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Old 12-05-2007, 03:03 AM
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In the Horri (Hoh-ree) Region, Grace is a ten year old girl. She likes to battle pokemon, but she has a soft side as well . She treats pokemon like any human, like her 12 1/2 year old brother Jeroke (Jeh-Roh-Keh). Horri has three starters: Mime Jr., Machop, and Slugma. Grace chose Mime Jr. and named her Mimy.
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Old 12-05-2007, 04:14 AM
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Default Re: My Fanfiction: Kanohu's Adventure

This is just an outline. Where the story?

This really isn't enough to start a fan fiction, and second, this plot idea is VERY overdone and most readers are tired of it. Read the fan fiction rules, as well as the guides. That, and read some of the more highly rated fan fictions, such as Reflections. I think you would get a much better idea of the standard we have here, and what people expect out of fan fictions.

I'll give you the chance to change and revise it based off of what I told you, but if nothing really changes, sorry, but it would have to be locked.
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Old 12-06-2007, 02:24 AM
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Grace rode her bike to Makren City. The sun shone in eyes. Mimy, her Mime Jr., always by her side, pointed out that Makren City was up ahead. "Good," Grace sighed. "Finally a chance to battle the leader!" She rode faster to the gym. Makren Gym, her first gym battle, and...closed. "Great," Grace mumbled. "Just great."
Jeroke would be laughing at her about this. She could see it. Just then, her cell rang. She checked caller-ID. It was....Makren Gym?
"Hello...?" she asked.
"Hey. Come on in," the voice answered.
Grace was a little confused, but she came in anyway.
"Hi, I'm Gregory, the leader of the Makren Gym," the leader greeted.
Grace smiled. "I'm Grace, 10 year old pokemon trainer!"


P.S. I changed her name.
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Old 11-15-2008, 05:39 PM
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well i like it so far but you should try lengthening the chapters. Not to be rude or anything like that it's just some healthy advice.
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Old 11-24-2008, 04:43 PM
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"Well, I expect you would like to battle me," Gregory said, smirking. "but I'm sorry to say that I am busy with...some business. Maybe next time, Grace."
"Oh, well...not like it matters...this'll give me more time to train..." Grace mumbled.
Mimy looked skeptical. He burst into the gym with anger past Gregory, and pointed to Grace to come in.
"Mimy! Come back here!"
Grace followed Mimy into the gym and saw her brother cleaning the gym.
"Jeroke? What are you doing here?" Grace exclaimed, giving him a look that said, "You are SO crazy."
Jeroke ran over to Gregory, looking upset.
"Greg, I told you to keep Grace out!"
"It was her Mime Jr.! He ran in and Grace followed!"
"I didn't want her to find out about this!"
"I understand that, but we have no control over who she follows!"
Grace looked at them only once more before she grabbed Mimy and ran out the gym.
"Mimy! Look at what happened! You shouldn't have run in!"
Mimy looked sorry, but he said nothing.
"Come on...let's go to the Pokemon Center and stay there to rest a bit."

To be continued...

REEAD THIS!!!!!!!

If you like this, I'll make more. I know it's bad. I may even stop this thread and try to think of something new...
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