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Default Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: Team 9 Lives to the Rescue! (v.2) - Timeline is up

(NEW COVER COMING LATER)
PE2K's first Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story!
Link to version 1: Click here to go to it

Click this to see the map of Eucser
(Download the image to see a much larger scale of it, you can read the text if you do. xDD)

*NOTE: Because this story was started 7-25-06, I've taken creative liberty when it comes to the creation of Pokemon kind. This means that Arceus ISN'T the god and creator of Pokemon kind. This also means that the majority of my story doesn't follow the PMD games.

Disclaimer: Pokemon is not copyrighted to me in any way nor is the idea behind the Mystery Dungeon theme. They both belong to Nintendo and Game Freak.

Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Plight of Mercury
9 Lives' first side story

Ever wonder why Mercury became a criminal? Why he's a cannibal? If there was ever a time in his life where he was innocent? Wonder no further! From birth to current day, The Plight of Mercury tells the history of one Eucser's most notorious and feared criminals. Click on the title to head to the thread and read up on this Typhlosion's life.

started: 11-29-10

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Chapter Identification Colors
Written // Not Up Yet // Being Re-Typed Later // Thinking of Re-Typing // Currently Being Typed Up
Chapter Roster
*titles of chapters not up have a possibility of change, or re-organization. Don't be surprised it things get moved around*

~Prologue~ [3-16-09] > To the prologue
~Ch.1: Vista Town [3-26-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.2: Collapsed! Danger to Apprentices! [4-14-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.3: Approval and Decline! Jet's Fault [4-20-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.4: Teams Gather! Apprentice Training Starts Now! [4-23-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.5: Task 1- Stealth [4-28-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.6: The Apprentice Quarters- A Day of Rest [5-7-09] > To the chapter
~Ch.7: Mt.Hardstone- Difficulty Minimum? [8-26-09] > To the chapter
~Chapter Whatever Number I'm On [1-16-10] > To the chapter
~Ch.8: Task 2- Combat [1-17-10] > To the Chapter
~Ch.9: Back in Vista Town- Team Honoo and the Returning Rescuers! > To the Chapter

~Ch.10: Apprentice Challenge! Defeat Jet!
~Ch.11: Battle for the Badge (part 1)
~Ch.12: Battle for the Badge (part 2)
~Ch.13: The Ceremony and the Chosen
~Ch.14: The Truth About Henry
~Ch.15: The Discussion
~Ch.16: Gathering of the Teams! Oh Boy, There's A Lot of'em
~Ch.17: The Electrical Storm of the Earth Arrives!
~Ch.18: Katori and the Electrical Orb of the State
~Ch.19: The Orbs Power and the Mission Call
~Ch.20: Arrival at the Electric State - The Overloading Charge
~Ch.21: The Orbs Placement - Charge Under Control
~Ch.22: The Soe Heng Ritual - Failure... or Success? (part 1)
~Ch.23: The Soe Heng Ritual - Failure... or Success? (part 2)
~Ch.24: Mercury Makes His Move
~Ch.25: Mission Two - Rescue Jet! Redblood's Wrath
~Ch.26: Team Mayonaka Tsume Reports - One Down
~Ch.27: Festival of Evolution - A Blind Fox's Pain
~Ch.28: Ambush!
~Ch.29: Pinpoint Revealed! The Traitor is You!
~Ch.30: Mission Four - Amp for the Dragon Orb
~Ch.31: A Merging Evolution
~Ch.32: Sadness in the Rain - Disaster for the Rescue Force
~Ch.33: Final Member - K-Row Added
~Ch.34: Territory Expansion - Uncontrollable Argument
~Ch.35: Aggression Rising
~Ch.36: Settlement! Finally the Needed Rest Arrives!
~Ch.37: Victim of the Dark Orb
~Ch.38: Escape - Member K
~Ch.39: Much Needed Help Arrives
~Ch.40: Christo vs. Amp - Father vs. Son
~Ch.41: Krad- Past, Present, and Possible Future
~Ch.42: E.A.U Acts - Rillian's Stand
~Ch.43: Unnatural Power Returns! The Explosion of Guilt!
~Ch.44: Progression Too Fast! SFC Suspitious, Legends Ambitious
~Ch.45: They've All Appeared! The Power of the Seventeen!
~Ch.46: Living Chaos
~Ch.47: War
~Ch.48: Slauve - Living Dead
~Ch.49: The Descendant
~Ch.50: Armstrong Lashes Out! Team Forever Comes Into Play!
~Ch.51: Wave of Breaking - Will vs. Power
~Ch.52: War's End and the Start of A New


*If you are mentioned in this story and don't like how your character was portrayed then please PM me and tell me. I don't want anyone feeling upset or angry about how their character was portrayed*

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*please don't ask to be in the story. If I want to put you in, I'll ask you. Names that are bold I still have to ask about, or figure out.

RocketMeowth - Meote [will evolve]
AmplifiedPikachu (Amp) - Pichu [will evolve]
Neo Pikachu (Neo) - Pikachu
Megumi - Vaporeon
Loyal Arcanine (Mike) - Arcanine
Pigeot79 (Pidge) - Pidgeot
Harry - Bulbasaur
Gun6 (Gun) - Jigglypuff
Ierdar (Josh) - Charmander
Danyelle - Umbreon
Rillian - Manectric
Fenix (Tracy) - Meowth [will evolve]
PokemonTrainerSarah (Sarah) - Bulbasaur
Link - Gengar
IT - Piloswine
Ball (Eric) - Poliwrath
Lan - Banette
Louise - Raichu
DarkUmbreon (Sumi) - Sneasle
Zark - Absol
LilLepricon (Jack) - Absol
SceptileFrost (Frost) - Sceptile
KatieKitten (Katie) - Bulbasaur
Deathspector (Avaron) - Sandshrew
Hoshika – Pikachu
Lunar Latias (Gem) – Pikachu
Trainer17 –
Anastasia_R (Ana) – Grovyle
Superboy (Clue) – Squirtle
Kenny_C.002 (Kenny) –
Scytherwolf (Scy) – Scyther
Tombi – Umbreon
Ah Beng I the Pikabeng (Beng) – Pikachu
K_Pop (Kay) – Furret
Grassy_Aggron (Grassy) - Aggron
Graceful_Suicune -
DarkGardevoir (Clock) -
Anastasia_R (Ana) - Grovyle
Galleon - Tangela

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The Orbs of Elemental Creation Log
*This is a log for the OEC. It will list which ones have been seen, the date they were seen, who has them, their location, as well as a short description on what their powers are*
\Total Amount - 17/

*NOTE*: Me telling you each orbs power won't give away spoilers so don't worry. If they were giving away spoilers then I wouldn't have put them up.

Electric:
-Absorbs and releases mass quantities of electricity / if of Electric type then OEC won't stop until ALL of your Electricity is gone
Dark:
-Injects holder with dark energy powering them up to extreme levels / results in holder becoming extremely addicted to this orb
Poison:
-Shoots out an array of highly toxic needles / can easily go out of control / if not of Poison type, exposure to this orb for over five minutes results in skin beginning to burn away as if acid were dripping onto it
Ghost:
- Can bring the dead back to life / results in life span of user being decreased by a year each time it's used / if used in succession life span decreases by two / those brought back to life stay above for only 24 hours unless brought back by a group of 5-10, then they are brought back to live for another lifetime at the sacrifice of the groups entire life spans / only Chaos has mastered this orb
Psychic:
- Creates barrier around holder that protects them from attacks as well as deflect attacks back to the sender / won't stay up forever
Fire:
- Exerts waves of heat / if not of fire trait or having parts of fire trait in you, than exposure to this heat for more then seven minutes results in death
Ice:
- Exerts waves of freezing cold temperatures / if not of ice trait or having parts of ice trait in you, than exposure to this for more then twenty minutes results in death
Water:
- Gives holder ability to breath under water
Flying:
- Shoots out dangerous gusts of wind / highly uncontrollable
Fighting:
- Increases speed in punches and kicks / muscles at risk of being torn apart from strain of increased speed
Steel:
- Creates an extremely strong shield around holder that cuts off sunlight, sound, and vision / if under this shield for more then an hour, then user is at risk of suffocation
Bug:
- Emits waves that can deflect most side effects of the other orbs as well as sound
Grass:
- Gives user thick vines that they can lash out at their opponents / once vines have entangled the opponent thorns begin shooting out of the vine starting from the orb and heading up / if user can use Vine Whip then orb gives them ten more vines
Rock:
- Holder can control rocks / orb becomes heavier and heavier the longer it's used
Ground:
- Releases massive earthquake's that can reach over 20 meters below the earth's crust when smashed onto the ground / takes excessive amounts of holders energy every time it's used
Dragon:
- Increases holders rage and strength to the maximum of a full grown dragon / results in user most likely attacking friends and partners
Normal:
- Has power to stabilize all the other orbs EXCEPT the Ghost orb / for this orb to work you have to know EVERYTHING about the Normal orb as well as the orb(s) you're using this with
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Merging: the process of an orbs power "merging" with its user. This occurs when a Pokemon is using the orb, and goes through evolution. They don't literally merge with the orb. They just retain the powers given to them.

The reason this happens is explained through the change in the Pokemon's DNA. When a Pokemon evolves, their DNA and physical appearance alter, thus allowing them to do things they couldn't before. When the O.E.C are being used, some of their power is injected into the user. That power sets up as a solitary DNA strand, connected very delicately to the Pokemon's actual DNA.

Normally, when the orbs usage is finished the strand will break, thus getting rid of the powers given. The longer the usage, the more this strand of DNA begins to merge with the actual DNA, making it more dangerous. If the strand is broken after long exposure, some actual DNA strands can break, injuring the Pokemon either slightly, or majorly (depending on length of exposure).

Now, when a Pokemon goes through evolution, if the DNA strand from the orb is still in place (thus the orb is still being used), the evolution will think of that strand as a part of the entire physiology of the Pokemon. The strand will go through a merging process during evolution, resulting in a permanent fixture with the real DNA. The end result is not only part of the orb "merging" with its user, but also traits as well. Here is a list of what each orb does through "merging":

Electric:
- body becomes like a magnet when around electrical forces; draining any electrical device or Pokemon of their strength. This includes electric types as well.
Dark:
- colors becomes a darker tint, eyes turn to a tint of either red or yellow. If dark type, color darkens and a lust for power becomes the dominant personality (unless user learns to control it).
Poison:
-
Ghost:
- body becomes torn apart, becoming a mixture of flesh and bone. A purple aura engulfs user and becomes visible during fights. If ghost type, form will become more demon like and intimidating.
Psychic:
-
Fire:
-
Ice:
-
Water:
-
Flying:
- scales/fur/skin become more feather like. Eyesight increases and the ability to sense a change in the wind is given. If of bird type, speed and power increase while feathers become harder, raising defense.
Fighting:
-
Steel:
-
Bug:
-
Grass:
-
Rock:
-
Ground:
-
Dragon:
- traits of a dragon are seen. These can range from scales to even a complete wing change (if flying type). The rage also stays with the user, forcing them to learn to control it. Weakness isn't included (haha).
Normal:
-

"Merging" is very dangerous and should never be willingly attempted. It can result in anything from insanity, to even death. Just like evolution, it is a permanent fix and can never be altered or reversed.
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Timeline
*subject to change*
3,509: first sign of unnatural power
- "ignored"
3,518: second sign of unnatural power
- Cryptopolis and its citizens destroyed by P.C.D
- natural disasters become more common
3,520: Chaos declares war over Eucser
- this is the first real war fought in Eucser (named the Great War)
- started in season of fall
- goes on for full year and ends in the winter of 21' (Chaos is victor)
3,521: Chaos's reign over Eucser begins
3,523: First rebellion founded by the Hitmonlee, Zeevo
- members include: Harry, Neo, Mike, Megumi, Pidge, Khold, Rust, Marth, Ryan, Tash, Dana, Leaf, Willaa, Yuron, Ceek, Mally, Bin-sho, Andy, Gavin, Ohnee, and Kate
3,525: War against Chaos declared by the rebellion
- declared on the new year
- goes on for two months (legend and orb help)
- Chaos killed
- half of rebellion also killed, including its founder
3,527: S.F.C founded by ??? (the name of its founder would give away info)
- founder defeated by a member for leadership eight months later
3,530: Rescue Force Vista was founded by the Bulbasaur, Harry
- E.A.U founded by Gentle ten months later in retaliation
3,536: Rescue Force Gateva founded by the Bulbasaur, Harry
- leadership given to the Ampharos, Rossdale
- founded because Rescue Force Vista couldn't handle all the missions alone
- handles northern parts of Eucser
3,542: Grayscale War started (Umbreon, Kain [female] vs. Donphan, Tank [male])
- land dispute
- lasts a year (hardly any help)
- Victor is Kain
3,546: Redblood starts her cleansing of Eucser
3,546: Mercury declared a major threat
- been acting since 41'
- became major threat after obtaining Fire Orb (murders fifty with it as a display of power)
- Perio joined up with him back in 43'
3,552: Current year


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PROLOGUE

~:~:~:Location: Unknown, early morning

“Welcome back Doro,” spoke a deep and ominous voice. It belonged to a powerful psychic type Pokemon that was green, white, and red. His long arms were crossed over one another while his legs were stiff as boards. A long fin sat atop his head while his cheeks extended into two long ‘spikes’. He was a Gallade and by the looks of it, a very powerful one. Before him knelt a dark black hell hound. Two massive pale white horns petruded outwards from his skull, while pale white ridges lined his neck and back. His species were known as Houndoom.

“Thank you sir,” Doro spoke in a raspy and menacing tone. His head was lowered with shut eyes as a way of showing respect to the Gallade.

“Did you locate our target?” asked the Gallade.

“Affirmative. It’s been spotted in E.Change Village in the possession of an Eevee,” responded Doro in a calm but still menacing tone. Seconds of silence passed, resulting in Doro opening his eyes and lifting his head a bit. He noticed that the Gallade he was talking to had an annoyed and questionable expression on his face. “Sir?” he reluctantly asked as he lifted himself into a standing position.

“I don’t see it with you Doro. Did you take it from the Eevee?” asked the Gallade.

“Ne-negative sir.” Doro was now feeling a bit uneasy. This Gallade (his leader) was known for having a short temper.

“Explain.” The air began to feel heavy as the Gallade’s temper stayed leveled. Doro knew that he needed to be careful of what he said because when this happened, it meant trouble. Sure the Gallade sounded calm, but deep inside he was an active volcano ready to erupt.

“Well sir, we had complications on our mission.”

“Complications?”

“Yes sir. The Vista Town Rescue Force came between us and the Eevee. We tried to fight them as best we could but, it was to no avail. We suffered many injuries as well as a casualty… resulting in our retreat,” Doro explained in a stiff voice. The Gallade stared at him, his eyes piercing through into the very fabric of Doro’s mind. It was as if he were invading Doro’s memories to see if he was telling the truth. Backing up a bit, Doro could feel the hot magma jetting up conduit of the volcano inside his leader.

“NOT AGAIN!” erupted the Gallade in a voice so loud, the caverns they were in quivered in fear. “THAT’S THE LAST STRAW! I’LL MAKE SURE THE RESCUE FORCE IS SHUT DOWN AND ALL ITS MEMBERS ARE KILLED, EVEN IF IT KILLS ME!”

~:~:~:Location: Route 12, mid-day

Running as fast as she could, a small kitten Pokemon made her way down the dirt path of Route 12. She was heading from her home town of Nya Town to the ever busy and bustling streets of Vista Town. The small golden bell on her neck released loud dings as it was shaken back and forth. Two small whiskers that sat on her cheeks swayed slightly in the wind as a stub of a tail bounced up and down as she ran. At the same time her mind raced with memories of why she left Nya Town in the first place.

A poster had been hung on the News Wall stating that Vista Town’s Rescue Force would be accepting recruit sign-ups for the next week. Pokemon of all types, sizes, levels and ages were allowed to sign-up for their chance to become a member! They’d be put through tests of stealth, knowledge, and strength as a way of weeding out the promising from the needy.

“I’ve gotta’ get there before sign-ups are closed! Move feline, move!” she mewed as she began pushing herself even harder. She’d only noticed the poster a few days after it had been placed up resulting in the problem of her getting there on time.

Vista Town was a three-day trip from Nya Town when taking Route 6. However the route had been closed off after a great fire in the forest that it coursed through leaving only Route 12 open for travel. This was another major factor to the kits rushing because when taking Route 12, it turned that easy three-day trek into a five-day one because it was longer. The only way she was going to get to Vista in time was by running non-stop and using only one night for sleep.

She was making good time though. She was only a single day away, and there were two days left for sign-ups. She’d already used one of her nights for sleeping, but it didn’t matter to her. Just the thought of possibly becoming a member of the rescue Force was enough to keep her going at a speedy pace.

She was going to make it in time, no matter what!

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This story is already very interesting! I liked the description of the orbs in the first post, and the foreshadowing in the prologue.

Now time to kill typos:

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We tried to fight them as best we could but, it was to no prevail
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A posted had been hung on the News Wall
Poster^^


Anyway, I really wonder what it is that Doro was trying to get from the eevee. I'm guessing it might be one of those orbs, but I'm not sure. RocektMeote seems very determined to make it in time to sign up for the rescue force xD I just hope she's not exhausted by the time she gets there.

And yay! I get to be a character!

Blazefang: You know what would be ironic? If you got badly injured in this story like you did to so many of the characters in your story. TwT

Be quiet.. *pushes Blazefang away* Don't listen to him, he's lying.

I don't know much about the plot yet so I can't really comment on that, but from what I know it sounds like it'll be exciting. I can't wait for the next chapter! ^-^
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Thanks Scy! I knew that prevail wasn't the right word. xD

And yes, you get to be a character. Not a main one per say, but you'll be in this at some point. lol

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I liked it ^^ Gallade sounds like the type who can kill without a second thought 0o Poor Doro. I feel bad for the guy T^T

Typo!


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“THAT’S THE LAST STARW!"
Pretty sure this is supposed to be "straw", unless you invented a new word that has yet to be put in Webster XP

And ker-snap! Mesa a character? 0o I get the feeling she is going to be a little...Er, looney? XD All the other character's better watch out!

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Highly awesome to see it back alive and kickin'.

Great prologue, doesn't move too fast and keeps things steady and interesting. Comparing it to the original, I like the way this one starts off more.
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Highly awesome to see it back alive and kickin'.

Great prologue, doesn't move too fast and keeps things steady and interesting. Comparing it to the original, I like the way this one starts off more.
Excellent! I thought long and hard on how to start this, and the foreshadowing was the best idea out of the many I had. I'm glad I used it. xD

GAH! Another typo! MUST FIX!

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Woo-hoo! And it begins again! \m/

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Excellent! I thought long and hard on how to start this, and the foreshadowing was the best idea out of the many I had.
I know right? ^^ You made a good decision!
I'm with Neo, the beginning was just the right speed to pull you in. I so can't wait for the story to really kick off. ^^

*giggles* A Furret's an awesome character! Kris is thrilled!

Shush Chip! ^^'

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Backing up a bit, Doro could feel the hot magma jetting up conduit of the volcano inside his leader.
Not really a typo, but it kinda didn't make sense.
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The Meote is adorable. <3

Very interesting beginning. I like the Gallade already. :3
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Woo-hoo! And it begins again! \m/



I know right? ^^ You made a good decision!
I'm with Neo, the beginning was just the right speed to pull you in. I so can't wait for the story to really kick off. ^^

*giggles* A Furret's an awesome character! Kris is thrilled!

Shush Chip! ^^'



Not really a typo, but it kinda didn't make sense.
I was basically saying that Doro could feel the anger rising inside his leader. xD Sorry that it was confusing, I was trying to be creative with describing that.

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Oh no! What you were saying made sense. It was the way it was worded! Sorry, guess I'm being confusing now. But, I do that a lot. XD

It was the "jetting up conduit" part that sounded funny to me. ^^'
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Oh, lol. A conduit is the pipe in a volcano. I didn't really feel like saying pipe so I used conduit. I guess it does sound weird though. xD

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Hmm...maybe if you just made it "up a conduit" would work better. Sorry, I'm being picky huh? ^^'
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Oh no no, you're not being picky! I'm glad that you pointed it out! And haha, I just found out what's wrong.

'The' isn't in there. It should be 'up the conduit'. xD

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