle of Molin...

Ken: Jesse.
Jesse: Yes, sir?
Ken: You are the only general left. Daton hasn't returned...
Jesse: He must've been killed.
Ken: Just what I was thinking. It's their turn to die now.

Ken snickers.


TO BE CONTINUED

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Script writing is really bad for fanfiction, or any writing for that matter. Let's look at one of your conversation in script writing.

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Joe: Ungh...
Kaitlyn: And I was just takin' it easy on 'ya!
Mark: Why, I simply can't belive it! Is hat a new power or something?
Kaitlyn: I do not know. But, like the weapons...
Jeremy: It came in our time of need.
Kaitlyn: Yes. To a worthy one in need.
Amber: Stop bragging!
Kaitlyn: I'm not, I'm just saying I'm worthy of it.
Now, let's see how that would be in normal writing:

Joe held his head in his hands as he moaned "Unngh."

Kaitlyn look surprised at his response to her attack. "I was just taking it easy on you..." Mark then decided to put in his two cents.

"Why, I simply cannot believe it! Might that be a new power? Or something else?" he finished cryptically. A sense of foreboding came into the air.

"It came to us in a time of need," Jeremy responded good-naturedly.

"Yes, to a worthy one in need," Kaitlyn corrected cockily.

Amber, with some anger, yelled back "Stop bragging!"

The unaffected Kaitlyn made her response through a chuckle, "I'm not, I'm just saying I'm worthy of it"
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Now that was just made up on the spot.
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Script writing is really bad for fanfiction, or any writing for that matter.
Bah. If you want paragraph format, check out my other FanFic.

Oh, and Chapter Eight made you say, "WHAT?!? JOE'S DEAD ALREADY!" Okay, you're right, he died in Chapter Four. In the same chapter, King Ken said Dalton needed a job. His job was to disguise as Joe so Kaitlyn and Jeremy would use their full power. Ken wanted to observe it once more, so he sent Dalton out. I hope that confusing chapter didn't lower any ratings, which no one decided to do yet.



Attacktix Light
Chapter Nine: What Really Happened Yesterday


Amber, Mark, Kaitlyn, and Jeremy finally reach Kraven. Kaitlyn suddenly stops.

Kaitlyn: Wait a second. Remember...when I killed Joe...
Amber (panting): Yeah?
Mark: What? C'mon, Kaitlyn, tell us!
Kaitlyn (looking down at her feet sadly): He was already dead.
Jeremy: Then who did you kill?
Kaitlyn: We have to go to Molin and find out. We can't vacation here in Kraven forever!
Jeremy: I think I know.

Kaitlyn stares at him in silence.

Kaitlyn: Go on.
Jeremy (sighs): Dalton.
Amber: But why...would he do that? Why would he try to be Joe?
Kaitlyn: It's not comfirmed yet.
Mark: You're just hoping.
Jeremy: Yeah. You always assume things.
Kaitlyn: But I would still fight him if I knew he'd gone bad!
Jeremy: We should've known.
Kaitlyn: Before it happened, he was always acting neutral around me, too...

Kaitlyn sighs and sits on a rock.

Mark: Conviced to go on Molin's side?
Kaitlyn: Why would they attack in the first place?
Amber (rolls eyes): Good question.

Something in a bush shakes.

Kaitlyn (screaming): Ack!

It turns out to be a rabbit.

Kaitlyn (sighs of relief): Phew... Just a rabbit.
Mark: It gave me quite a scare, too.
Kaitlyn: This attack from Molin thing makes me feel like I have a destiny...a real potential.
Jeremy (smiles): A strong sense of leadership, as always.
Kaitlyn: Yes, but why would Godess' Light choose us?
Amber: Soon to find out.
Kaitlyn: But a little mystery in life is good, too.
Mark: I think we've had enough mystery already.

All laugh.


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WHOEVER GAVE ME ONE FRICKIN' STAR I'M GONNA KILL YOU!



Attacktix Light
Chapter Ten: Girl of the Waves


Since Kaitlyn's group only neeed to travel throughout a small fraction of Kraven, they arrive at Molin in only four days. To their surprise, they see a
9-year-old peasant girl Kaitlyn seems to know...

Kaitlyn: Who are you?
Miranda: Kaitlyn...is that really you?
Kaitlyn: Miranda?!? You survived?
Miranda: Yes. I'm not a spy, but I'm Coralian, so I decided to take my sword and investigate.
Kaitlyn: Oh, no, Miranda. You'll surely get hurt...
Jeremy: You know this peasant girl?
Kaitlyn: A childhood friend.
Amber: We're still children!
Kaitlyn (sadly): I know.
Mark: How old is she?
Kaitlyn: She's in 3rd grade.
Jeremy: Why, she's far too young!
Kaitlyn: Miranda's at the age I was when General Peter tought me to fight.
Amber: Doesn't give her rights to pretend she's a Coralian spy.
Miranda (whining): Please, Princess Kaitlyn? Can I please go with you?
Amber (rolling her eyes and talking sarcasticly): Please is right.

Miranda looks at Kaitlyn sadly.

Kaitlyn: Can she, Jeremy?
Jeremy: We don't need a little kid running around.
Mark: It'll be like babysitting! I hate babysitting!
Kaitlyn (winks): I love babysitting.
Miranda: I won't be a pushover!
Amber: You don't even know what a pushover is, little girl.
Miranda: Okay, I admit, I don't.
Mark: See? She doesn't know what a pushover is!
Kaitlyn (sarcasticly): Do you?
Mark (frowning): No.
Kaitlyn: I do.
Jeremy: ...

Silence.

Kaitlyn: Please?
Jeremy: No.
Amber: Look... Her neck...

On her neck is a bolt-blue choker.

Mark (confused): Yes?
Kaitlyn: A blue choker. She's one of us. She has to come.
Miranda: I was attacked by Molinese soldiers... They killed my family and destroyed my villiage...

Jesse sees them and that catches Kaitlyn's eye.

Kaitlyn: Miranda, quick! Say what the weird femine voice said then!
Miranda: How do you know-
Kaitlyn: Just do it!
All: Light, I call upon thee!
Amber: Lighting Arrow!
Jeremy: Icicle Dagger!
Kaitlyn: Flaming Lance!
Miranda: Sword of Waves!

Each of their choker gems cast their color light, of which Miranda's is
bolt-blue, hits their weapon, and Jeremy gets the Icicle Dagger, Amber obtains the Lightning Arrow, Mark gets his Tornado Blade, Miranda gets the Swors of Waves, and Kaitlyn gets the Flaming Lance.

Kaitlyn: Light Armor!

A yellow, dusty-looking light comes out of Kaitlyn's orange choker gem and she armors herself.


TO BE CONTINUED

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Don't rate this for the format, do it for the story. This is the last chapter, other than the epilouge.


Attacktix Light
Chapter Eleven: Too Much for One Day


Jesse comes out and looks, but cowardly runs away into bushes.

Kaitlyn: We should keep our weapons just in case.

Mark stares around and runs toward Jesse.

Mark: Jesse, I will join your side. I did not want Joe or Dalton to die.
Jesse: They were your companions, Dalton partial.
Kaitlyn: No...
Jeremy: I told him I didn't want him last night.
Amber: I do not mind.
Mark: Kaitlyn... I will not hurt you.

Jeremy attacks Mark. Mark and Jeremy are caught up in a brawl.

Kaitlyn: But why...
Amber: Leave them alone.
Miranda (sobbing): Kaitlyn... Why does war have to be so...s-sad?
Kaitlyn: I do not wish for war. 'Tis a bad thing.

Miranda runs behind Kaitlyn.

Kaitlyn: STOP! Stop fighting!

All pause.

Kaitlyn: We will leave Mark if he wants. But stop.

Jeremy and Mark continue to fight, all attacks braced. About an hour later, Jeremy stops. Mark runs with Jesse.

Kaitlyn (angerly): Jeremy...
Jeremy: That was fun!
Kaitlyn: We have a war to stop!

She runs toward the castle door and kicks it.

Molly: What is wrong?

A girl and a boy, brunette but lighter than Kaitlyn's, come out of a cottage.

Molly: I am Molly, and this is Nathan.

A tear runs down Kaitlyns cheek.

Molly: We have powers to...help.
Kaitlyn (calmed): Help how?
Nathan: Any way you need. Aid in battle, teleport you...
Kaitlyn (happily): Can you take us to Ken?
Nathan: Yes!

Kaitlyn, Amber, Miranda, and Jeremy are swallowed up in a blue-and-black vortex created by Molly. They are in front of King Ken's throne.

Ken: Well, well... Look what we have here!

He throws an axe at Kaitlyn, but Amber jumps in the way.

Amber: NOOOOO!
Voice: Light Armor!

The backround sets black, as if time were freezing. The dusty yellow-gold light touches Amber as she gains shoulder plates, shin-guards, and a breastplate, all purple with gold designs etched in. Her wooden bow turns to pure gold. The axe bounces off her breastplate.

Kaitlyn (amazed): Why, she's earned her armor!

Amber attacks Ken and kills him. Jesse comes out and Miranda kills him with the mighty Sword of Waves. She obtains a silver sheild, boots, and breastplate with the golden-yellow light.

Jeremy: Awesome!
Kaitlyn: Maybe that fight with Mark made you not earn your armor.
Amber: I think she's right!
Miranda (smiling): I think we should be getting home.

They all run out of the Molinese castle laughing.

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Epilouge


They all return to the Coralian palace, where Kaitlyn is reunited with her mother. Jeremy admits his crush on Kaitlyn, Amber is crowned Queen of Dogati, and Miranda (who lost her family) gets her dream of becoming a Coralian spy. Kaitlyn sits gazing off the balcony, just like she had done before her journey had begun.


THE END

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I did not say that was the end of the FanFic. I just said it was the end of Attacktix Light. There's two sequels and a prequel. Ha, ha, ha. Attacktix Dark, Attacktix Ying-Yang, and Atacktix. 33 more chapters, 44 total. 45, really. The epilouge for Attacktix Light. That's the only epilouge.


Attacktix Dark
Chapter One: Child of Hell

ONE YEAR LATER...

In Nanuak Cave, Maruk had a daughter. Maruk never named her, but she called herself April. She was young with black hair in pigtails and had purple eyes. Her skin was very pale. The girl fed on souls. She did not belive in darkness. She belived in only light. She was always sad and felt imprisoned.

April (sighing): I am dead. Only dead.

Like her father, she had the ability to turn into a shadow-wolf, although she wasn't a silhouette. She transformed into the wolf and set out from the cave.

April (as wolf): I have never been out of here before...

To her surprise, she bumps into Kaitlyn.

Kaitlyn: MARUK?!?
April (as wolf): Get out... Get out...
Kaitlyn (screaming): YAAAAAAH! The dead's alive! The dead's alive!

Kaitlyn, her somewhat short brunette hair flapping in the wind, runs away screaming. April turns human-like again.

April (as human): Foolish humans... What am I? What is my purpose?

Kaitlyn turns back.

Kaitlyn: You're not Maruk! You're a human!
April (angerly): I AM NOT A HUMAN!
Kaitlyn: Then...who...er, what...are you?
April: I do not know. I have no destiny. No reason for being here...
Kaitlyn (confused): Not...anything?
April: Correct. I am nothing.
Kaitlyn: Well, you have to be something.
April: You do not get it. I am the daughter of Maruk.
Kaitlyn (sadly): Then I killed your father.
April: Tha- Thank you.
Kaitlyn (confused): You...thank me?
April: Kill me.
Kaitlyn: No...
April (angerly): KILL ME!
Kaitlyn: I-I can't...
April: Yes, you can. I am nothing but bad.
Kaitlyn (shocked): But-
April (angerly): DO IT!
Kaitlyn: I can't. I will see you...tomorrow. Farewell.

She runs home.


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