So I decided that I'd do "The Evil Bunny King of Doom" as my revival review for this thread. Mostly because I've noticed that KatieKitten really want's people to review her stuff, and half the time it never happens. So...
Wow... I was a lot faster than I said was going to be... weird...
The Evil Bunny King of Doom - By KatieKitten
At first, I was totally attracted to the title, "The Evil Bunny King of Doom." Then, I wasn't too sure what I was actually in for right before I started reading. The truth is, the last time I read any of KatieKitten's stuff was a very, very long time ago. I couldn't remember if I enjoyed reading her stuff, wanting more; or just thought, "oh, another fanfic..." So reading the title--I was hesitant.
To my surprise, "The Evil Bunny King of Doom" is the most refreshingly different piece of fanfiction I've ever read in my life.
The beginning sequence, before the advent of the bunnies, is beautifully written. I don't mean beautiful like, "I'm starting to cry," beautiful. I mean, it's just really good writing. Description was well-balanced with action and that entire beginning flowed like a song. There weren't any awkward moments in the actual flow of the words. It felt natural, eloquent, and the entire structure was near perfection. That sort of word control is rare in any writer of any caliber. It wasn't really funny, but the beginning really just makes the reader want to read more. The anticipation build-up was very well done.
I’m still geeking out over the quality of the work. I read it over two hours ago, and my mind is still lingering about how frickin’ awesome it was. Funny, amazingly intelligent, and well composed. I’m now repeating myself, so I’ll stop. So to cut things short. I was impressed.
Near the end of the prologue, the imagery is HILARIOUS!!! Borderline frightening. I’m currently debating whether or not I should call this a comedy-horror. I literally laughed out loud, but thought of the situation and kind of shuddered.
The only thing I did notice about this FanFiction was that near the end, it’s obvious KatieKitten is either getting very excited, the thoughts are moving too fast for her typing, or it was written late at night and she was tired. I’m not really sure. It seemed to move quite a bit quicker than the rest, but that was alright, if not a good thing. I’m not sure. All I know is that I really enjoyed reading “The Evil Bunny King of Doom.” I also really like just saying that title. “The Evil Bunny King of Doom.” Say it with me, maybe you’ll enjoy it, too.
Very good fiction overall. I recommend all readers to read this fiction. The style is amazing and probably something we all can learn from. Also, it’s very obvious that KatieKitten truly gets a kick out of writing. It’s very enjoyable.
For anybody planning to read this fanfiction, do read the last post. It has nothing to do with the story, I think. But it's the best song fic in the world
Genius. I actually really liked this story. WHY’D YOU STOP!!!!!!????????
Technical Notes for KatieKitten:
Usually this section is reserved for long ranting, but I don’t think it needs it. So I’ll go as quick as I can.
I’ll start with grammar. There’s only a few things. It's actually not that important.
In the fourth paragraph it starts:
After a warm shower he emerging clean and fully awake...
Don’t you mean, emerged?
Near the end there were a few moments. Like I said before; either you were getting excited, and your thoughts were going to fast for your fingers to type; or it was late and you were laughing as you were writing, lol.
A breeze rippled through the creatures baby pink fur, tickling its whiskers. It looked so cute that
Creature's. Needs an apostrophe.
Near the beginning of the 3rd post:
...cheek, covering his head util the...
Until is mispelled.
The fourth to the end paragraph:
they each harboured a single piece of their masters...
Master's needs an apostrophe.
And the last paragraph:
...Satsfied that thir secret...
Their is missing the 'e.'
And that’s about it. I can't think of anything technical to improve. It was good
. Keep on writing. You’ve really got something going.