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Old 05-05-2007, 02:12 PM
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Default Re: Crime and Punishment (PG-13ish)

Hmm. Pretty good, so far. It's a good start, but you could at least tell me what town/city they were in, and what type of ghosts were there. Also, Pokemon need to be capitalized! They're like names, sort of. Overall, I'd give this beginning an 8.5/10.
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