I know this is your first fanfiction, but every beginning writer needs criticism so that they can write better. And I'll try not to be harsh.
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Originally Posted by Own you
Pokemon kanto journeys book 1
Capitalize the title's main words. In this case, it's all of them. And you should consider making 1 One instead.
A wonderfull day in kanto it was the air was crisp and soothing and who would miss out on such a day Because wonderfullness like this doesnt always apear well whom els then Ralph.
Several problems with this sentence. It's a run-on, first of all. "A wonderfull (only one L, by the way) day in Kanto (capitalize) it was" should be its own sentence. Same for "The air was crisp and soothing." Get rid of the the "and." A question mark would look good at the end of that sentence, too. Apostrophe on doesnt (doesn't), and appear is spelled with two P's. "Well whom ELSE then Ralph" doesn't make sense at all. Whom else but Ralph would what? Miss out on this day? You should also describe where in Kanto this is and how it looks, what sounds you might hear, what smells you might smell...there's a lot you could add.
Who is this Ralph, you ask? Well, he's a very lazy boy who is starting his Pokemon journey today with his friends Kenny and Krystal.
Run-on! Never ever ever ever use pkmn instead of Pokemon. And capitalze Pokemon. Isn't this story past-tense? if so, "who is starting" should be "who was starting."
Kenny is a boy who is almost this complete opposite of Ralph. He is maybe just a little hyperactive, but they are still best friends.
"He is active maybe even just a little hyperactive"? I can see how that can make sense, but to me it sounds odd. Active is a bit of a weird word for energetic, but that's just me. Don't capitalize mid-sentence. Don't do it! Also, what do these people look like? DESCRIBE!!!
Krystal, well, she is normal, just normal. Get the picture?
When you first describe Krystal, don't call her by her nickname. Maybe you can state that "her friends call her Krys" or something. And what exactly is a "normal" girl? Again, how does she look? Describe! And don't run-on! try to find where a sentence sounds awkward.
So these three kids are becoming Pokemon Trainers on this very day.
Which tense? Arrggghhh! You're confusing me!
Well, I do hope you'll continue this. It could actually be a pretty good Trainer fan fiction. Just don't run on, describe things A LOT more, and check your spelling (type it up on Microsoft Word or Pages (on Macs). That way, you can spell-check by right-clicking red underlined words). And I hope you'll have the first completed trainer fic on the site!
Oh yeah, and the font is a little troublesome. either change the font, or make the font size a size or two bigger. Don't make it too big, though.