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Old 08-03-2008, 07:17 PM
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I really like it so far. It's very detailed and so far, it seems to have a good plot. I also like how you described the antagonist. He seems like a cross between Tom Riddle and Darth Vader, but at the same time he has his own unique twist. Good job!
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Old 08-03-2008, 07:26 PM
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Darth Vader?! XDD

Well, that's one way of looking at him. x3 Thank you, Munchkin~
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Old 08-03-2008, 07:29 PM
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xD, Munchkin?!

Anyways, yes. Now that I look at it, it does seems Darth Vader-ish...

Yes, Why DIDN'T you think of that?
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Old 08-03-2008, 07:32 PM
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Darth Vader?! XDD

Well, that's one way of looking at him. x3 Thank you, Munchkin~
Even though it said aura, it was kind of like a force choke thing, and the dark, pale, and slits for eyes screamed Voldemort. That's how I figure it.

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xD, Munchkin?!
Yes, Munchkin. I have oh so many different names from her. Among them are, "my little pet noob", "Munch, you sexy beast!", and the newest, apparently, "Munchkin". I get lost sometimes..... -.-
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Old 08-03-2008, 07:36 PM
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Voldemort has pretty wide crimson eyes, but the pupils are slits, like a cat. Tom Riddle's eyes were dark, yeah, but I think they were just normal. O: Obu's eyes are just reaaaaaaally narrow. xD And they're navy-blue, too.

And the aura thing, yeah. It connects the victim's heart to the person's fist, and it's as though you're holding their heart in your hand. Obu basically compressed it until the 'filth' suffocated. o.O Also, I've never really watched Star Wars as it never interested me, so I really have no idea what Darth Vader is like. Ahah. ^^;; <--- Star Wars noob, and proud. 8D
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Old 08-03-2008, 11:44 PM
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Voldemort has pretty wide crimson eyes, but the pupils are slits, like a cat. Tom Riddle's eyes were dark, yeah, but I think they were just normal. O: Obu's eyes are just reaaaaaaally narrow. xD And they're navy-blue, too.

And the aura thing, yeah. It connects the victim's heart to the person's fist, and it's as though you're holding their heart in your hand. Obu basically compressed it until the 'filth' suffocated. o.O Also, I've never really watched Star Wars as it never interested me, so I really have no idea what Darth Vader is like. Ahah. ^^;; <--- Star Wars noob, and proud. 8D
Darth Vader is an old dude that's best thing to say is: " Luke! I am your Father! "

He also has a crapped up face and one true arm.

Anyways, how far have you gotten with Chaptah Toooh!?!?
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Old 08-04-2008, 11:04 AM
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Uh... *word count*

Three hundred and seventy two words in. Chapter one was one thousand, six hundred and seven words long, so I have a way to go yet. x3;;

And y'know how in the roleplay Kura had crimson eyes? Well, the whole eye-colour thing is a part of her past too, so she doesn't have crimson eyes for a part of it. ^^

I didn't want anyone to think I changed her eye colour or anything. o___O I mean, what's Kuragari without her scarlet eyes? D':
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Uh... *word count*

Three hundred and seventy two words in. Chapter one was one thousand, six hundred and seven words long, so I have a way to go yet. x3;;

And y'know how in the roleplay Kura had crimson eyes? Well, the whole eye-colour thing is a part of her past too, so she doesn't have crimson eyes for a part of it. ^^

I didn't want anyone to think I changed her eye colour or anything. o___O I mean, what's Kuragari without her scarlet eyes? D':

(T_T)> -( I have a long time to wait... )

Anyways, Gotcha' onthe eye thing. ^_-
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Old 08-05-2008, 08:43 PM
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Good. =P

And yeah, you have. xD *Writewrite*
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Good. =P

And yeah, you have. xD *Writewrite*
** Looks over shoulder **

I guess I'll be waiting here for a bit longer than I thought...

Did you take my advice for alternating chapters?
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Old 08-05-2008, 09:10 PM
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Yeah, I took my advice. xD
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Yeah, I took my advice. xD
It's nice to know that you listen to me once in a while! ^^
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Old 08-05-2008, 09:26 PM
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HAH I READ PART OF THE SECOND CHAPPY FIRST. ;DD TAKE THAT, BISH.

Anyways, as I've said, fic = great so far. :'3 Comments, guys?

Zoharu: 8D

Secrute: Eh.

Lime: O: NICE.

They have spoken.
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Old 08-05-2008, 09:32 PM
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Thankiu, Gabooh. <3

Apache: Pocahontas~ n_n

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Kura: I thought this was my fic...?
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Old 08-05-2008, 09:34 PM
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*sighs* Finally... I have just finished reading it XD.
And I started last year *kidding*

I loved it!

Hope to see some more.
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